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TheSilverPrince

Hey, it has been a year, and I have been waiting for your reply. No worries. I also write a Pokemon fan fiction light novel in webnovel and in pat-reon. I was hoping we could collaborate and make our works better. If you are interested, so mail me at manandhar.rahul221@gmail.com I hope that the 5 star review finds you well cause you deserve it.

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Dasavar
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I would love to rate this story higher cause I enjoy many aspects of it, but everything is tinged with the rage I feel at so much being gatekept behind a Patreon especially pictures of new Pokemon forms even years later despite the fact that the Patrons already get voting/poll rights and extra chapters so gatekeeping/extorting new form/new mon pictures too just thoroughly pisses me off. If it weren't for that major issue cause I don't mind the pacing/info dumps even though many others do I would rate the story at a 4.2 by Webnovels total cumulative.

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InLotadIBelieve

Ok, so I've read +500 chapters and I think that's enough waiting for SOMETHING interesting to happen and have stakes. Don't get me wrong, the world building in this book is awesome and extreamely detailed (sometimes too much, really what was the need to change the name of the week days?), but that is very likely the only point of this book that could be considered excellent (at least content wise, the author is really consistent with his publishings and almost regularly answers any doubt from the readers). This story doesn't feel like what you'd expect of a trainer and his team getting better together through hardships (the thing I always love about pkmn fics). No. It feels like a Zookeeper with his zoo curvestomping everything. The author LOVES info dumping, because he thought of interesting things, and he WILL make it your problem. The author goes and uses a calendar as a way of passing time, with tedious and repetitive things. Really, the story is often full of small time-skips (sometimes bigger) or is so slow paced (and uninteresting) that it makes you want it to be a time-skip. The lack of details in the interesting things is astounding. 500+ chapter and I remember 1 arch with interesting and "close" battles, and that was just because MC was holding back. Other than that, the detailed (detailed as in not skipped) pokemon battles scattered around this 500+ chapters can be counted with the fingers of both hands (and I dont say one because I am sure I am forgetting some, wich is NOT a good sign). He has too much pokemon. MC goes "quality over quantity? Why not both?" wich ends up with lots of bland characters (pokemons) and many times the development is often just "A week has passed, X pokemon has developed Y stat. Another week has passed, Z pokemon has developed W stat." and feels like a glorified excel spreadsheet. In conclusion, I understand why so many people like it, but I would say it is monotonous and a bit boring normally, with some times becoming a bit interesting at best. Good enough to fill time, but not much more.

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Lazyswede

one of the best pokemon FF i have ever read, tho it is a bit slow in the start, it does explain alot of world settings so it's fine. It really starts to get good when he starts to explore other towns. overall great work, keep it up.

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Vaneford

I finally caught up to the latest chapter, and let me be honest with my review. if you've read the other reviews about it being slow let me tell you it is Slooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooow and grammatically painful BUT Azrail gets better as a story teller and in grammar that's all my complaint Now for the things that i like in this FF is a LOT the details, world building, new pokemons, not the romance, mother and a lot more. This FF ruined other pokemon fic for me because when i tried finding different pokefic I cant find others like this This is what i like [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Game_B_Roll

This story has amazing potential but i have reached almost chapter 300 at the end of academy arc. There are 2 big cons in the story thou: 1) You give full status screen updates for all pokemon like even those that are not even important for every small thing like a move reaching a new level of matery. There are dozens we dont remember all that. So why not just show there status fully before fight? Also why do you give more updates for pokemon which will be like his third team but we get rarely updates of MC? Like every 50 chapters only. 2) MC never faces the threat of death even now? Like missions are fast paced for even other novels? Like a few chapters for missions? What i really want is a scene of MC fighting a horde to protect a city etc! Because that is his speciality with his own army. I don't get it? You have so much foreshadowing of how this world is not peaceful! Where it seems towns are commonly destroyed. But MC has never expirenced something like that himself.

