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Finished a complete rewrite and edit of the first 20 or so chapters, and have since updated the writing style to my most concurrent works. Improved characters, lore, and grammatical structure. Feel free to read or not. It's a harry potter fic, so y'know. You'll either love it or hate it. If you want to read ahead, you know what to do.
Overall it seems good. There is a lot of mistakes or possibly gaps of information the author has within the HP universe. You could assume it’s an authors universe because of these mistakes but they are slightly annoying. Now on to the other issue. It was dropped or put on hiatus. So the story is over done never to be again. Or so I assume. It only just starts the second year so it’s almost not much of a read however the concept isn’t bad, I think in the end this has a lot of potential but it is what it is.
He is not doing much but is reading the books and is focusing on his single spelling. (No friends, No Girls, No Interest in House points 😒).His character is not developing (Nothing but a bookworm Bigger than Hermione 😖😵💫)😩😫
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Very good Harry Potter fic. I like the SI, sometimes he comes off as kinda unemotional though, like he's a robot, but that was mainly in the earlier chapters. Finally a story where Dumbledore isn't some crazy old pedo wizard, I was kinda getting sick of those, like I get that he was kinda sus in the original medias but sometimes authors take it a step too far. I enjoyed these chapters, with my only complaint being that they are too short, and that gets kinda tedious to read when not binging the whole novel, but each chapter is engaging enough that it doesn't really bother me too much. Solid novel, hope it prospers.
honestly till now everything is awesome u can see all the ideas are put at their right place no flaws in story progression🔥🔥🔥🔥
this is pretty good fic, but the release speed is too slow and the chapters are too short. I'm on the latest chapter and it's still on September 3rd, and the day is not over yet. It's one of those fic that looks promising but highly unlikely to be completed.
Acceptable could be better not much is expected of a novice writer. Skskzkxkzjdzijsskdjzksbcudsijeucusjfidiqjxusqjgydjwkxjdiskcjskdjgjwiwjgjdusjdjxiaj
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what a mesmerising novel everything till this moment was put in its right place ....no flaws ,no unnecessary repeations, consistnt narration,, really the author mase great job🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes
It's looks promising and the only downside of this story is... THE LENGTH OF THE CHAPTERS ARE WAY TOO SHORT!!!👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿
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A interesting beginning to a fan fiction! Hopefully the author will update good amount of chapters to keep It in the loop. all the best to the author❤️
Uh-oh!!! Another Fanfiction! Remember, it's a wish-fulfillment. It's made for me. If you don't like it, that's because it's a story to fit my specific fantasy. I post it thinking maybe someone else has the same fantasy, same premise as my Star Wars fanfiction.
Finished a complete rewrite and edit of the first 20 or so chapters, and have since updated the writing style to my most concurrent works. Improved characters, lore, and grammatical structure. Feel free to read or not. It's a harry potter fic, so y'know. You'll either love it or hate it. If you want to read ahead, you know what to do.
Overall it seems good. There is a lot of mistakes or possibly gaps of information the author has within the HP universe. You could assume it’s an authors universe because of these mistakes but they are slightly annoying. Now on to the other issue. It was dropped or put on hiatus. So the story is over done never to be again. Or so I assume. It only just starts the second year so it’s almost not much of a read however the concept isn’t bad, I think in the end this has a lot of potential but it is what it is.
He is not doing much but is reading the books and is focusing on his single spelling. (No friends, No Girls, No Interest in House points 😒).His character is not developing (Nothing but a bookworm Bigger than Hermione 😖😵💫)😩😫
Chap51....…………....……………………………………….......……....……………………………………….......……………………....……………………………………….......…...........………………………………………...........………………………………………...........………………………………………...........……………………………………….......
ネタバレを明かす Very good Harry Potter fic. I like the SI, sometimes he comes off as kinda unemotional though, like he's a robot, but that was mainly in the earlier chapters. Finally a story where Dumbledore isn't some crazy old pedo wizard, I was kinda getting sick of those, like I get that he was kinda sus in the original medias but sometimes authors take it a step too far. I enjoyed these chapters, with my only complaint being that they are too short, and that gets kinda tedious to read when not binging the whole novel, but each chapter is engaging enough that it doesn't really bother me too much. Solid novel, hope it prospers.
honestly till now everything is awesome u can see all the ideas are put at their right place no flaws in story progression🔥🔥🔥🔥
this is pretty good fic, but the release speed is too slow and the chapters are too short. I'm on the latest chapter and it's still on September 3rd, and the day is not over yet. It's one of those fic that looks promising but highly unlikely to be completed.
Acceptable could be better not much is expected of a novice writer. Skskzkxkzjdzijsskdjzksbcudsijeucusjfidiqjxusqjgydjwkxjdiskcjskdjgjwiwjgjdusjdjxiaj
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what a mesmerising novel everything till this moment was put in its right place ....no flaws ,no unnecessary repeations, consistnt narration,, really the author mase great job🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes Me gusta espero que no la dejes
It's looks promising and the only downside of this story is... THE LENGTH OF THE CHAPTERS ARE WAY TOO SHORT!!!👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿
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A interesting beginning to a fan fiction! Hopefully the author will update good amount of chapters to keep It in the loop. all the best to the author❤️
Uh-oh!!! Another Fanfiction! Remember, it's a wish-fulfillment. It's made for me. If you don't like it, that's because it's a story to fit my specific fantasy. I post it thinking maybe someone else has the same fantasy, same premise as my Star Wars fanfiction.