Shattered: A SAO Tale (Sword Art Online)

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Reis123

Well, we can't not have the shameless author review, can we? There's nothing much to say that hasn't already been said in the synopsis or in the first chapter. This is a novel I've been wanting to write for a long time, and I just finally got around to it. The MC is an original character, but he is just another player in SAO, and won't overshadow Kirito, nor will he know anything about the future. Also, the Kirito X Asuna pairing still stands, but for the other girls who are kept pinning for Kirito in the original, I plan on changing things. What exactly, even I am unsure. That's about it. I hope you enjoy, and please leave suggestions, comments, and reviews!

LV 13

Keimuru

I hope you don't drop this cuz can't find anymore SAO fanfics, all of them are dropped.

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roffeewest

a very bad start, the main character is more of a high school boy than an adult with a formed mindset, well, or a confused beginning with mental problems that runs away from them, and does not solve. If the author wanted to add realism to his works, then he had to read at least a couple of articles about the relationships, connections and psychology of ordinary people who got into a closed space with an impossible or almost impossible way to get out. And here we have a completely undeveloped motivation of the hero, regardless of what he will do next, I will not believe that such a person who was shown in the beginning will be able to survive in the world of SAO.

LV 4

Winter_Whisperer

I enjoyed the novel bit slow for my liking but it's still starting so it's fine. I'm up to chapter 22 and it's starting to feel less and less like MC is the protagonist. The chapters are a tad bit bland for some readers, which might be the reason why it still has such a low rating. Hope there is something a bit more unique to the MC to give out more depth to the character and make him stand out a bit more. The other character dynamics also feel a bit hollow other than the information broker. It's still a fun read. Keep up the good work👍

LV 4

Reality_warper004

I have never read a better SAO fic than this. The charector depth and realism is the best thing about this story. One thing i have grievance with is that after a certain period of time after they are stuck in the game, People all over the world can see every player at anytime like some live 24 hour reality show. They don't have a lick of privacy and they don't even know about it. As much as it is entertaining to watch people's reactions, i just think keeping some mysterious aspect for public would have been better.

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Subaru_4228

it feels like kirito is the Mc while drifter is some run of the mill side character, didn't expect him to give up the sword that he got with his first friend, sometimes everything bends to kirito's wims, would actually like to see a SAO novel but without kirito as a mc at the starting or becoming the mc after appearing lol

LV 13

Facez_

good story,good fighting scenes, u got the posanality of those in canon well, But hey u can tone Mc up not just a oldest one in the group or use spear like more speed or more strength. give him some special not just a Extra in kirito journey.

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ManiacReader1

a very good story, written so well that you can actually feel the tension between the characters. at the start the mc drifter might seem like he is overshadowed my the kirito, but that really changes around chapter 30. very interesting with the livestream of the boss fights around the world. please don't drop this.

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LukeMorningStar

I didn't like the possible love interest. I didn't like the possible love interest. I didn't like the possible love interest. I didn't like the possible love interest. I didn't like the possible love interest. I didn't like the possible love interest.

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Daoist_Lake

For starting maybe too cliche, but its okay, we can't do anything about it. For writing quality, still okay and readable. For Updating, only 3 chapter for a weeks, its okay cause writer need many idea to execute good Story. maybe just need more words because too short for 3 chapter per week. If its to hard for write more word don't force yourself. For character design is good, no overshadowing original character and fanfic MC. But MC here lack of contribution and following Kirito and original development. For Team, still lack. Like Boss Floor 2, its only 1 chapter. No Exciting strategy or epic battle. maybe you should clasified weapon user here. Like spearman, shielder, swordman, axeman etc. and make strategy for each class before get into battle. maybe you can see reference log horizon battle strategy. its very good fantasy strategy battle team. But you must ignore magic.

LV 14

Uesama

me like this SAO fanfic, its not about caching & collecting waifu, not reincarnator no system etc, it was SAO from other player pov. i like how you develop their character and hope mc can develop more on his spearmanship not just following game skill but develop his own from other spear user or trying to recreate some spear skills from game or video. Thanks for the hard work, keep it up!! 🤓

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Anton_Sushko

Cool story. Although I don't like that the main characters are too gentle and soft, this is compensated by their constant growth as individuals. And I have an idea. What if every 10 floors the game became more realistic! As an example, after the 20th floor, players will begin to feel pain. That's all I have, good luck. translated via Google translator!

LV 13

Eros_Storge_7

5 star reviews for it not being harem and keeping Kirito and Asuna together(from synopsis cause haven't read it yet).I really like their pairing and I hate it when in fanfiction they change any characters partner with any reason though I don't mind if that character doesn't have a lover it original story. I like to keep the original pairing, otherwise I get NTR feeling and drop that fanfic.

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Toknaforo

I am loving the story but it is starting to feel like the main character isn't the protagonist anymore, I mean he isn't getting any, I guess special weapons or armor that makes him stand out. I get that that in real life other people may be better than us but I came to this story to know what it's like to be in SAO and to know what it feels like to be special, I'm not really feeling that with this story but I do like it. I am currently up to chapter 37

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Fifth_Daoist

This fic is pure enjoyment. Everything SAO has done wrong is done well here. Pros:- Good grammar- Good characters- Nice plot- A revamped SAO- Good MC Cons:- There's a lot of floors, meaning sometimes the action will feel a little rushed, but nothing really that bad or anything.- Well that's all

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Vexador

i really love the fact that his weapon of choice is a spear, although his title can be confusing. broken spear drifter sounds as if he was defeated and the only thing anyone remembers is his spear getting broken by his opponent.

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Blake_Silver

This is absolutely peak. This is what I wanted from sao originally and even more. An amazing rendition of the life of players in sao with characters written well and drama. I especially love the glimpses in the real world. Those are short parts of the chapters, but seeing the effect the actions in game have irl is really interesting to me

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Bonx_Balaclover

I just wanna leave a review to appreciate your beautiful written work. This deserves a better place than webnovel where most of the readers are like bots and stoopid, narrow-minded, jerkface and dog behaviour people who doesn't know shi about writing. I'm a beginner writer and I know how hard it is to create a satisfying and accurate world building on a fanfic. Hope you improve more on your writing and even create an original work mister![img=recommend]