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Dorian_Hoowkmyn

Я впервые сталкиваюсь с таким героем. Почти 900 глав а герой ещё ребенок лет 12. Причем его путешествие началось в 600 главах. Смело можно говорить, что история минимум глав на 10000. Я честно когда начал читать понял что есть подвох на главе 180 на 250 я начал просто листать в перед. Я уверен автор не сможет закончить историю. Либо устанет. Либо не хватит времени. Не советую данное произведение тем, кто любит активные действия. Те кто любит описания всего ( я имею в виду буквально всего, как техническую инструкцию вам понравится) -10 балов из 10.

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reading1dao1god

Very good novel, novel muito boa recomendo lerem, não vão perder tempo é um ótimo trabalho em andamento espero q continue assim. Very good novel, novel muito boa recomendo lerem, não vão perder tempo é um ótimo trabalho em andamento espero q continue assim.

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Potato_killer

It honestly becomes a drag to read just filler about the mc catching pokemon for like 40 chapters straight and you just know these pokemon will never actually become relevant to the story. By chapter 800 nothing has happened other then the small major arcs that make up like 200 chapters. The rest are just filler and unnecessary side-quests that dont lead anywhere. Even the training stuff that the mc does and the whole academy arc just becomes irrelevant.

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Original_Eternal

20x15=300 ch before starting journey?. . . . . ............................................................................................................

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BrotherBear_

Love your story really like the world building and how you gradually build it up. You see a lot of stories on here that get in on the action early on and pretty soon after that taper of and become this tangeld mess which doesn’t really make any sense. But you on the other hand did a geat job on the early stage world building and laying a solid foundation! Love the story keep up the good work[img=recommend]

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Daoisteaa4TY

solid original story of, but a very slow and well built story

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MarinXGrayfia

just briefly checking mc mon, and found all mc mon have a name. i mean it's cool you name pokemon in game but not for reading. no one will and can remember their name. soo it's a huge bummer for me.

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Game_B_Roll

Author, can you give me some tips on power scalings for novels? I have done mine for a new rpg style one with formulas but I want to create a original without these elements like yours is the best power scaling i have seen. I will be very grateful if you could.

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Game_B_Roll

Author, In the last paragraph of synopsis you wrote conplaining not complaining.

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death_frost2345

Godly novel with a godly writer that knows how to dump dopamine into my veins seeing 600 chapters without fighting a gym in an overpowered pokemon power fantasy 😀

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Shreya_Tiwari_0275

This is not a story that is everyone's cup of tea, it is written slowly, carefully and deliberately. It is clear that the plot is well thought out rather than just putting up whatever comes out of the author's mind. Overall 5 on 5, long read and keeps you guessing. Also does this progress as a harem?

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Mana_Mannequin_003

wonderful world building and power scaling. Definitely a must read among pokemon fan-fic.

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Kaylin26

I genuinely wish there weren't too many lazy people who reviews story and deceive people on rating a book. This story isnt too bad in the beginning (aside from the crazy amount of info dumping that lots of people have gotten rather irritated with), there was quite some potential with the story plot. However it all started to go downhill when the info dumping isn't so apparent, so many glaring issues with this story pop out then. I've already notice quite some obvious ones even from the beginning for example the strange flow of dialogues and conversation (it can be cringy and lame, rigid and bland, stiff and awkward etc), strange jump on important info, unnecessary filler, strange jumpskip on activites or time skip, repetitive lines (that are cringey n lame, trust me you'd remember after seeing them, I can even quote those lines by now), sudden introduce of characters, middle school syndrome vibe from so many aspects, you'd think u get a smart mc with the way how he decided to reincarnate at first but it just starts to become rather dumb, hypocritical and a cringey mc at some point. There are some pros with the story that I won't neglect considering the amiuny of effort the author put in the beginning with the world building but even so many there's quite a lot to be polish because of some of the unnecessary and too much details and info that get people's head spinning for no reason. Honestly if u cant balance it, it's better to reduce the world building when it's just burdening the entire story. I do like with some of the creative ways to use the Pokémon moves and battle but I've only read til) close to half the book so I can't say if it improve or spiral downwards instead cuz I can see the Mc getting a bit too op. There's really a lot more to rant on but I'd rather stop. I just hope to whoever who plans to read this, pls be mentally prepared. Some of the glaring cons I mention may irritate u when u read. I'm still continuing because I genuinely do like pokemon adventuring and I still see a tad bit potential and I'm curious how the Mc will go on. I guess I'm just trying to turn a blind eye and be patient with the terrible parts of the story. Nonetheless it's hard to give this a good rating like the other people which makes me wonder what kind of story they've actually read...

