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I love this book! It starts out a bit confusing at first but quickly gets really interesting. Can’t recommend it enough
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The Sss grade skill + determination + handsome = all out op. make more great story in this novel.
I do very much enjoy this novel and think it's pretty good! But that doesn't mean I don't have constructive criticism for you as an author. Let's start with the positives: 1) You pay attention to the math/stats! It always bugs me when authors of LitRPGs mess up the math for stats, skills, damage numbers, etc. 2) The main character still struggles despite being OP. My favorite characters are the kind that are OP, but never OP enough, which requires them to keep getting stronger. Now for some negatives/constructive criticism: 1) The main character, John, has no backstory from before he started playing the game. After he regresses, we don't know whether he has any friends, family, a job, debts, responsibilities, etc. These things are important to forming an understanding of a character and how they became who they are. For example, being an orphan could mean he learned self-reliance and to be tough. Which could then translate into why he never wanted to submit to the gods later. 2) The R18/Naughty scenes, while not bad, are kind of all the same. It's him dominating until she begs for mercy and him not being fully satisfied even when the woman has much higher stats than him. Mix it up a little. Sini is always asking for help, so maybe do a threesome or more. Maybe have him actually be satisfied for once. 3) The world building is very odd and vaguely defined. It supposedly takes place on Earth in the year 2025(meaning next year), but the Earth it shows us is so vastly different from the one we know of. There's noble families that control multiple countries, ancient martial families that are above even them, empires, full-dive game pods that allow people to game for months on end with negative effects on people's health, slavery is seemingly an accepted practice, etc. None of this is explained very well since the focus is on the game world. So, I'm wondering why all this overly complicated world building for Earth is even here. Maybe simplify the worldbuilding for Earth and focus the worldbuilding on the game world. The game world is more interesting anyway. It's not easy doing worldbuilding for multiple worlds in one novel. Novels like "The Death Mage Who Doesn't Want A Fourth Time" prove it can be done, but that's an exception, not the rule. 4) The side characters are not that helpful to the MC John, despite how much they and he tries to make them helpful. It's mostly him dragging them along to level up while they can't help much. They don't have to be as strong as the main character, but they should at least be able to lighten his load. But they can't seem to do that. None of them can keep up with him or contribute to him in any meaningful way. If you want good examples of how to make side characters that are helpful to the main character after the main character invests in making them stronger to help him out, then read any of Toika/Toy Car's novels. All of them are great LitRPGs with side characters that are not just side characters to the main character. They are his irreplaceable partner in battle. They compliment each other for their weaknesses and shortcomings. They know that the main character can't be everywhere at once or take on the entire world by themselves. And the banter between them is some of the most enjoyable parts of the novels! I know this is a lot to read and kudos to you author if you read it all. I write all this because I believe that you have the potential to do even better. This novel is already quite enjoyable, and it(or even another later work of yours) could be even better!
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Wonder full novel, Really good for passing time and chilling. The main character is also Op. And the novel is fast paced( not too much). Please continue the work author. 👍🤝
Love this story and how it is progressing, the character design is really good. The OPness of the John makes things so much more interesting. The writing style is engaging. read my story and comment as well "Flames of Destiny: The Path of Arin"
El MC es decepcionante, demasiado ingenuo para ser un reencarnado. Se pasa la vida actuando con calma, ayudando a subir a otros de nivel, y perdiendo el tiempo jugando en lugar de tryhardear y subir de nivel sabiendo que el mundo (y su vida) está en peligro y la cuenta atrás ya ha empezado. Pero es que no se queda ahí la cosa, sino que actua contra traidores de su vida pasada y perdona la vida de una familia porque "es secular y atacarla podría afectar a los civiles del mundo". Que ocurrió? Efectivamente, conspiraron contra el mc, secuestraron a su mujer, se fueron a otro mundo y han puesto la tierra en jaque aumentando su dificultad por 10.
