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Reborn into One Piece, Soren swears to himself that when he dies his name will strike fear or reverence into the heart of anyone who hears it.
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As an author you have to make the story believable so that the readers remain invested in the story. Granted this is a fanfiction and you might not be a proffesional author, but due to some things in the fanfiction I wasnt able to continue. Author, you have full freedom on how to write ur MC. But the thing in this story is that MC's motivation, actions and history dont line up. MC is someone who was tortured (gruesomely tortured) while he was a slave and he himself said it outloud that he would slaughter world nobles especially his slave owner when he escapes. But what does he actually do when he gets the chance to do that, he just slashes his slave owners face. I could have bought this if MC was icky about killing, but u just stated a chapter before that he killed so many people while in arena that his kill count was much bigger than pirates. This forces us readers to reason with commonsense as to why he might have done that. Either u should change MC motivation to make it in line with his actions. Anyway try this novel and see if it is for you. I didnt pick up any errors in the writing so that was a pro. I also liked the pacing of the story, it wasnt too fast nor too slow, this is subjective but I liked the pace. I might come back when there is more chapters and if the author improved his MCs character design. Good luck author and Hope u dont feel demotivated by this review and I hope u keep writing, I just wanted to point out some flaws in writing the author could improve on. 😊👍
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the mc after the tragic backstory pretty much just runs around and says hey dude be my teacher, then hey other dude be my teacher, then hey dude be my captain .... story is kinda meh... mc basically doesn't interact with people and we just get a story of mc running around getting stronger while occasionally speaking to what might as well be a statue that's totally okay with whatever mc want's.
Plot holes, nerfed characters, unnecessary word count like songs(reading music includes a music sheet and even then, not everyone can read a music sheet. Authors should know that reading music is different from reading literature). Mc trait: I am so lucky, all according to plan even when my plan sucks, I am stronk
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MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. MC is too stupid. Nothing else matters.
It's pretty good so far. Though at points the training yield doesn't really make sense. His Observation only improved by a few meters over 3 years, granted, he didn't have a teacher like Luffy but come on now. 3 years of constant fighting torture should yield much more. Other than that, the fruit power is quite interesting and the story is pretty good so far. I wish the update schedule is a bit more frequent but overall it is a good start.
let's start judging this fanfic. from writing i think it is quite healthy for my eyes. but unfortunately MC is almost like a chinese novel which has thousands of chapters. You know the contents of a Chinese novel of thousands of chapters, right? you could say mc is stupid, mc has great strength but terrible nerf from the author, mc is tragically self-made and in the end there is a chance to be strong is a sin so scram writers won't make it strong at least until a few chapters like mc china is stupid. actually I thought maybe the author could make a wukia fanfic on atg or other wukia. for one piece a bit strange in my opinion. the point here contains bad nerfs and stupid mc. I stopped reading at 20 chapters.
the more the story goes on, the further become trash 😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒
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hmm, this novel is the worst FF novel I have ever read, there is no sense of adventure, no excitement, there are only bad boys who try to destroy the world and the timeline in the name of justice or change
No wonder this story has a good overall Review with the many fakes or repeats 63 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,9663 213,96
Very bad, seems to me that the mc doesnt rlly plan out his action and the dialogue and writing style is atrocious, it makes scenes that could be fun or interessting and a pain to read. Very rushed story and mc is written kinda like a crack mc or atleast an extremely gary sue mc
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props to the author for completing this fic, MC is a pathetic simp that would kowtow to a slave, Timeline errors, wrong facts. There's really nothing about this novel that would make any reader go past 10 chapters yet author completed it. That's something else.
this is an unrealistic and unbelievable story even with the One piece's standards, it lacks the details and the why and the how of things.
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Good fan fic I stop reading it till the smut scene please Add 18+ tags so pepole know but this fanfic is great .............. .................
So...4 years of torture, starvation, and forced slaughtering of other humans(PIRATES AND OTHER, probably innocent slaves) against his own will and all he does is just slash her across the face just once? I know. He will take proper revenge in the future, but just one slash after so much torture and suffering. I don't know what to feel, honestly.
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