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it looks interesting but I'd recommend you go through and fix up the writing a bit the Grammer isn't bad a few mistakes here and there it's just the structure of the writing needs a bit of work if you make it more smooth for the readers this story could pop off I can tell you love this story and it looks good it just needs a bit of a touch up also I'd recommend you go through and fix the Grammer mistakes in the beginning especially so it draws people in more. I do wish you all the luck on this story and your adventure as a writer.
it looks interesting but I'd recommend you go through and fix up the writing a bit the Grammer isn't bad a few mistakes here and there it's just the structure of the writing needs a bit of work if you make it more smooth for the readers this story could pop off I can tell you love this story and it looks good it just needs a bit of a touch up also I'd recommend you go through and fix the Grammer mistakes in the beginning especially so it draws people in more. I do wish you all the luck on this story and your adventure as a writer.