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Reincarnation? Wishes? A System? Magic? Harem? Pudding? This story has all of those. Multiverse travel, kingdom building, fan boy dreams come true in this wild story starting in the Harry Potter world. Instantly op character? nope. sharingan at the start? nope. shameless Mc? yep. shameless comedy? yep. NTR. nope.
Just to let everyone know this is my first story English is my native language I planned 0 chapters in this whole book and I literally started writing it because I simple wanted to read it myself. It contains parts from bringing the farm to another world, shadow hack, and supreme Anime system. leave any advice you want I read all comments and try to take them into account.
(disclaimer I only own my characters I personally make) also there will be some grammar errors and some plot holes think of this as a rough draft I'm just winging it basically at this point lol doing well so far tho I plan to go back later to fix small things like speech and paragraphs sometimes I miss things. be gentle it's my first time.
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Oh my god 98 chapters a week and rank 3 as of this moment I am a literal god lol the chapters I'm pushing out per day are just insane whoscompetin
Hey man I'm popping out over 10 chapters a day so far I think I'm doing pretty good for my first time writing a novel look at me now mom lol
I'm sorry but I just can't read this.....he is such a coward. And don't even get me started on how basically everyone can read his fucking thoughts even though his a master of occumency. Like what the ****, It's not even funny anymore it's just plain stupid.
Writing Quality: 4/5 Stability of Updates: 4/5 Story Development: 3/5 Character Design: 1/5 World Background: 4/5 This story is one of better written fanfics on this site and the system is easily understandable yet quite advanced compared to others while the storyline feels a little too much of a copy paste of original so far it's good The one and only problem for the story is a massive one, the mc is absolute trash, there's no redeeming qualities from him so far at ch34 I really want to continue reading this but I can't, it's too frustrating seeing our mc having such a massive amount of resources available to him yet he acts like a fucking retard and fucks around and almost gets himself killed, let me guess, he'll look right into the basilisk eyes later just for the lols or something, that's how retarded he is, he threw a fucking rock cake on a troll and then proceeded to try to dodge the swings instead of you know actually using fucking magic
After 120+ chapters I can honestly say this is one of the worst mc's of all time the mc has 3 of the most overpowered systems ever but somehow this author managed to make them completely useless the mc is a weak pathetic idiot there is 0 character development and most of the chapters are useless filler.
This novel is Pathetic like seriously i am not even kidding . He has like 3 system how many 3. But still dumbass author make him weak and pathetic who sucks Harry potters dick. He says he doesn’t want to make Mc too op to keep story interesting . But when you read the novel you know author is just removing things from his ass. He has gamers mind but still dumbass Author forgets every-time he is scared , shaken, or can’t control his mood despite having Gamers mind. The very beginning chapter when he makes wishes you understand what kind of idiot Mc is . I tried reading it 2 time but cant its literally torture. To be honest this novel is **** . And author compromised the quality for quantity . I wish there were minus rating I would have given them . But sadly this is lowest rating I can give. You can see from the rating this novel is pathetic
It was so good for the first 10-20 chapters then you begin to realize the MC is a complete spineless coward that sits around lazing around talking about how he wants some good life with no worries but it doesn't happen because he continues the running into dangerous situation for every little f****** thing but he's too f****** lazy and stupid to buy anything to make him more powerful so he doesn't have to worry about getting his ass kicked by something as pitiful as a troll And then you go to the twilight world radio acts like a f****** guy version of Bella swan being afraid of every little f****** thing oh and don't get me started on the harem it was pretty good in the earlier chapters because you can still hear the names but now there's so many in his harem that is still devolved to him just saying "I'm going out on a date with the girls" instead of individually saying their names because there's like 20 girls already in his harem and he's only been to like five worlds Not to mention the cultivation world's when it's just the author talking down to his readers constantly
Writing: no paragraphs, no spacing between dialog, just a big bunch of text. Stability: this man has no life outside Story: help everybody! Me? Oh I don't count. (mc) Character: I kept reading, hoping that the MC will get better... NOPE! Just a moron with a system, that remains a moron (telling everybody that he's reincarnated; tells everybody about his cheats; No protections against seers, prophets; Gamer's Mind is nonexistent even though he has it; three systems combined and he does not use them properly; and some more that I can't remember right now) World: It's a fanfic. The world is already there.
I CANT READ SERIOUSLY BECAUSE SHIT WRITING STYLE AND THE MC IS IDIOT AND FOOL, YOU WANT TO BUILD A KINGDOM BUT HE'S WEAK! A KING MUST BE STRONG AND JACK OF ALL TRADES AND MASTER OF NONE AND WHAT THE USE OF SYSTEM? JUST LIKE TO SEE HIS STATUS? TSK AND GAMER MIND? HE PANIC ALL THE TIME WHEN CRISIS ARISES LIKE IN THE TROLL ARC TSK WEAK
Usually, I like to read power fantasies but this is a weak mc disguised as an OP power fantasy mc. He literally has master grade occulmancy but literally EVERONE who is not dumbledore and snape and rando's can read his mind. Like WHY? 1/10
Worst fanfic i read in a while :( The mc got 3 systems but barely use them,he got gamer mind but it doesn't work at all,11 years since he is reborn but barely trained, follow totally the canon story(30 chapters and the only thing different is saving the mother of luna...),don't use is brain at all(know all the major plot of the hp universe but don't prepare at all(troll)),i could keep going but the last thing i will write is it's the worst mc i ever read about(1000+ fanfic read). Iusually don't write review but i take the time to write this one to tell people to never start reading this *****. Don't lose your time, you can find a lot better to pass time, and don't listen to the author who tell you that only the 20 first chapter are like this , it's all the f***ing story ...