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Stonework

An absolute banger of a story. If you’re looking for a story where the MC becomes absolutely overpowered when the story starts then this ain’t it. This story is slow-paced but filled with amazing detail that immerses you into the story so well that you can picture yourself alongside them.

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xyzsaber

This is one of the, if not the best Pokemon related novel I have read in the last coir do years. It’s consistently getting better as it goes on.

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The_Arch_Fiend

This story is well written and has good detail in both world building as well as character’s. It’s about what you would expect if you had a bunch of Pokémon and could only write and talk about them a certain amount. What I would really like if we could get aux chapters fully detailing the world building such as trainer ranks stages/requirments, the various guilds, more detail into rangers and military related things and such. It would be even better that once those are written up that others can write inspired stories from these as I already know of one that is in another language just written in a more op fast track way. Reason: I am curios at trying and hand at it even if I will likely end up dropping it and having a good base would make it much more motivating. Hell I could see it making a thread/writing prompt based on this and doing a community set up so everyone could flesh out and make this world more amazing and detailed than it already is. I love this story

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Chrono_Nova_Gaming

At chapter 211 story I good so far might need to work on vocabulary a bit but otherwise story is good like a mix of cultivation novel and Pokemon. I just wanted to say don't make this story an harem either don't include romance or give me an single partner because for me harem ruins story

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LazyLazer_RSP

Be prepared for walls and walls of info-dumps. Also be prepared to lose all interest in pokemon fanfics after trying this AU. The sheer depth and thought put into carefully crafting the world makes any other version seem too simplistic in comparison...including the original. I love and hate this series for many reasons and you will too. As boring and stilted as the story gets at times, you have to really respect the author for how much effort they put into it. Everything is 5 stars except writing quality and that's because the author tends to go too far into tangents or being too thorough with providing info to the point you'd beg for it to stop repeating things. YET even then it's still a 4 star in quality despite such a glaring detriment since everything else refuses to be dragged down. The author sometimes prioritizes info dump over characters so be prepared for some rather sterile dialogue here and there, but it's actually overall very rare and easy to ignore. My most honest and apt comparison for this is those youtube videos of 'professional redraws child's art', where it boggles your mind how much a steady/experienced hand can do so much with so little. Yes it's a little extreme and gets carried away at times, but the author's vision always pays off in more ways than you could've hoped. If you are obsessed with magic/mystic powers, this is for you. If you love choreographed fights that are well thought out, this is for you. World building your thang? Then this is definitely for you since I'm pretty sure that's the whole core of this series.

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Bhrendal_Silveira

Livro maravilhoso, me incentivou a escrever

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Mootr
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it is a very good story to read but it the type of story you leave alone in your library until it has a lot of chapters to read.

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Prem_Sanjai

This story is too damn slow and big,if you want to read a relaxing story this not the story for you

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Expend

This is a master class work of fiction. I have been reading this from when I was in 7th grade to now in 10th grade. I just wanted you to j so that I really appreciate you for continuing this series.

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Paul_Legaspi

This is a great Pokemon Fanfic. Read and support, so the story, adventure and catching-them-all continues.