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great story. power system seems kinda backwards given the sheer number of attributes being plundered. the biggest problem though are the terrible lewd scenes. worst I've ever read hands down. not even a single one is good.
I really like this book so far and hope it keeps going! But there r 2 things that suck.. the first is that some pages take more then 1 pass or take a lot of coins... like can u not be so greedy!! And the secis about the book.... Y is the MCs attitude kinda a shity especially when hes screwing the girls!!?? He doesnt give a shit if there im pain or not and honestly its bullshit and something needs to be done about it!! It doesnt matter if its a book or real life u dont to what the MC is doing and for an author ti actually write something like this shows what kind of person u r and its going to make people not want to read anything u put out!!
This is not review but a invite of many different comments from different areas of our world. I am going to write a novel called Survivors of the Apocalypse [Mankind Divided] Based around every single religions apocalypse or end of days beginning all at once, the story will be made like World War Z with all its different Stories hopefully with the aid of all of you adding your input about different aspects and religions , All the stories will come together in my planed ending arc that will have all of Humanity{religions and governments left} unite in the end of days that will begin my next Novel Breakers of the Apocalypse [Mankind United] that will have all of humanity fighting together to end the apocalypse . Thanks for reading this hope for support .This comment will be posted on multiple Novel Comment sections don't worry not a bot just copy and paste.
Are you planning on having him collect all the immortal, demon and God treasures and is he gonna combine them all and is there any more types of treasures like that? Because that would be interesting and so far the novel is pretty good
muito bommm, simplesmente ADOREI tudo nesse livro!!! Maravilhoso!!!
The best thing about this novel is its pacing. In 200 chapters MC of other novels usually just crosses newbie phase, while here it's almost endgame near ch. 230. The plot is decent enough. Cons - - Worst R 18 scenes I've seen. Like seriously author bro if ur gonna copy paste at least copy from someone else's novel. All your scenes are exactly the same with only different names. - Inconsistent names used I recommend it if u can ignore the cons
I love this book! It starts out a bit confusing at first but quickly gets really interesting. Can’t recommend it enough
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The Sss grade skill + determination + handsome = all out op. make more great story in this novel.
I do very much enjoy this novel and think it's pretty good! But that doesn't mean I don't have constructive criticism for you as an author. Let's start with the positives: 1) You pay attention to the math/stats! It always bugs me when authors of LitRPGs mess up the math for stats, skills, damage numbers, etc. 2) The main character still struggles despite being OP. My favorite characters are the kind that are OP, but never OP enough, which requires them to keep getting stronger. Now for some negatives/constructive criticism: 1) The main character, John, has no backstory from before he started playing the game. After he regresses, we don't know whether he has any friends, family, a job, debts, responsibilities, etc. These things are important to forming an understanding of a character and how they became who they are. For example, being an orphan could mean he learned self-reliance and to be tough. Which could then translate into why he never wanted to submit to the gods later. 2) The R18/Naughty scenes, while not bad, are kind of all the same. It's him dominating until she begs for mercy and him not being fully satisfied even when the woman has much higher stats than him. Mix it up a little. Sini is always asking for help, so maybe do a threesome or more. Maybe have him actually be satisfied for once. 3) The world building is very odd and vaguely defined. It supposedly takes place on Earth in the year 2025(meaning next year), but the Earth it shows us is so vastly different from the one we know of. There's noble families that control multiple countries, ancient martial families that are above even them, empires, full-dive game pods that allow people to game for months on end with negative effects on people's health, slavery is seemingly an accepted practice, etc. None of this is explained very well since the focus is on the game world. So, I'm wondering why all this overly complicated world building for Earth is even here. Maybe simplify the worldbuilding for Earth and focus the worldbuilding on the game world. The game world is more interesting anyway. It's not easy doing worldbuilding for multiple worlds in one novel. Novels like "The Death Mage Who Doesn't Want A Fourth Time" prove it can be done, but that's an exception, not the rule. 4) The side characters are not that helpful to the MC John, despite how much they and he tries to make them helpful. It's mostly him dragging them along to level up while they can't help much. They don't have to be as strong as the main character, but they should at least be able to lighten his load. But they can't seem to do that. None of them can keep up with him or contribute to him in any meaningful way. If you want good examples of how to make side characters that are helpful to the main character after the main character invests in making them stronger to help him out, then read any of Toika/Toy Car's novels. All of them are great LitRPGs with side characters that are not just side characters to the main character. They are his irreplaceable partner in battle. They compliment each other for their weaknesses and shortcomings. They know that the main character can't be everywhere at once or take on the entire world by themselves. And the banter between them is some of the most enjoyable parts of the novels! I know this is a lot to read and kudos to you author if you read it all. I write all this because I believe that you have the potential to do even better. This novel is already quite enjoyable, and it(or even another later work of yours) could be even better!
