Avatar, In A Darker World

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Binge_Reader69

not badly written but i cant stand stories where the mc gets put into a world from a show/game and then treats it like it isnt real and the author uses that for character development, its a stupid trope and instantly ruins stories

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Lucas_Oliveira_2302

I'll be honest, the introduction didn't really give me much motivation to read or was to my liking, as well as the system tag making me a little wary as it's not really something I like, plus it doesn't take place in the original universe. and yes in an AU, that being said I will still make my effort to read this fanfiction and see if I can appreciate it for 2 reasons, 1. you are a great author so you will almost certainly be able to write a good story for this universe and 2. this is one of my favorite animated universes as it has a great story and great elements to be explored, and I have a question since you're doing an avatar fanfiction in Aang's era now, will you do one in Korra's era in the future too?

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Benyx

Just wanted to post a review of this story so far. I have to say it’s a novel story set in the world all things considered. The MC isn’t rushing off to either join Azula or Aang’s group or even Zuko. The MC’s cheat or “power” is very well balanced and gives him a chance to make a reasonable progression to personal power, while keeping it believable and entertaining. It also allows for further growth in unexpected ways perhaps even leaving room for the MC to grow “OP” but that doesn’t seem to be happening anytime soon at least not without us seeing the MC put in the work to get there. I have really enjoyed reading this work so far and wanted to say thank you to the author for writing it. Having a character explore the Avatar world while working towards a defined end goal is very enjoyable and I hope you keep up the fantastic work. In regards to your comment about people recommending ways Luca could grow his power, have you read the Wandering Prince by sinereal? Personally I find what they have written on energy bending, in their story as well as the interactions with chi and fire to be very interesting and a way Luca could gain other skills, such as running into the two dragons and mastering the different colors of fire. And perhaps the different colors have different aspects of fire. Anyways just a thought but overall, excited to read more and everytime I see a chapter it makes my day.

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Sami_Alfoheday

love it the first 2 chapters I was gonna quit but after that the story is goooooood

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Praise_TheSun

Very good ff please don’t drop this one like everyone else who does avatar

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LoserIam

Not trying to glaze, but this is already pretty much one of the best atla fics I have ever read. Now let's analyse why I gave this a 5 star review. Writing quality: 5.0 I don't have my immersion broken in the middle of the chapter, except for the occasional author's note which has done nothing to bother me so far. The grammar is top notch, the spelling is as well and the author doesn't abruptly switch from present to past tense or the other way around. Story development: 5.0 Not too fast nor does it take an eternity to move on which is good. We aren't confused about what is going on either and everything is straight forward or is explained by the Author in detail. We see through the P.O.V of multiple characters which also allows a more immersive read. Character design: 5.0 The MC is well done, he has a clear set of objectives and moral alignments in his head that have been respected (to my knowledge), his power has been established and has been respected or at least, he hasn't gotten a BS power up yet that doesn't align with his original set of powers either which is good and should stay that way. Updating stability: 5.0 Extremely consistent, I don't value the amount of chapters posted in a week (I do very much, but it doesn't factor in this rating) but if it is done consistently (3 chap in a week just to not post the next 4 months for example is what I mean by inconsistency). Summary: It's very good, don't drop this and update soon pls! Otherwise... World Background: 5.0 It's Atla, what did you expect? Besides until now the Author has been faithful to the original in terms of locations and such (correct me if I'm wrong)

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Brazert

Прочитал я это. Могу сказать что такого *Хаоса* в писательстве я ещë не читал, выглядит так как будто сам автор не знает что писать, и просто пишет что в голову придет. Слишком много лишнего, раскрытие персонажей идет слишком долго, можно сказал у них отдельная арка, как по мне это тупо и бредово. Короче, скажу что тут главный герой не знает чего хочет, короче он тупой камень. Если хотите потратить свое время причем зря, прошу.

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InternetSaint

Basically "God gives me WISHES" story with extra steps and even more rtarded.

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HOLYHAMSTER

man this fic ruined other fic for me man reading other fic isn't exiting anymore

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grimtide

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ISLAPSOMEONEBALLS

I dont know why but I kinda like this fic so I'mma asked you real quick............ Can I have have a permission to translate this fic into my language, Thai? It's kinda like my hobby now lately. Pls read this pls I want to get my hand busy

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ajin_2002

is the MC a firebender? i am only at chapter 5

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PieceofSh1tApp

Good development from the story and really interesting premise. The mc is pretty realistic and likeable. I like it.

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IDLE_Khaos

So far this story has been interesting, keep it up 😁👍

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WilsterPendragon

hey my friend it's kinda good for me 🤣 that's all for me I don't know how to rate novel 😂

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Uchiha_Tomirama

sigh alas ...............................

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Lordmoonlight

The story so far otherwise from the little thing we talk about with the world being a trial is great I can’t wait to see how the plot will go mc hasn’t realized from he got to the world the butterfly effect is taking place and glad about that most writers forget that when you add a new element to a story every else can’t be the same every action will have a reaction and I’m glad we get to see that in this fic