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TheSilverPrince

Hey, it has been a year, and I have been waiting for your reply. No worries. I also write a Pokemon fan fiction light novel in webnovel and in pat-reon. I was hoping we could collaborate and make our works better. If you are interested, so mail me at manandhar.rahul221@gmail.com I hope that the 5 star review finds you well cause you deserve it.

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Dasavar
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I would love to rate this story higher cause I enjoy many aspects of it, but everything is tinged with the rage I feel at so much being gatekept behind a Patreon especially pictures of new Pokemon forms even years later despite the fact that the Patrons already get voting/poll rights and extra chapters so gatekeeping/extorting new form/new mon pictures too just thoroughly pisses me off. If it weren't for that major issue cause I don't mind the pacing/info dumps even though many others do I would rate the story at a 4.2 by Webnovels total cumulative.

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InLotadIBelieve

Ok, so I've read +500 chapters and I think that's enough waiting for SOMETHING interesting to happen and have stakes. Don't get me wrong, the world building in this book is awesome and extreamely detailed (sometimes too much, really what was the need to change the name of the week days?), but that is very likely the only point of this book that could be considered excellent (at least content wise, the author is really consistent with his publishings and almost regularly answers any doubt from the readers). This story doesn't feel like what you'd expect of a trainer and his team getting better together through hardships (the thing I always love about pkmn fics). No. It feels like a Zookeeper with his zoo curvestomping everything. The author LOVES info dumping, because he thought of interesting things, and he WILL make it your problem. The author goes and uses a calendar as a way of passing time, with tedious and repetitive things. Really, the story is often full of small time-skips (sometimes bigger) or is so slow paced (and uninteresting) that it makes you want it to be a time-skip. The lack of details in the interesting things is astounding. 500+ chapter and I remember 1 arch with interesting and "close" battles, and that was just because MC was holding back. Other than that, the detailed (detailed as in not skipped) pokemon battles scattered around this 500+ chapters can be counted with the fingers of both hands (and I dont say one because I am sure I am forgetting some, wich is NOT a good sign). He has too much pokemon. MC goes "quality over quantity? Why not both?" wich ends up with lots of bland characters (pokemons) and many times the development is often just "A week has passed, X pokemon has developed Y stat. Another week has passed, Z pokemon has developed W stat." and feels like a glorified excel spreadsheet. In conclusion, I understand why so many people like it, but I would say it is monotonous and a bit boring normally, with some times becoming a bit interesting at best. Good enough to fill time, but not much more.

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Lazyswede

one of the best pokemon FF i have ever read, tho it is a bit slow in the start, it does explain alot of world settings so it's fine. It really starts to get good when he starts to explore other towns. overall great work, keep it up.

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Vaneford

I finally caught up to the latest chapter, and let me be honest with my review. if you've read the other reviews about it being slow let me tell you it is Slooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooow and grammatically painful BUT Azrail gets better as a story teller and in grammar that's all my complaint Now for the things that i like in this FF is a LOT the details, world building, new pokemons, not the romance, mother and a lot more. This FF ruined other pokemon fic for me because when i tried finding different pokefic I cant find others like this This is what i like [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Game_B_Roll

This story has amazing potential but i have reached almost chapter 300 at the end of academy arc. There are 2 big cons in the story thou: 1) You give full status screen updates for all pokemon like even those that are not even important for every small thing like a move reaching a new level of matery. There are dozens we dont remember all that. So why not just show there status fully before fight? Also why do you give more updates for pokemon which will be like his third team but we get rarely updates of MC? Like every 50 chapters only. 2) MC never faces the threat of death even now? Like missions are fast paced for even other novels? Like a few chapters for missions? What i really want is a scene of MC fighting a horde to protect a city etc! Because that is his speciality with his own army. I don't get it? You have so much foreshadowing of how this world is not peaceful! Where it seems towns are commonly destroyed. But MC has never expirenced something like that himself.

