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twigben
LV 15 Badge

Intersting MC power idea, but a SEVERE lack of creativity here. It only took me about half a chapter to figure out the "Japanese Cartoon" this series is based off. and the similarities do not end but instead increase. If you're going to base your world off a pre-existing fictional world you need to put your own unique twist to it, and I'm sorry to say that is completely absent here.

7mth
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Mithren
LV 12 Badge

Has MHA vibes. Also a bit similar to 'Sky High'. Feels a bit over the top in its presentation but that fits what the author seems to be going for. The writing does feel a bit unpolished. I don't know if it's a narrative choice or developing skill. The story seems good, though I'm not a fan of how it's written. I like stories to be more livable than comedy. This feels more like a more realistic cartoon. Just not my kind of story.

12mth
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Kronos_Legend

can anyone tell me if there is romance pls

1yr
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BeyondHorizon12343

Hmmmmmm~ Is it Me, or that last line is a reference?~ Ohhh~ I get it now~

1yr
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Suny869
LV 13 Badge

well this novel is not bad and consept(MHA world) is good but i don't like MC power. MC is power are tech type or something like that and i prefer supernatural type and MC personalty is kinda annoying or going to be.but I'm not dropping it I'm gonna read it again letter.

1yr
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Stevefpx

The thing I don't get about this novel is if almost all people have superpowers and only 1 percent is having none then why are they wearing costumes? I mean along the street people will still know your identity. E.g mc was known to be the son of a powerful hero but before he wears the costume people still knows him. I can almost imagine most of the people walking in the crowd with their costumes.

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Selectials

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Pornking

looks promising, so many plot ideas can write about this.. well lets see in the future.. ill be back lets bookmark it for now[img=recommend][img=recommend]

2yr
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LordJ
LV 15 Badge

Not gonna lie, i am give the review before I have even read the book. To ask but a simple question, Who else broke out into song after read "be the very best like no one ever was". I know i did lol

2yr
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DaisukiDayoSenpai

I don't know why this novel is getting good reviews when I was just having fun with writing, but I'm glad that everyone's taking it well. Because of that! I'll be posting an extra chapter every time we reach a 100 power stones milestone! Also, send those summoning pens my way and I'll use them to the fullest ^-^ Thank you all so much for all your support and I hope you continue to want to read this novel while I continue to enjoy writing it. :) Sincerely, DaisukiDayoSenpai

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Ten_Bands

it's as if a ten year old child wrote this. there are a few things wrong with it but what really makes it unreadable to me is how delusional the author is. its unrealistic that a government would name a group of people with supernatural powers the "superhero association" or what ever it's called. I actually wasted some time reading it hoping it would get better but it didn't. I also assume that the balance of power is highly unbalanced considering only one percent don't have powers but the police can't take care of one criminal. who's only motive I know for causing chaos is because he is perhaps bored? cause he thinks that even though he isn't a world class power that he can seriously get away with it? that's simply unreasonable and unrealistic. this whole novel is probably trash if the rest is anything like the first few chapters.

2yr
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Shining_Mark

it's really amazing work hope it lasts until it's finished.. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏👍🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏👍

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Ryvvik

It’s rlly funny while also still having some substance and making it an interesting read. I rlly like how the mc superpower is like bc it is op but also has its limits like how sometimes he doesn’t know wut it will hit or wut it will do

2yr
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Pancit_Canton_Guy

Really, right in front of my pancit canton? This is a very interesting novel since it merged two of my favorite animes. I'm looking forward to how the story will progress. All the best, author!

2yr
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Naofumi_Iwatani_

A parody of MHA and Pokemon... say no more author, this is a five star for me. Will be looking forward for more updates! Have a great day author!!!!

