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Our character was born Neville Longbottom in Harry Potter. His courage, his wisdom and his skills help him defeat Lord Voldemort and change the entire saga of Harry Potter. He is Neville the brave lion!
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I really like the beginning and the story has potential. MC explains that one cannot become strong by learning all my spells but by affinity, and above all he has no golden fingers or system! I have high hopes for this fanfiction. question, are you going to have a romance?
It's not bad. The grammar is average for a fanfic on this app, which means it's barely readable. The problem with this story is that it's entirely too bland and slow-paced. Not only the plot, but the story-telling method is very bland. The story reads like one giant summary. And what little dialogue exists doesn't provide any differentiation between characters. If the author didn't denote who's speaking the reader wouldn't be able to tell because all of the characters have the same "personality" when it comes to dialogue. As far as pacing goes, I mean we're more than 80 2,000-word chapters in and they're still in second year... so make of that what you will
Yay ,Edgelord Neville Longbottom Joy ,,,,,,,,,,, , , , , , , , , ,, , , , , , , , , , , , ,, , , , . .... .......... .......
This is my second fanfic. Weekly update and very long chapters. It's dark and not funny or sext or anything. The MC is not a hero but anti one. Don't expect romance and unicorn thing. Peace out. Also check my other fanfic. You won't regret it anyway.
The story is good and everything, but there is a small problem: the author continues it on patreon, which means that you will not be able to read it and to make things even worse, if you go to Pantreon, it does not allow you to read it completely and only allows you to read up to chapter 26. something that I do not see any sense when here it is so advanced
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Thanks, you deserve five stars just for picking this character as your mc as it has rarely been done, and when it is, it quickly dropped. Please hold on and continue....... I have enjoyed the read so far.
still didn't read it but i like the idea keep it up .........................,...................... ........ ..............................
I tried to get past the summary, I mean,Looks like he's the one specifically going to kill Voldemort without thinking about the consequence (hocrux in Potter's head) I stopped at chapter 9.the MC is too arrogant and he acts illogically, if he wants to become an assassin of death eaters, he must be discreet, with his arrogance he attracts more attention than Potter and that's a hard thing to do. He keeps showing up, catches Ollivander's attention, Dumbledore, Snape ect as if it was the second coming of Jesus He acts like Tony Stark before he got blown up. It's such a shame that I can't continue, it's the first time I've found an MC Neville. ....
I loved your novel until the mc called Hagrid a smelly professor and wanted to steal his dragon egg, it is not personal. Hagrid is just my favourite HP character, that is my reason for dropping. Note to author; you can improve your click rate by using a spell checker. not to make you feel down about writing... Your English just needs some more work. You have potential.
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Not bad. Grammar kinda sucks. MC being a edgelord is pretty lame. World building is plain and simple, cannon keypionts are ignored but that’s ok.
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I really enjoyed this story, I hope that the author will write a book two for this because this one went off the rails and I loved it! Very good story can hardly wait for more!
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Really still Gryffindor??? You’re just following the canon and even making a bushy haired girl his romantic interest. boring. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]