I don't know what to say, but I am proud that you took my advice to heart.I like the idea of giving him jetpacks, that would shorten the time for him to reach areas where kaijus attack. Keep doing a great job dude! I'm cheering for you🥳
No! it's not another pair of arms you silly... just sharp or flipper like edges to the side of his arms like vambraces, still yeah I'm just suggesting ideas. You're still the captain here. Anyways, thanks for the notice! I'm interested at the future developments of this story😻
Just wanna suggest this... Can you add something like an arsenal for torterra for his outer shell at the back? Maybe if he evolves more he can have blastoise cannon attack? That would be cool. Anyways that's just my random thought here's a suggestion you can actually use. He's a turtle right? And when he evolves he only enhances what he already have, still it would be fun to make him a progenitor of the turtle adding unique evolutionary paths open as additional arsenals he could use to fight the kaijus. Here are unique turtles I know. snapping tortoise(A quick bite that would prove dangerous to his enemies.) Alternative for that is the african helmeted turtle(Strong shell on his head that could bring devastating head hooks to kaijus.) A spiky turtle(A part of his shell that prevents enemy kaijus from holding him done or go for a deadly spin like a saw towards his enemies.) or hawkbills sea turtle (making him have sharp or blunt paddle like appendages on his arms that may help him swim faster and can be use as a offensive and defensive appendages.) You can use that in tandem with his unique ability that lets him burst fire out of his body. I hope you like it.
can you criticize my work too? I need constructive criticism...😿I need FUEL🔥🔥🔥
I would just like to say, thank you for clarifying some of my doubts in writing. I always wanted to write a fanfic however I procrastinate a lot of times when I read all the key components in making it similar to cannon and at that point I lose all the built motivation I had when I want to start writing one... I made an original fiction due to that reason, creating something that I can relate to and be aware of how it would go made me consider it but that doesn't seem to be going well because of my scatterbrain mind(insert crying emoji). Therefore, I always need to refresh my memory by reading from chapter 1 until the latest chapter to fully understand what I missed and still I know I have lots of blindspots due to my inexperienced self when writing stuffs. It discourages me, and I wanted to learn more by reading this and surely it really helped me dude...Thank you again!💖
TFTC! Oh no akiol is gonna die?🙀
Oh I see now, forgive me. I thought it was redundant but when I read it again I then saw it was a recording.🙇
I think page 8 and 9 are redundant, anyways TFTC!🥳
Oooohhh🐊😻
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Waking up as a merfolk, he had no idea where he was or who he was. All he knows is that he wants to explore and go on adventures together with his strange intuition and the system. However, a revelation unfolded to him via a song, a conviction to pursue his "destiny". Or would he? Not if the taste of eels distracts him from his purpose. Am I right? __________________________________ Nothing special, this is just a test.4 Chs 8 お気に入り
I just wanna leave a review to appreciate your beautiful written work. This deserves a better place than webnovel where most of the readers are like bots and stoopid, narrow-minded, jerkface and dog behaviour people who doesn't know shi about writing. I'm a beginner writer and I know how hard it is to create a satisfying and accurate world building on a fanfic. Hope you improve more on your writing and even create an original work mister![img=recommend]
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