/ Book&Literature / ATG Redux: 'Average' Young Master
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First of all, English is not my primary language and there will be spelling and writing mistakes!
Oh, and I don't have an Editor, so there are wording mistakes!
Synopsis:
Reborn as average Clan Member Xiao Long tries to be as average as possible, but things start to derail when you awaken a system.
After all, when you have a system you are the MC. Regardless, of the system, Xiao Long will try to continue to be what he always suppose to be...just an Average Young Master
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I never drop reviews, rarely even, but I have to say, just don't drop. Please🙏. This is hands down the best ATG fanfic I've read
In what way is this average young master? Don't you know the meaning of average? Fine he hid his cultivation but all the bigshot and his harem knows his true cultivation so whats the point of hiding it? Just to face slap some younger gen cultivator? What a misleading title hence the low rating
I regret reading all the advance chapters in discord. Now, I need to wait for more. Fu##!!!!!!!!!!! As always, Author create another amazing stories. Pls. Dont drop
Writing quality is good except for a few wrong grammar and spelling. Idk anything about the updates Story development is like slice of life a little too slow to my liking Hated the MC's naive way of thinking and showing all of his secrets except for the system. Imagine not leaving a trump card for yourself and just bare it all for others to see World background is just ATG
Maybe this is an ATG fanfic with a slice of life where the storyline is relaxed and it's so relaxed that you get tired of reading it. So far his strength development is quite different from the OG version of his own ATG which is to increase strength through diligent cultivation and inheritance. Whereas this uses an enhancement method from another xianxia world that is using pills. so much explanation thank you.
Another great ATG fic by Dragon. "Man against the Gods" is by far the Best ATG ff I have ever read. And this one goes even above and beyond that. I didn't know that I liked this genre until I tried this. On to the details:Writing Quality(5/5): The author is no amatuer. He's been writing for a while and that shows. Forget about grammar and spelling(it has none of that issue)... the writing style itself is engaging, it's relatable and a reader can flow through the writing. In my opinion it is a good example of "Show, don't tell" while still avoiding jargons in the text to meet a word count quota. The ratio of dialogues and narration is just great.Story development (5/5): This is probably my favourite part. Because most of the ATG ff I've read pretty much follow the same path as YC. Meanwhile here Author doesn't shy away from getting his hands dirty or sidetracking from his destined path. But in essence he created a totally new story with a MC with a totally different perspective than the cultivation pros while not losing the actual essence of ATG world. Basically it is a new story inside the ATG world.Character Design(4.8/5): I love it when fanfiction authors deviate from canon while still keeping the source world integrity stable. It is particularly hard to execute in wish fulfilment fics as at one point the world gets changed so much that you don't really get anything of the source material anymore. Here we have a MC from modern times, with many other experiences. His focus is not cultivation but clan building. What's norm for the cultivators is ridiculous to him. Does that stop him from doing his own thing? Absolutely not. Does he wait and gloat his superior methods on anyone's face? He doesn't have time for that. He simply does what he does best and strives for more. In turn leaving the arrogant ones in the dust. let's leave MC and get to the side characters... It's gonna be a massive harem and that's to be expected of a clan building fic. He acquires a lot of women. and not everyone gets enough screen time. But the important ones are thoroughly fleshed out. Even more than the original, they aren't simple cultivation machine with 1d persona. Here they have their own crafts, hobbies, wants and needs. They have depth to their character.Updating Stability(5/5): You check for yourself. The published dates should be enough of indication about the consistency. World Background(4.9/5): It's your standard world of ATG with some modern ideas modified for 'profound' things sprinkled in the background. Some are exciting, some are not. But that's a matter of personal preference. One thing though. Unlike the original here you don't unlock world phase by phase and forget about the previous part behind. Here it's much more focused on getting all things together. Making it cohesive rather that layered.Overall a great ATG story that I'd recommend to every ATG fan.