2yr
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Crash_0538

Here's an art ⣾⣿⠿⠿⠶⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣤⣄⢀⡅⢠⣾⣛⡉⠄⠄⠄ ⡋⣡⣴⣶⣶⡀⠄⠄⠙⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣴⣿⣿⣿⢃⣤⣄⣀⣥ ⣇⠻⣿⣿⣿⣧⣀⢀⣠⡌⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠿⠿⣿ ⣿⣷⣤⣤⣤⣬⣙⣛⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⡍⠄⠄⢀⣤⣄ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢇⣿⣿⡷⠶⠶⢿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣽⣿⣿⣿⡇⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣶⣥ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣌⣛⣻⣿⣿⣧⠙⠛⠛⡭⠅⠒⠦⠭⣭⡻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠹⠈⢋⣽⣿⣿⣿⣿⣵ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠄⣴⣿⣶⣄⠄⣴⣶⠄⢀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡄⢻⣿⣿⣿⠄⣿⣿⡀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣛⠛⠁ ⠄⠈⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿⠁⠞⢿⣿⣿⡄⢿⣿⡇⣸⣿⣿⠿⠛⠁⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠻⣿⣿⣾⣦⡙⠻⣷⣾⣿⠃⠿⠋⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⣶⣶⣮⣥⣒⠲⢮⣝⡿⣿⣿⡆⣿⡿⠃⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠟⠛⢉⢉⠉⠉⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠟⠠⡰⣕⣗⣷⣧⣀⣅⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⣠⣳⣟⣿⣿⣷⣿⡿⣜⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠁⠄⣳⢷⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣝⠖⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⢢⡹⣿⢷⣯⢿⢷⡫⣗⠍⢰⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⡏⢀⢄⠤⣁⠋⠿⣗⣟⡯⡏⢎⠁⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⠄⢔⢕⣯⣿⣿⡲⡤⡄⡤⠄⡀⢠⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠇⠠⡳⣯⣿⣿⣾⢵⣫⢎⢎⠆⢀⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢨⣫⣿⣿⡿⣿⣻⢎⡗⡕⡅⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢜⢾⣾⣿⣿⣟⣗⢯⡪⡳⡀⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢸⢽⣿⣷⣿⣻⡮⡧⡳⡱⡁⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡄⢨⣻⣽⣿⣟⣿⣞⣗⡽⡸⡐⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡇⢀⢗⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣞⡵⡣⣊⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⡀⡣⣗⣿⣿⣿⣿⣯⡯⡺⣼⠎⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣧⠐⡵⣻⣟⣯⣿⣷⣟⣝⢞⡿⢹⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⢘⡺⣽⢿⣻⣿⣗⡷⣹⢩⢃⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⠄⠪⣯⣟⣿⢯⣿⣻⣜⢎⢆⠜⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿. ... ....⣿⡆⠄⢣⣻⣽⣿⣿⣟⣾⡮⡺⡸⠸⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡿⠛⠉⠁⠄⢕⡳⣽⡾⣿⢽⣯⡿

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GrandVoid

Great job author. XDXDXDXDXDXyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

3yr
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Kouhaiii

Everyone's leaving a gif as their review so I'mma follow the trend. Still, this book is probably one of the best one you wrote so far, kudos to you, author-san! I enjoy all of your books!

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3yr
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DaisukiDayoSenpai

Shameless author reviewing his own work here! A reader informed me that it would be nice if the readers could suggest which animal or object our Satoshi would be upgrading next and I figured that would be a nice idea! So for this novel, I'll give the readers the power to suggest which object or animal would make its appearance in this parody novel. I will be looking forward to your suggestions and let's have some fun! Also, all your comments, gifts, reviews, power stones will always be super-appreciated! Have a great day!

3yr
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twigben
LV 15 Badge

Intersting MC power idea, but a SEVERE lack of creativity here. It only took me about half a chapter to figure out the "Japanese Cartoon" this series is based off. and the similarities do not end but instead increase. If you're going to base your world off a pre-existing fictional world you need to put your own unique twist to it, and I'm sorry to say that is completely absent here.

7mth
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Mithren
LV 12 Badge

Has MHA vibes. Also a bit similar to 'Sky High'. Feels a bit over the top in its presentation but that fits what the author seems to be going for. The writing does feel a bit unpolished. I don't know if it's a narrative choice or developing skill. The story seems good, though I'm not a fan of how it's written. I like stories to be more livable than comedy. This feels more like a more realistic cartoon. Just not my kind of story.

12mth
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Kronos_Legend

can anyone tell me if there is romance pls

1yr
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BeyondHorizon12343

Hmmmmmm~ Is it Me, or that last line is a reference?~ Ohhh~ I get it now~

1yr
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Suny869
LV 13 Badge

well this novel is not bad and consept(MHA world) is good but i don't like MC power. MC is power are tech type or something like that and i prefer supernatural type and MC personalty is kinda annoying or going to be.but I'm not dropping it I'm gonna read it again letter.

1yr
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Stevefpx

The thing I don't get about this novel is if almost all people have superpowers and only 1 percent is having none then why are they wearing costumes? I mean along the street people will still know your identity. E.g mc was known to be the son of a powerful hero but before he wears the costume people still knows him. I can almost imagine most of the people walking in the crowd with their costumes.

2yr
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Selectials

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2yr
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Pornking

looks promising, so many plot ideas can write about this.. well lets see in the future.. ill be back lets bookmark it for now[img=recommend][img=recommend]

2yr
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LordJ
LV 15 Badge

Not gonna lie, i am give the review before I have even read the book. To ask but a simple question, Who else broke out into song after read "be the very best like no one ever was". I know i did lol

2yr
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DaisukiDayoSenpai

I don't know why this novel is getting good reviews when I was just having fun with writing, but I'm glad that everyone's taking it well. Because of that! I'll be posting an extra chapter every time we reach a 100 power stones milestone! Also, send those summoning pens my way and I'll use them to the fullest ^-^ Thank you all so much for all your support and I hope you continue to want to read this novel while I continue to enjoy writing it. :) Sincerely, DaisukiDayoSenpai

2yr
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Ten_Bands

it's as if a ten year old child wrote this. there are a few things wrong with it but what really makes it unreadable to me is how delusional the author is. its unrealistic that a government would name a group of people with supernatural powers the "superhero association" or what ever it's called. I actually wasted some time reading it hoping it would get better but it didn't. I also assume that the balance of power is highly unbalanced considering only one percent don't have powers but the police can't take care of one criminal. who's only motive I know for causing chaos is because he is perhaps bored? cause he thinks that even though he isn't a world class power that he can seriously get away with it? that's simply unreasonable and unrealistic. this whole novel is probably trash if the rest is anything like the first few chapters.