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Dorian_Hoowkmyn

Я впервые сталкиваюсь с таким героем. Почти 900 глав а герой ещё ребенок лет 12. Причем его путешествие началось в 600 главах. Смело можно говорить, что история минимум глав на 10000. Я честно когда начал читать понял что есть подвох на главе 180 на 250 я начал просто листать в перед. Я уверен автор не сможет закончить историю. Либо устанет. Либо не хватит времени. Не советую данное произведение тем, кто любит активные действия. Те кто любит описания всего ( я имею в виду буквально всего, как техническую инструкцию вам понравится) -10 балов из 10.

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reading1dao1god

Very good novel, novel muito boa recomendo lerem, não vão perder tempo é um ótimo trabalho em andamento espero q continue assim. Very good novel, novel muito boa recomendo lerem, não vão perder tempo é um ótimo trabalho em andamento espero q continue assim.

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Potato_killer

It honestly becomes a drag to read just filler about the mc catching pokemon for like 40 chapters straight and you just know these pokemon will never actually become relevant to the story. By chapter 800 nothing has happened other then the small major arcs that make up like 200 chapters. The rest are just filler and unnecessary side-quests that dont lead anywhere. Even the training stuff that the mc does and the whole academy arc just becomes irrelevant.

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Original_Eternal

20x15=300 ch before starting journey?. . . . . ............................................................................................................

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BrotherBear_

Love your story really like the world building and how you gradually build it up. You see a lot of stories on here that get in on the action early on and pretty soon after that taper of and become this tangeld mess which doesn’t really make any sense. But you on the other hand did a geat job on the early stage world building and laying a solid foundation! Love the story keep up the good work[img=recommend]

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Daoisteaa4TY

solid original story of, but a very slow and well built story

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MarinXGrayfia

just briefly checking mc mon, and found all mc mon have a name. i mean it's cool you name pokemon in game but not for reading. no one will and can remember their name. soo it's a huge bummer for me.

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Game_B_Roll

Author, can you give me some tips on power scalings for novels? I have done mine for a new rpg style one with formulas but I want to create a original without these elements like yours is the best power scaling i have seen. I will be very grateful if you could.

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Game_B_Roll

Author, In the last paragraph of synopsis you wrote conplaining not complaining.

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death_frost2345

Godly novel with a godly writer that knows how to dump dopamine into my veins seeing 600 chapters without fighting a gym in an overpowered pokemon power fantasy 😀

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Shreya_Tiwari_0275

This is not a story that is everyone's cup of tea, it is written slowly, carefully and deliberately. It is clear that the plot is well thought out rather than just putting up whatever comes out of the author's mind. Overall 5 on 5, long read and keeps you guessing. Also does this progress as a harem?

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Mana_Mannequin_003

wonderful world building and power scaling. Definitely a must read among pokemon fan-fic.

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Kaylin26

I genuinely wish there weren't too many lazy people who reviews story and deceive people on rating a book. This story isnt too bad in the beginning (aside from the crazy amount of info dumping that lots of people have gotten rather irritated with), there was quite some potential with the story plot. However it all started to go downhill when the info dumping isn't so apparent, so many glaring issues with this story pop out then. I've already notice quite some obvious ones even from the beginning for example the strange flow of dialogues and conversation (it can be cringy and lame, rigid and bland, stiff and awkward etc), strange jump on important info, unnecessary filler, strange jumpskip on activites or time skip, repetitive lines (that are cringey n lame, trust me you'd remember after seeing them, I can even quote those lines by now), sudden introduce of characters, middle school syndrome vibe from so many aspects, you'd think u get a smart mc with the way how he decided to reincarnate at first but it just starts to become rather dumb, hypocritical and a cringey mc at some point. There are some pros with the story that I won't neglect considering the amiuny of effort the author put in the beginning with the world building but even so many there's quite a lot to be polish because of some of the unnecessary and too much details and info that get people's head spinning for no reason. Honestly if u cant balance it, it's better to reduce the world building when it's just burdening the entire story. I do like with some of the creative ways to use the Pokémon moves and battle but I've only read til) close to half the book so I can't say if it improve or spiral downwards instead cuz I can see the Mc getting a bit too op. There's really a lot more to rant on but I'd rather stop. I just hope to whoever who plans to read this, pls be mentally prepared. Some of the glaring cons I mention may irritate u when u read. I'm still continuing because I genuinely do like pokemon adventuring and I still see a tad bit potential and I'm curious how the Mc will go on. I guess I'm just trying to turn a blind eye and be patient with the terrible parts of the story. Nonetheless it's hard to give this a good rating like the other people which makes me wonder what kind of story they've actually read...

