バッジ 5
Moments 52
Some things I noticed in my reading so far. 1- In the narration you should only use the past tense, never the present tense. 2- For better writing, it is advisable to use only one active verb form per sentence, without forgetting the different complements. 3- You should never break the fourth wall in a third person narration, so: no questions during the narration. 4- If you decide to write in the third person: never write in the first person during the narration. That's all, best regards.
ch 0 1 Reincarnation
Douluo Dao : Soul Archer: The Bow of Destiny
Anime & Comics · Grategoku
But if Fujin kills Biwa Juzo afterwards, that wouldn't make any plot sense either. Because, after all, killing him by surprise, something simpler, only substantiates that Fujin didn't want to kill him in the first place, the reason: Probably because the mc is afraid of changing the future drastically and that's fine with me, it's wise if one thinks about it logically, no sane person would give up an advantage like knowing the future beforehand, but it makes the narrative lose some of the raw emotion that this great fic had in its beginnings.
ch 382 Chapter 381 : The Second Clash with the Akatsuki!
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
I hope Fujin doesn't let Biwa Juzo go. It would be disappointing to say the least, no matter what the excuse. Fujin outclasses his opponent in every way.
ch 382 Chapter 381 : The Second Clash with the Akatsuki!
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
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Reverend Insanity: White Shadow Demonic Venerable
Anime & Comics · Bruhdamante