ネタバレを明かす Wonder full novel, Really good for passing time and chilling. The main character is also Op. And the novel is fast paced( not too much). Please continue the work author. 👍🤝
Love this story and how it is progressing, the character design is really good. The OPness of the John makes things so much more interesting. The writing style is engaging. read my story and comment as well "Flames of Destiny: The Path of Arin"
El MC es decepcionante, demasiado ingenuo para ser un reencarnado. Se pasa la vida actuando con calma, ayudando a subir a otros de nivel, y perdiendo el tiempo jugando en lugar de tryhardear y subir de nivel sabiendo que el mundo (y su vida) está en peligro y la cuenta atrás ya ha empezado. Pero es que no se queda ahí la cosa, sino que actua contra traidores de su vida pasada y perdona la vida de una familia porque "es secular y atacarla podría afectar a los civiles del mundo". Que ocurrió? Efectivamente, conspiraron contra el mc, secuestraron a su mujer, se fueron a otro mundo y han puesto la tierra en jaque aumentando su dificultad por 10.
ネタバレを明かす great story. power system seems kinda backwards given the sheer number of attributes being plundered. the biggest problem though are the terrible lewd scenes. worst I've ever read hands down. not even a single one is good.
I really like this book so far and hope it keeps going! But there r 2 things that suck.. the first is that some pages take more then 1 pass or take a lot of coins... like can u not be so greedy!! And the secis about the book.... Y is the MCs attitude kinda a shity especially when hes screwing the girls!!?? He doesnt give a shit if there im pain or not and honestly its bullshit and something needs to be done about it!! It doesnt matter if its a book or real life u dont to what the MC is doing and for an author ti actually write something like this shows what kind of person u r and its going to make people not want to read anything u put out!!
This is not review but a invite of many different comments from different areas of our world. I am going to write a novel called Survivors of the Apocalypse [Mankind Divided] Based around every single religions apocalypse or end of days beginning all at once, the story will be made like World War Z with all its different Stories hopefully with the aid of all of you adding your input about different aspects and religions , All the stories will come together in my planed ending arc that will have all of Humanity{religions and governments left} unite in the end of days that will begin my next Novel Breakers of the Apocalypse [Mankind United] that will have all of humanity fighting together to end the apocalypse . Thanks for reading this hope for support .This comment will be posted on multiple Novel Comment sections don't worry not a bot just copy and paste.
Are you planning on having him collect all the immortal, demon and God treasures and is he gonna combine them all and is there any more types of treasures like that? Because that would be interesting and so far the novel is pretty good
muito bommm, simplesmente ADOREI tudo nesse livro!!! Maravilhoso!!!
The best thing about this novel is its pacing. In 200 chapters MC of other novels usually just crosses newbie phase, while here it's almost endgame near ch. 230. The plot is decent enough. Cons - - Worst R 18 scenes I've seen. Like seriously author bro if ur gonna copy paste at least copy from someone else's novel. All your scenes are exactly the same with only different names. - Inconsistent names used I recommend it if u can ignore the cons