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Thy, The primordial, Absolute ruler of Truth, hereby declare this demonic scripture as a rival of My Divilish scripture— "The Sugar Mommy System: The Evil Young Master is Villain," Though bullying juniors is not the style of this Primordial Saint Lord, yet, I can't help but be mesmerized by your potential. Through the willow, the wet will be your pillow, The tears roll down, welcome to Dao Town! It may be too late, but, I think Junior is courting death! This Humble one bids farewell, as our time ends here, I hope you stay healthy and strong to continue the battle.
Recommend this story, overhall good story so far ( keep in mind it's on 79 chapters as i'm writting this), the characters and the world ( guess you use the term worlds if you want) are interesting and the adult part is very good, the only thing i can point out is the ocasional wrong spelling, guessing English isn't the writers first language so it's to be expected and they aren't story breaking, just small stuff. Also, the author win-win is very accessible tbh, so i do recommend getting it to support the author. Hope this doesn't get dropped, as we sometimes see in this APP, keep up the good work
Could have been a good story. I tried turning off my brain while reading but it's still too much. Maybe it will get better in future chaps but I already have given it enough time. I would suggest a rewrite to correct mistakes and have a proper logical flow.
Another author who doesn't know what she wants to write and he is trying to advance it with other people's comments and polls. and where does this yandere obsession come from? it's okay to have one or two in a large harem, but what makes you think it's attractive to have them all like that.I won't even get into the mc , it's too much to write
I have calculated it will take 2 years in real life for him to awaken his physique for that reason I'm lowering my review to 2.8 stars sorry author too much filler and water
perfect the only thing that can be said after reading this novel that it is a masterpiece please author keep the hard work
this book had potential but because of author negligence it couldn't achieve it 😞
This story definitely has potential. But it weirdly feels like it's going too fast and too slow at the same time. It's feels like the story is getting ahead of itself. After the MC transmigrates, he doesn't leave the house for many chapters. In that time, he's already: become the strongest being on the planet, acquired numerous skills, had his first time, acquired his first harem member, is planning on acquiring multiple other harem members, acquired a massive sect building, made plans to form a sect, and learned the secrets of the universe. All of this without going outside, seeing the world, going to school to meet up with his classmates to show off his new looks and strength, or any of the normal things a person would do after coming to a new world and getting a new lease on life. It feels like the story is skipping steps or missing opportunities and not for the sake of comedy or satire. However, all the elements that have been introduced do seem like they could lead to a genuinely interesting litRPG. If nothing else, the lemons are good.
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You have all of those but… do you have plot in the webnovel? Guess I have to read and see it myself 😋
Definitely a good read, I only have one problem though... few chapters. 100+ is already good but I want more, so upload more author 😗😗. I recommend it for you all to read this.
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A very good work, maybe a bit slow plot but with so many events happening I guess it's okay. The MC is not beta and although he seems arrogant, I couldn't determine it well yet, let's hope the author doesn't make him too arrogant, the characters become a bit annoying like that. The harem so far seems like it won't have any weak characters, since the premise for their power is to have "many strong women", let's hope it is like that and that he doesn't add just for the sake of adding. Author, thank you very much for the novel, I like it a lot. Sorry for my english hehe.
It has some okay lemons my only problem with this WN is the length of the chapters they feel so short and bare minimum especially the lemmons it will take like 6 + chapters and 2 of the chapters don’t feel worth reading cliffhanger system runs deep in this one sometimes I wish I skipped it and saved my coins
This novel has one of the best beginnings of a harem r18 novel I’ve seen so far. There is However something missing, I can’t quite put my finger on. It gets 5 stars all around.
Id say a good novel to read. Overall good grammar in the story aswell. I love te interactions with the FL's World building can be better but its also early in the story yet so cant blame you for that😇 But one thing id try to change is the chapter length to atleast 1500 words but i understand why the chapters are short🥲 Overall i love the story so keep going m8😏😏
Nice novel, good themes and fun to read. It can use some polishing here and there, but overall, it's a good and fun read. My only real misgiving is the number of chaps.. Too few.. and update rate too low..
I’d say it’s still early to grade the novel in a whole. But what I can say is that this novel has a lot of potential. It’s a fun, and exciting read. What good characters, a very fun family.😉😉 (if your a man of culture you get it) So I do recommend it. And I just hope the author doesn’t drop this novel. GOOD LUCK AUTHOR
Too early to give it a proper review but for now it’s interesting enough and on the way to be a good story.