2yr
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Shining_Mark

it's really amazing work hope it lasts until it's finished.. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏👍🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏👍

2yr
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Ryvvik

It’s rlly funny while also still having some substance and making it an interesting read. I rlly like how the mc superpower is like bc it is op but also has its limits like how sometimes he doesn’t know wut it will hit or wut it will do

2yr
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Pancit_Canton_Guy

Really, right in front of my pancit canton? This is a very interesting novel since it merged two of my favorite animes. I'm looking forward to how the story will progress. All the best, author!

2yr
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Naofumi_Iwatani_

A parody of MHA and Pokemon... say no more author, this is a five star for me. Will be looking forward for more updates! Have a great day author!!!!

2yr
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Crash_0538

Here's an art ⣾⣿⠿⠿⠶⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣦⣤⣄⢀⡅⢠⣾⣛⡉⠄⠄⠄ ⡋⣡⣴⣶⣶⡀⠄⠄⠙⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣴⣿⣿⣿⢃⣤⣄⣀⣥ ⣇⠻⣿⣿⣿⣧⣀⢀⣠⡌⢻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠿⠿⣿ ⣿⣷⣤⣤⣤⣬⣙⣛⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣿⣿⡍⠄⠄⢀⣤⣄ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⢇⣿⣿⡷⠶⠶⢿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣽⣿⣿⣿⡇⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣶⣥ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣌⣛⣻⣿⣿⣧⠙⠛⠛⡭⠅⠒⠦⠭⣭⡻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠹⠈⢋⣽⣿⣿⣿⣿⣵ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠄⣴⣿⣶⣄⠄⣴⣶⠄⢀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡄⢻⣿⣿⣿⠄⣿⣿⡀⣾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣛⠛⠁ ⠄⠈⠛⢿⣿⣿⣿⠁⠞⢿⣿⣿⡄⢿⣿⡇⣸⣿⣿⠿⠛⠁⠄⠄ ⠄⠄⠄⠄⠉⠻⣿⣿⣾⣦⡙⠻⣷⣾⣿⠃⠿⠋⠁⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⣶⣶⣮⣥⣒⠲⢮⣝⡿⣿⣿⡆⣿⡿⠃⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄⠄ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠟⠛⢉⢉⠉⠉⠻⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠟⠠⡰⣕⣗⣷⣧⣀⣅⠘⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⣠⣳⣟⣿⣿⣷⣿⡿⣜⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠁⠄⣳⢷⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣝⠖⠄⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⠃⠄⢢⡹⣿⢷⣯⢿⢷⡫⣗⠍⢰⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⡏⢀⢄⠤⣁⠋⠿⣗⣟⡯⡏⢎⠁⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⠄⢔⢕⣯⣿⣿⡲⡤⡄⡤⠄⡀⢠⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠇⠠⡳⣯⣿⣿⣾⢵⣫⢎⢎⠆⢀⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢨⣫⣿⣿⡿⣿⣻⢎⡗⡕⡅⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢜⢾⣾⣿⣿⣟⣗⢯⡪⡳⡀⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⠄⢸⢽⣿⣷⣿⣻⡮⡧⡳⡱⡁⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡄⢨⣻⣽⣿⣟⣿⣞⣗⡽⡸⡐⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡇⢀⢗⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⣞⡵⡣⣊⢸⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⡀⡣⣗⣿⣿⣿⣿⣯⡯⡺⣼⠎⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣧⠐⡵⣻⣟⣯⣿⣷⣟⣝⢞⡿⢹⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⡆⢘⡺⣽⢿⣻⣿⣗⡷⣹⢩⢃⢿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⠄⠪⣯⣟⣿⢯⣿⣻⣜⢎⢆⠜⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⣿. ... ....⣿⡆⠄⢣⣻⣽⣿⣿⣟⣾⡮⡺⡸⠸⣿⣿⣿⣿ ⣿⣿⡿⠛⠉⠁⠄⢕⡳⣽⡾⣿⢽⣯⡿

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GrandVoid

Great job author. XDXDXDXDXDXyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

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Kouhaiii

Everyone's leaving a gif as their review so I'mma follow the trend. Still, this book is probably one of the best one you wrote so far, kudos to you, author-san! I enjoy all of your books!

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DaisukiDayoSenpai

Shameless author reviewing his own work here! A reader informed me that it would be nice if the readers could suggest which animal or object our Satoshi would be upgrading next and I figured that would be a nice idea! So for this novel, I'll give the readers the power to suggest which object or animal would make its appearance in this parody novel. I will be looking forward to your suggestions and let's have some fun! Also, all your comments, gifts, reviews, power stones will always be super-appreciated! Have a great day!

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