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Author's note: There are few things that should be cleared before you pick up the story and give it a go. 1. The intention of writing this gaming novel is not to educate noobs. There are so many gaming novels talking about every skills dragging hundred of chapters in increasing the levels of the skills and blah blah. So to say you won't find cliche things. If you cannot digest something new then do not try this story. 2. My writing style differ. I am an original author and I have my creative space so my writing has its difference which might be new or unacceptable for many of you. So if you decide to read it then it means you can tolerate different writing style. If you still complain then your complains would be considered groundless. 3. I am not native English speaker and English is my fourth run on language. You can expect grammer 'degenration' at many points in the novel. If you feel sour reading poor grammer based story then my suggestion is to save your taste buds. 4. I have no plans of including romance or harem in this story. 5. This story is created in alternate universe so keep your common sense limited to yourself. 6. I will be hiring artist to draw main characters so that you can have general idea about our MC's team. 7. If necessary I will create character lists and the list of professions other than the weapons. Anyone interested to take look at those lists can join my discord server. 8. Enjoy the story development with the author. Have questions other than the above mentioned then leave a comment here.
Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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I wanna read mooooooreeee... bxbsjzjxbxhsjsjzjxnbxnxjcjdjjdjxbcbc don't know why it needs a 140 letters but ok... I'm enjoying it waaaahhhhh
I only really have one comment, and it’s vital that the person publishing this book on here reads it: Please, for the love of god, find someone to handle the grammar for you. Find a proper translator to handle this so it doesn’t look so blocky or cut off in areas. I read the last book you had on here, but after a while, the grammar started causing massive headaches. Your story has plenty of potential, you’re a great Storyteller. However, you NEED to find someone who can make it look more readable. You will scare away hundreds of potential readers who can’t handle this lack of care towards the language and the story. Otherwise, you’re doing great. Just make sure you work hard to find someone who has English as their first language to properly go through and fix the grammar. Using translation tools DOES NOT WORK.
Although all stories have typical cliches, it doesn't mean that the story will be bad, this one for example has an enjoyable story and plot so i do recommend people to try it out first
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I believe there is a problem in the translations for this novel. The grammer and sentence structure can be confusing. I could not make it past a few chapter before giving up. I tried looking ahead and it didn't seem to get better.
Reading the first few chapters I was intrigued with the story, it had potential. However the grammar and writing are confusing, this is harsh but I can barely understand the story.
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For anyone wondering, I think the novel has the potential to be fantastic. However, the author desparately needs to hire an editor. You can understand what is happening and what the author is describing, but the verbiage and sentence structure is really, really bad.
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This story looks like it will be good. I'll change my review to 5 stars if is can get some editing into something I can actually understand.
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I've checked the novel out. it's so bad mate. can someone please delete this already? the author must be braindead or something. i thought it was so good when I saw the other reviews and the win-win ranking but it's a joke
Starting chapters really impressed me! The concept of guy bullied by other boys seems interesting because what happened in the real life is interesting to read as a story.
Grammar is a little bad. But other than that, it is a great book. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
I can't say much, It's good in it's own way but the quality of it's writing is quite a problem. The space between dialogue and narration is too tight, sometimes it makes me confused and lost. But the story is overally good, kudos to the author!
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Haha Pretty good novel, despite the formatting issues, it is nothing that impairs your reading experience. I would recommend this novel that has a relatively original plot.
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Great novel so far. I really like the pace. The plot's pretty good and the way the author writes is cool too. All in all, keep up the good work.
The synopsis is interesting and so is the story. It keeps you hooked and wanting to read more and more. The world is beautiful and can not help but make you feel sad about the main hero of the story. I would like to thank the author for introducing us to such a lovely story.
the story is a bit confusing at first, but, you should read more to understand the plots. Author is doing a good job in describing the story development. A must read book for those who love this genre.
the story is amazing but the writing quality is bad ( no offence ) you can understand the meaning of the things the author is trying to portray but it gets kind of annoying reading grammar mistakes here and there. But if the author becomes better at english, this story would be a masterpiece. That's my take [img=recommend][img=recommend]
This is a masterpiece! Good job Author! The synopsis got me curious since I'm not that familiar in this genre, and reading this was a great choice. The plot was unique and I love your awesome writing skill. Author did a great job in writing this book, the narration and the choices of words are on point and fits perfectly. The author got an imaginative and creative mind and an excellent skill in putting into words the world of this book and making the readers see it with their imagination. Great job Author! Looking forward for the rest of the chapters.
Solid beginning. I will read more soon, but this is developed enough that even I got caught up in it - not usually that much into system stories but the author knows what they are doing. The system itself is smoothly written, and while I am not normally a game type of reader, so to speak, this is just so fun to read and y'all should also read the synopsis entirely. It gets even better once you really get into the story.