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Thy, The primordial, Absolute ruler of Truth, hereby declare this demonic scripture as a rival of My Divilish scripture— "The Sugar Mommy System: The Evil Young Master is Villain," Though bullying juniors is not the style of this Primordial Saint Lord, yet, I can't help but be mesmerized by your potential. Through the willow, the wet will be your pillow, The tears roll down, welcome to Dao Town! It may be too late, but, I think Junior is courting death! This Humble one bids farewell, as our time ends here, I hope you stay healthy and strong to continue the battle.
Recommend this story, overhall good story so far ( keep in mind it's on 79 chapters as i'm writting this), the characters and the world ( guess you use the term worlds if you want) are interesting and the adult part is very good, the only thing i can point out is the ocasional wrong spelling, guessing English isn't the writers first language so it's to be expected and they aren't story breaking, just small stuff. Also, the author win-win is very accessible tbh, so i do recommend getting it to support the author. Hope this doesn't get dropped, as we sometimes see in this APP, keep up the good work
Could have been a good story. I tried turning off my brain while reading but it's still too much. Maybe it will get better in future chaps but I already have given it enough time. I would suggest a rewrite to correct mistakes and have a proper logical flow.
Another author who doesn't know what she wants to write and he is trying to advance it with other people's comments and polls. and where does this yandere obsession come from? it's okay to have one or two in a large harem, but what makes you think it's attractive to have them all like that.I won't even get into the mc , it's too much to write
I have calculated it will take 2 years in real life for him to awaken his physique for that reason I'm lowering my review to 2.8 stars sorry author too much filler and water
perfect the only thing that can be said after reading this novel that it is a masterpiece please author keep the hard work
this book had potential but because of author negligence it couldn't achieve it 😞
This story definitely has potential. But it weirdly feels like it's going too fast and too slow at the same time. It's feels like the story is getting ahead of itself. After the MC transmigrates, he doesn't leave the house for many chapters. In that time, he's already: become the strongest being on the planet, acquired numerous skills, had his first time, acquired his first harem member, is planning on acquiring multiple other harem members, acquired a massive sect building, made plans to form a sect, and learned the secrets of the universe. All of this without going outside, seeing the world, going to school to meet up with his classmates to show off his new looks and strength, or any of the normal things a person would do after coming to a new world and getting a new lease on life. It feels like the story is skipping steps or missing opportunities and not for the sake of comedy or satire. However, all the elements that have been introduced do seem like they could lead to a genuinely interesting litRPG. If nothing else, the lemons are good.
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You have all of those but… do you have plot in the webnovel? Guess I have to read and see it myself 😋
Definitely a good read, I only have one problem though... few chapters. 100+ is already good but I want more, so upload more author 😗😗. I recommend it for you all to read this.
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A very good work, maybe a bit slow plot but with so many events happening I guess it's okay. The MC is not beta and although he seems arrogant, I couldn't determine it well yet, let's hope the author doesn't make him too arrogant, the characters become a bit annoying like that. The harem so far seems like it won't have any weak characters, since the premise for their power is to have "many strong women", let's hope it is like that and that he doesn't add just for the sake of adding. Author, thank you very much for the novel, I like it a lot. Sorry for my english hehe.
It has some okay lemons my only problem with this WN is the length of the chapters they feel so short and bare minimum especially the lemmons it will take like 6 + chapters and 2 of the chapters don’t feel worth reading cliffhanger system runs deep in this one sometimes I wish I skipped it and saved my coins
This novel has one of the best beginnings of a harem r18 novel I’ve seen so far. There is However something missing, I can’t quite put my finger on. It gets 5 stars all around.
Id say a good novel to read. Overall good grammar in the story aswell. I love te interactions with the FL's World building can be better but its also early in the story yet so cant blame you for that😇 But one thing id try to change is the chapter length to atleast 1500 words but i understand why the chapters are short🥲 Overall i love the story so keep going m8😏😏
Nice novel, good themes and fun to read. It can use some polishing here and there, but overall, it's a good and fun read. My only real misgiving is the number of chaps.. Too few.. and update rate too low..
I’d say it’s still early to grade the novel in a whole. But what I can say is that this novel has a lot of potential. It’s a fun, and exciting read. What good characters, a very fun family.😉😉 (if your a man of culture you get it) So I do recommend it. And I just hope the author doesn’t drop this novel. GOOD LUCK AUTHOR
Too early to give it a proper review but for now it’s interesting enough and on the way to be a good story.
My brother from another mother who lives in the same country as me! You are a man of culture, and I respect you!!! Give me your discord link