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Your fanfic has potential, but you need to fix your grammar. I recommend using Grammarly to fix some of your sentences. Also, what was the point of him having a son? When he got reincarnated, he just brush it off like it was nothing.
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Your fanfic has potential, but you need to fix your grammar. I recommend using Grammarly to fix some of your sentences. Also, what was the point of him having a son? When he got reincarnated, he just brush it off like it was nothing.
I think it's good but a little sad that he doesn't have meta knowledge. Even some basic knowledge of could be future events but beside that I think this great and you keep on going. Written at chapter 5
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