The author has done a a great justice to his book...though I'm not a fan of gaming books but the synopsis of the book and other chapter has blown me away....Must read book who loves gaming book! Great work 👌
The book has an interesting start. It is well described and well structured world background.. Looking forward to be it in top 50. Well done author
good story, intersting characters, i got hooked from the start. looking forward for further updates. i will request for another mass relase author
this seems interesting and the interesting point for me is that mc can complete tasks and gain XP to new abilities and I will continue reading it when more chapters come out, good luck author 👍
Author's note: There are few things that should be cleared before you pick up the story and give it a go. 1. The intention of writing this gaming novel is not to educate noobs. There are so many gaming novels talking about every skills dragging hundred of chapters in increasing the levels of the skills and blah blah. So to say you won't find cliche things. If you cannot digest something new then do not try this story. 2. My writing style differ. I am an original author and I have my creative space so my writing has its difference which might be new or unacceptable for many of you. So if you decide to read it then it means you can tolerate different writing style. If you still complain then your complains would be considered groundless. 3. I am not native English speaker and English is my fourth run on language. You can expect grammer 'degenration' at many points in the novel. If you feel sour reading poor grammer based story then my suggestion is to save your taste buds. 4. I have no plans of including romance or harem in this story. 5. This story is created in alternate universe so keep your common sense limited to yourself. 6. I will be hiring artist to draw main characters so that you can have general idea about our MC's team. 7. If necessary I will create character lists and the list of professions other than the weapons. Anyone interested to take look at those lists can join my discord server. 8. Enjoy the story development with the author. Have questions other than the above mentioned then leave a comment here.
Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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I wanna read mooooooreeee... bxbsjzjxbxhsjsjzjxnbxnxjcjdjjdjxbcbc don't know why it needs a 140 letters but ok... I'm enjoying it waaaahhhhh
I only really have one comment, and it’s vital that the person publishing this book on here reads it: Please, for the love of god, find someone to handle the grammar for you. Find a proper translator to handle this so it doesn’t look so blocky or cut off in areas. I read the last book you had on here, but after a while, the grammar started causing massive headaches. Your story has plenty of potential, you’re a great Storyteller. However, you NEED to find someone who can make it look more readable. You will scare away hundreds of potential readers who can’t handle this lack of care towards the language and the story. Otherwise, you’re doing great. Just make sure you work hard to find someone who has English as their first language to properly go through and fix the grammar. Using translation tools DOES NOT WORK.
Although all stories have typical cliches, it doesn't mean that the story will be bad, this one for example has an enjoyable story and plot so i do recommend people to try it out first
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I believe there is a problem in the translations for this novel. The grammer and sentence structure can be confusing. I could not make it past a few chapter before giving up. I tried looking ahead and it didn't seem to get better.
Reading the first few chapters I was intrigued with the story, it had potential. However the grammar and writing are confusing, this is harsh but I can barely understand the story.
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For anyone wondering, I think the novel has the potential to be fantastic. However, the author desparately needs to hire an editor. You can understand what is happening and what the author is describing, but the verbiage and sentence structure is really, really bad.
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This story looks like it will be good. I'll change my review to 5 stars if is can get some editing into something I can actually understand.
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I've checked the novel out. it's so bad mate. can someone please delete this already? the author must be braindead or something. i thought it was so good when I saw the other reviews and the win-win ranking but it's a joke
Starting chapters really impressed me! The concept of guy bullied by other boys seems interesting because what happened in the real life is interesting to read as a story.
Grammar is a little bad. But other than that, it is a great book. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
I can't say much, It's good in it's own way but the quality of it's writing is quite a problem. The space between dialogue and narration is too tight, sometimes it makes me confused and lost. But the story is overally good, kudos to the author!
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ネタバレを明かす Haha Pretty good novel, despite the formatting issues, it is nothing that impairs your reading experience. I would recommend this novel that has a relatively original plot.
ネタバレを明かす Great novel so far. I really like the pace. The plot's pretty good and the way the author writes is cool too. All in all, keep up the good work.
The synopsis is interesting and so is the story. It keeps you hooked and wanting to read more and more. The world is beautiful and can not help but make you feel sad about the main hero of the story. I would like to thank the author for introducing us to such a lovely story.
the story is a bit confusing at first, but, you should read more to understand the plots. Author is doing a good job in describing the story development. A must read book for those who love this genre.
the story is amazing but the writing quality is bad ( no offence ) you can understand the meaning of the things the author is trying to portray but it gets kind of annoying reading grammar mistakes here and there. But if the author becomes better at english, this story would be a masterpiece. That's my take [img=recommend][img=recommend]
This is a masterpiece! Good job Author! The synopsis got me curious since I'm not that familiar in this genre, and reading this was a great choice. The plot was unique and I love your awesome writing skill. Author did a great job in writing this book, the narration and the choices of words are on point and fits perfectly. The author got an imaginative and creative mind and an excellent skill in putting into words the world of this book and making the readers see it with their imagination. Great job Author! Looking forward for the rest of the chapters.
Solid beginning. I will read more soon, but this is developed enough that even I got caught up in it - not usually that much into system stories but the author knows what they are doing. The system itself is smoothly written, and while I am not normally a game type of reader, so to speak, this is just so fun to read and y'all should also read the synopsis entirely. It gets even better once you really get into the story.
The author has done a a great justice to his book...though I'm not a fan of gaming books but the synopsis of the book and other chapter has blown me away....Must read book who loves gaming book! Great work 👌
The book has an interesting start. It is well described and well structured world background.. Looking forward to be it in top 50. Well done author
good story, intersting characters, i got hooked from the start. looking forward for further updates. i will request for another mass relase author
this seems interesting and the interesting point for me is that mc can complete tasks and gain XP to new abilities and I will continue reading it when more chapters come out, good luck author 👍