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Stonework

An absolute banger of a story. If you’re looking for a story where the MC becomes absolutely overpowered when the story starts then this ain’t it. This story is slow-paced but filled with amazing detail that immerses you into the story so well that you can picture yourself alongside them.

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xyzsaber

This is one of the, if not the best Pokemon related novel I have read in the last coir do years. It’s consistently getting better as it goes on.

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The_Arch_Fiend

This story is well written and has good detail in both world building as well as character’s. It’s about what you would expect if you had a bunch of Pokémon and could only write and talk about them a certain amount. What I would really like if we could get aux chapters fully detailing the world building such as trainer ranks stages/requirments, the various guilds, more detail into rangers and military related things and such. It would be even better that once those are written up that others can write inspired stories from these as I already know of one that is in another language just written in a more op fast track way. Reason: I am curios at trying and hand at it even if I will likely end up dropping it and having a good base would make it much more motivating. Hell I could see it making a thread/writing prompt based on this and doing a community set up so everyone could flesh out and make this world more amazing and detailed than it already is. I love this story

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Chrono_Nova_Gaming

At chapter 211 story I good so far might need to work on vocabulary a bit but otherwise story is good like a mix of cultivation novel and Pokemon. I just wanted to say don't make this story an harem either don't include romance or give me an single partner because for me harem ruins story

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LazyLazer_RSP

Be prepared for walls and walls of info-dumps. Also be prepared to lose all interest in pokemon fanfics after trying this AU. The sheer depth and thought put into carefully crafting the world makes any other version seem too simplistic in comparison...including the original. I love and hate this series for many reasons and you will too. As boring and stilted as the story gets at times, you have to really respect the author for how much effort they put into it. Everything is 5 stars except writing quality and that's because the author tends to go too far into tangents or being too thorough with providing info to the point you'd beg for it to stop repeating things. YET even then it's still a 4 star in quality despite such a glaring detriment since everything else refuses to be dragged down. The author sometimes prioritizes info dump over characters so be prepared for some rather sterile dialogue here and there, but it's actually overall very rare and easy to ignore. My most honest and apt comparison for this is those youtube videos of 'professional redraws child's art', where it boggles your mind how much a steady/experienced hand can do so much with so little. Yes it's a little extreme and gets carried away at times, but the author's vision always pays off in more ways than you could've hoped. If you are obsessed with magic/mystic powers, this is for you. If you love choreographed fights that are well thought out, this is for you. World building your thang? Then this is definitely for you since I'm pretty sure that's the whole core of this series.

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Bhrendal_Silveira

Livro maravilhoso, me incentivou a escrever

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Mootr
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it is a very good story to read but it the type of story you leave alone in your library until it has a lot of chapters to read.

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Prem_Sanjai

This story is too damn slow and big,if you want to read a relaxing story this not the story for you

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Expend

This is a master class work of fiction. I have been reading this from when I was in 7th grade to now in 10th grade. I just wanted you to j so that I really appreciate you for continuing this series.

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Paul_Legaspi

This is a great Pokemon Fanfic. Read and support, so the story, adventure and catching-them-all continues.

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