Well it had the qq farm system that is from one of my favorites novels and that's why i could still keep reading untill chapter 34, but the mc isn't likeable at all he doesn't take anything seriously,he's a coward, he doesn't use his systems at all to get stronger, when he almost died to a troll and continued being an idiot that doesn't take anything seriously at all i just couldn't keep reading anymore =/. I don't know if things change later but i'm not coming back to this if the author wants to write about a weak and spineless mc then don't give him a system even more when they are op as ****. If i were to give an iq to the mc it would be a negative one.
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Sad to hear that some **** novels got over 400+ chapters and good novel just like 10 Sad to hear that some **** novels got over 400+ chapters and good novel just like 10 Sad to hear that some **** novels got over 400+ chapters and good novel just like 10
The story is interesting and has good potential at the beginning. The idea of bringing the farm into another world system is really good. But I'm already coming to a major problem, it's unreadable (there's a wall of text in the chapters, no capitalization for the beginning of some sentences, punctuation is sometimes non-existent, chapter names sometimes mean nothing). Now concerning the story itself it started slowly and only became really interesting after about 20 chapters, which is regrettable, but it is better to build a story with a good basis. Some things about the story are not bad, but what bothers me is the Mc who is quite stupid, clear and simple, he has so many resources but doesn't even use a fraction of them and is too lazy to train even when he can make his shadows train for him, he still doesn't take it seriously and gets beaten by beginners who are even later, he decimates more than 60 dead eaters and kills them all and that's before he gets a good training and now in the 2nd world, he chose the twilight and honestly; it's probably the worst decision the author could have made, he's flinching at all the vampire eyes, which is a serious problem for a world that's not one of the most gory and terrifying. Overall, an average novel that needs a publisher quickly, but I think it has good potential, the author is also very active with more than 60 chapters in 4 days. Ps: I read the synopsis well so I know the author is a beginner and this novel is a bit of a draft but to improve it, you have to give constructive criticism.
The Idea of bringing farm into another world system is really good. But when the MC start to going all friendly with canon MC and going gryffindork on sorting I stop reading. MC was like I dont want to be OP and stay low key but he was like I want to befriend harry and save people O.O btw he also share his secret including before rebirth.
Trash novel that’s written as the MC is a speaking to the reader and the MC is a retard. Its basically unreadable. Don’t know how it got to 400+ chapters.
Bro did you ever imagine if hulk thinks that by fighting in hilk form is too easy and so he starts fighting as Bruce banner. Your novel seems same bro you make mc op but when fighting he didn't even come in middle of the chart. He don't use his powers and don't use his weapons fights with hands and you say that there is no need an Excalibur for gobli. But you still use hands when fighting high level monsters and say that they can one hit ko mc. Are you really kidding me bbro...,............
Although it begins in the best way and gives you hope in it, it ends up deseecting you as it progresses, it does not pay attention to the correct use of the powers of the protagonist (who even explains them and then forgets them) implies a plan for continue for the story that then goes through the eggs, the character does not evolve at any time, he is weak, fearful (he is terrified of heights, he is nervous, he is often ashamed, he shows too much his emotions, they can read his mind, etc; and that has the passive ability of the player's mind) and with delusions of greatness claiming to be a king when at the most and is a deku a little more serious. Prota's love affairs are good, Luna is a good wife for the protagonist, Tonks and Daphne. In short, it is a good story but you will be irritated by those errors as the plot progresses, especially if you read shadow hack and the farm before this story, personally I do not recommend it until I solve those minimal errors that give **** to this story that could be good among harry potter's isekai. In addition to the repeated paragraphs that all they do is confuse you.
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This was terrible. I couldn't get past the first chapter, so utterly incoherent. I hate that I love these fanfics with reincarnation because they're all so badly written barring a few exceptions. It's awful.
The only good thing about this novel is the number of chapters and update frequency. Thats probably the only reason ppl are reading it. Now onto the story review,the mc is a guy that has a multiverse system that has a qq farm from the novel as well as the shadow hack.What does he do with his cheats? Nothing he doesn absolutely nothing,im not kidding when i say nothing,its not like those mc that dont abuse their system,the mc literally does nothing with his cheat.He doesnt get strong at all in the first 100 chapters which is the harry potter world.What he does do is basically suck hp's dick and his friends all story long.Whatever he worked hard to get,guess what ? He becomes a tooth fairy and gets it for everyone with a soul in the story.He is basically the cheat for the hp world for everyone.Guess since he doesnt abuse it for himself,he might as well let others abuse it for themselves right? Now that if that isnt infuriating then we get the whole lets reveal everything to everyone trope,yeah he shows everyone what makes him special etc,why bother with the mind arts if youre gonna reveal everything lol We spend 100 chapters of him basically being the same as any other character in hp probably even worst,he isnt smart,he isnt talented he has a lot of problems but his system can fix it but he doesnt do so heh. Now we have the next world,a world with vampires and werewolf in it.Guess what he does in such a dangerous world where he can be killed in a moment's notice? He doesnt get supernatural powers from his system oh no he doesnt capitalize on it at all.He chooses to stay human and play mysterious only to almost die from a accident. Pathetic,did i mention he is scared of needles too? Overall this novel has a useless mc that is a doormat for every single character in every world,probably gonna be a doormat for the characters in the next world too.He is already trying to abuse his system so his vampire crush's problem could be fix rofl.