Excellent story with great writing quality and world background not to mention the consistent update, The character design and the way you present their emotions and thoughts are quite entertaining and life-like not to mention how the main characters unique thought process has led to him being able to make world changing pills and artifacts with simple items or even mixing separate fields such as alchemy and runes. Overall the story is amazing and I am sure as the plot progresses into the higher realms the quality of the story will only continue to improve with Xiao Long gaining access to new materials and legacies
The story is very entertaining and relaxed. It could be said that it focuses more on how the MC develops more of his abilities and how he uses them to break the common sense of the world in which he finds himself. But you can understand why, the MC thinks outside the box and doesn't focus on increasing his strength with the already established methods. The "how can I improve certain aspects of cultivation" is always present, be it with alchemy, matrices, etc. I especially liked that he is realizing the importance of the energy that everyone uses to cultivate, he understands that it is moldable, it can have different attributes, present in everything. Basically, he's achieving "The Dao Of Profound Energy" hehe. The harem could be said to be a secondary bonus, it's not that relevant apart from getting girls (Pokemon), but I really like the interactions he has with his wife and the occasional girl. Especially, the point of view of the girls means that they are not just decorative vases, with this it is understood that they exist and have personality. I recommend improving the interactions with the other characters, since the novel could become a monologue of the MC. Of course not everyone wants chapters with unimportant dialogue, but at the same time it gives the other characters an authentic flavor. For example, I like the MC's first wife, her inner thoughts of being jealous of her or her acting spoiled is nice. I'm not an author, so not how hard it is to make those small changes. But you can say that this fan-fic has potential, so the author should take his time and decide if it is feasible to achieve them and not go against what he seeks to convey in this fan-fic. You can't have the best of both worlds. So I'll see where this fan-fic goes.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I don't read much cultivation related fan-fic but after reading it I knew.....It was perfect ..Yeah but as I said it WAS perfect untill it got into Pokemon collection. I don't have hate to "Harem" genre or "Romance". I can tolerate upto 4 ya 5 myself being a "Single romance" guy. But above that ...it's meaning less. Like plot moves around MC and collecting females like this will make fic's value drop you know just becomes a "Gotta catch them all" and it's sad to find out a good fic downgrade. Story development is great, word quality and grammar stuff are also too nice. It's a great read minus this Pokemon collection thing. Overall experience: Fic's great, nice read, had a good laugh. Ps. If the Harem is controlled like concentrated to 5 or 6 this will become a wonderful fan-fic. Hope you guys have good read ahead 👍
plz don't drop this like your other stories because this is a very good fanfic plz complete it 🙏💯
I already read ahead on your discord, I really enjoy your story. The writing style is great and the user is OP right at the beginning. I lool forward on how thia develops.
It is very good, for me it is a breath of fresh air since the mc is dedicated to exploring deep energy and not only for fights and others, but also to create things (which I loved) exploring matrices, runes, language, etc It is no longer a common cultivation story where as long as you are one kingdom higher you are the maximum, this story for me was about an ingenious mc where he takes advantage of everything and exploits it, something that is rarely done in cultivation novels. Are there other novels like this? Where the Mc does not focus so much on fighting but on creating things, for example machines, matrices, science fiction things, etc. [Google translator]
I love it, I think this story shows your growth as a writer in more ways than one. The only problem I have is discord xD. I already joined, but I can't seem to find any stories, I don't have access.
Dude become too OP and his way of alchemy is reasonable till first 20 chapters and after that it becomes more unrealistic unlike DxD Fanfics of author this much of improvement without anything to normal herbs even with how idiotic cultivators are just getting such a great pills from one ingredient doesn't make sense even after he started using two herbs he just make more OP version of Previous Pills he created from one ingredient it's like not alchemy but concept manipulation by using ingredients whichs how dwarves made gleipnir in mythology based on cat paw mark and other useless things in forging. Yet this story is still great except pills being too OP with being made of one ingredient while Yun Che who mastered Li Suo's Light Arts can't do such a thing with even Sky Poison Pearl
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It's nice to read a novel of yours based on ATG's verse again, it's always refreshing. I hope you can finish this great fanfic :) :) :) :) :)
This is really good. no problem with grammar, the story pulls you in, and the MC is very interesting, can hardly wait for next update.....................