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Honestly the story is not bad but everything is resolved simply by the power of friendship. and author don't know why some parts are lost, for example when ned strangles the guard it doesn't come out, ned just says "I don't like threats to my family" out of nowhere "ned is vomiting" I don't know if you don't like putting those parts in or When uploading the file to webnovel they are lost or deleted.
Very good story More chapter update please 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏 I liked the story 🤩🤩🤩🤩😍😍😍😍😘😘😘😘👍👍👍👍💯💯💯💯
Es una novela con bastante futuro sino se abandona hay q pulir algunos detalles como la falta de crueldad del mc y su deseo de permanecer demasiado discreto
Le voy a dar la oportunidad por qué hasta donde va la historia tiene tiempo de arreglar errores en la actitud del MC como su falta de crueldad y no querer destacar como se debe y dar demasiada buena voluntad a vasallos que ni siquiera son suyos y me parece que está empezando a parecer un bufón demasiado alegre para mí gusto pero tiene tiempo de arreglarlo pero hasta ahora me ha gustado la historia
The idea is not bad. but poorly executed. It looks very much like a draft......................................................................................................................................................................................
I strongly believe that if this Fic receives help from an editor, it has the possibility of being one of the biggest and best GOT Fic, it just needs polishing to remove some confusing things and fill in some empty places that are abruptly skipped, other than that, I recommend you read the Fic, you won't regret it.
So far, the character development has been really cool. A story that is neither slow nor too fast. So far there hasn't been a huge focus on action, which I hope will change at some point, but it's still a lot of fun to read.
Thanks for writing. I very much like the spin you took on Asoiaf with Ned, as long as he doenst become a full time prankster, the stark family, the story, conflicts with the south and magic. The characters and locations feel very much alive and "real" in a sense, maybe introduc a touch more information about how certain people or locations differentiate between each other. Scars, history with bandits, how streets smell. Something like that 😁 Keep up the good work. Have a great weekend. 😊👍
Cool story, I expected Ned to be dilly-dallying around everywhere, but no, it's quite a serious-casual fic. Serious being the plot, casual being the story. Nothing blunderous aside from some minor punctuation mistakes, so a 5 star from me.
Amazing!! One of the best Ned self insert fanfic.😍😍😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍
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Believe it or not, this novel will be dropped by the author himself. I haven't even read it but I'm not kidding with my assessment. Alpha readers are the first readers after the novel manuscript has finished its final chapter. The alpha reader can be yourself as a writer or someone else.
Honestly the story is not bad but everything is resolved simply by the power of friendship. and author don't know why some parts are lost, for example when ned strangles the guard it doesn't come out, ned just says "I don't like threats to my family" out of nowhere "ned is vomiting" I don't know if you don't like putting those parts in or When uploading the file to webnovel they are lost or deleted.
Very good story More chapter update please 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏 I liked the story 🤩🤩🤩🤩😍😍😍😍😘😘😘😘👍👍👍👍💯💯💯💯
Es una novela con bastante futuro sino se abandona hay q pulir algunos detalles como la falta de crueldad del mc y su deseo de permanecer demasiado discreto
Le voy a dar la oportunidad por qué hasta donde va la historia tiene tiempo de arreglar errores en la actitud del MC como su falta de crueldad y no querer destacar como se debe y dar demasiada buena voluntad a vasallos que ni siquiera son suyos y me parece que está empezando a parecer un bufón demasiado alegre para mí gusto pero tiene tiempo de arreglarlo pero hasta ahora me ha gustado la historia
The idea is not bad. but poorly executed. It looks very much like a draft......................................................................................................................................................................................
I strongly believe that if this Fic receives help from an editor, it has the possibility of being one of the biggest and best GOT Fic, it just needs polishing to remove some confusing things and fill in some empty places that are abruptly skipped, other than that, I recommend you read the Fic, you won't regret it.
So far, the character development has been really cool. A story that is neither slow nor too fast. So far there hasn't been a huge focus on action, which I hope will change at some point, but it's still a lot of fun to read.
Thanks for writing. I very much like the spin you took on Asoiaf with Ned, as long as he doenst become a full time prankster, the stark family, the story, conflicts with the south and magic. The characters and locations feel very much alive and "real" in a sense, maybe introduc a touch more information about how certain people or locations differentiate between each other. Scars, history with bandits, how streets smell. Something like that 😁 Keep up the good work. Have a great weekend. 😊👍
Cool story, I expected Ned to be dilly-dallying around everywhere, but no, it's quite a serious-casual fic. Serious being the plot, casual being the story. Nothing blunderous aside from some minor punctuation mistakes, so a 5 star from me.
Amazing!! One of the best Ned self insert fanfic.😍😍😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍
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Believe it or not, this novel will be dropped by the author himself. I haven't even read it but I'm not kidding with my assessment. Alpha readers are the first readers after the novel manuscript has finished its final chapter. The alpha reader can be yourself as a writer or someone else.
The story seems well thought out and moves at a good pace
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