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В целом история мне понравилась. Хотелось бы улучшить качество перевода и побольше описания мира и духовных зверей. Желаю автору не останавливаться на достигнутом, верить в свои силы, творческих успехов и вдохновения.
The story is quite to my liking, with the mc being an actual old being and not someone who gets reincarnated into a lascivious 15-year-old. I had a bit of confusion around the time someone named "Joseph" became the POV, what exactly happened to Mu En, or is this the start of the development of both transmigrators' meeting? Anyway, I have high expectations. Please spend time on the development of the characters. Just a selfish request, please do not resort to forcing romantic interests which many similar novels do. I myself hate poorly done romantic endeavours so if you are "not" as confident in the development of such, please do not resort to forcing it. The mc has more to explore, such as the life of being a god or above it, seeing his "family's" descendants, etc. With that being said, please do not drop this novel.
I don't know if it's only my opinion but it's quality is pretty low compared upto chapter 30, and to tell the truth I'm going to drop this fanfic if this continues I really hope the Author to improve the quality of this fanfic, I really do
While a fun and interesting story. It is so fast past with either time skips or sudden jumps in power the protagonist ends up over powered in honestly no time and deals with everything like there chores.
I don't usually read a lot but , reading your stuff makes me feel like I'm apart of the story . Great work ,and I'm looking forward to what you will bring in the future.
The plot is al lot better than some of the Soul land books ice seen. througly Enjoyed it
Awesome Fic. Although, I don't actually get the cover page considering the MC is/was a spider not a whatever that is on the cover page? I like that the MC in this Fic is a Spirit Beast.
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I gave you ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ in every thing. WHERE ARE YOU, come and continue it u Said 1 month it's already 2months. PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEeeEEEeeeeeeeeeeeE
un hombre que sigue la trama mejor dicho y solo coloca condicione para que sus supuestas hijas se casen sabiendo que va a pasar que asco de fan fic ;V
I need more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
It is one of the best fic I have ever read. And it is quite the refreshment amongst the many garbage out there.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂☺️☺️☺️
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
always a good read when there's an overprotective parent or grandparent, it also makes the story lighthearted and makes it soothe my heart, pity theres no more updates
A five star review in hope for author coming back... Pray for sudden mass release and its all filled with 10k word for each chapter... Amen.
hmm, I didn't think there was a doulou fanfic that is not a harem so you can imagine my surprise when I found this and then the intro got me to read this but sadly the talk in the intro didn't happen. but anything else other than that I ok
Hey dear author ! this is liaison, an editor from Stary.ltd. I just read your book .I love it so much If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact ：liaisonringdom@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
...welp, I am hooked, just from the summary of the fanfic makes it as clear as day that this will be the most entertaining one I will ever read in terms of Doulou something. (Sorry, don't know the Doulou Daolou? I don't know)
the synopsis ensnared me completely. absolutely got my attention. im still in the middle of reading something different(on a different platform), so for now ill just add it to my library and read this later. as a man that Judges other novels on their cover and synopsis(like everyone else does) i can only say that this one won completely.
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After their finish the spirit control training, ask them to maybe separate colored sand like medic Nin in narutoverse for precise control and for combat experience, just get them on a hunt of bandit and killer instead of in arena... That would let them know fro start that they would kill instead of the shock from canon... Hunt some bounty maybe..
BEST SYNOPSIS SO FAR HAHAHAHAHAHAHHA I havent read the story but here I am doing this review to give kudos to e intro. it made my day lmaoooo
Lanjutkan makasih author ceritannya bagus. .................................,...............................................................
The Author here! I will make it clear for anyone who expects anything! First no harem. I have not even thought which character to use as a love interest. If I really decide to do it, it will be Bi Ji, the Emerald Swan. And the plot might feel fast for the first 20 chaps but it will be reasonable as he is a spirit beast and there will be a lot of time skips...for the first 20 chaps or so he will be getting power. He will try and be a strong spirit beast. I plan to make him involved in plot events of DD1 which is only like 50 years away from the main plotline so that's why I am making him reasonably strong. I also try to make my writing better though English is not my first language, I promise you won't feel uncomfortable reading it. There may only be mistakes regarding commas or there maybe more but hey I am not perfect. I will try and add much humour as possible to make it enjoyable for you. So let's make the comment box and reviews as peaceful as possible. I hope if you have complaints regarding the novel, I hope you comment it here. I will be checking it always and try to get back at you always. Also I REQUEST of you STRONGLY that please comment what you think about certain paragraphs in the story. I hope that you will try and make the comment box as lively as possible. Because personally, when I see those comments I feel glad that at least someone is enjoying them, they act as a motivation to me. Be it fair criticism or praise I will be there to answer you! I may have missed something but if you wanna know something just fill the reply box below!
В целом история мне понравилась. Хотелось бы улучшить качество перевода и побольше описания мира и духовных зверей. Желаю автору не останавливаться на достигнутом, верить в свои силы, творческих успехов и вдохновения.
The story is quite to my liking, with the mc being an actual old being and not someone who gets reincarnated into a lascivious 15-year-old. I had a bit of confusion around the time someone named "Joseph" became the POV, what exactly happened to Mu En, or is this the start of the development of both transmigrators' meeting? Anyway, I have high expectations. Please spend time on the development of the characters. Just a selfish request, please do not resort to forcing romantic interests which many similar novels do. I myself hate poorly done romantic endeavours so if you are "not" as confident in the development of such, please do not resort to forcing it. The mc has more to explore, such as the life of being a god or above it, seeing his "family's" descendants, etc. With that being said, please do not drop this novel.
I don't know if it's only my opinion but it's quality is pretty low compared upto chapter 30, and to tell the truth I'm going to drop this fanfic if this continues I really hope the Author to improve the quality of this fanfic, I really do
While a fun and interesting story. It is so fast past with either time skips or sudden jumps in power the protagonist ends up over powered in honestly no time and deals with everything like there chores.
I don't usually read a lot but , reading your stuff makes me feel like I'm apart of the story . Great work ,and I'm looking forward to what you will bring in the future.
The plot is al lot better than some of the Soul land books ice seen. througly Enjoyed it
Awesome Fic. Although, I don't actually get the cover page considering the MC is/was a spider not a whatever that is on the cover page? I like that the MC in this Fic is a Spirit Beast.
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I gave you ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ in every thing. WHERE ARE YOU, come and continue it u Said 1 month it's already 2months. PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEeeEEEeeeeeeeeeeeE
un hombre que sigue la trama mejor dicho y solo coloca condicione para que sus supuestas hijas se casen sabiendo que va a pasar que asco de fan fic ;V
I need more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
It is one of the best fic I have ever read. And it is quite the refreshment amongst the many garbage out there.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂☺️☺️☺️
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
always a good read when there's an overprotective parent or grandparent, it also makes the story lighthearted and makes it soothe my heart, pity theres no more updates
A five star review in hope for author coming back... Pray for sudden mass release and its all filled with 10k word for each chapter... Amen.
hmm, I didn't think there was a doulou fanfic that is not a harem so you can imagine my surprise when I found this and then the intro got me to read this but sadly the talk in the intro didn't happen. but anything else other than that I ok
Hey dear author ! this is liaison, an editor from Stary.ltd. I just read your book .I love it so much If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact ：liaisonringdom@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
...welp, I am hooked, just from the summary of the fanfic makes it as clear as day that this will be the most entertaining one I will ever read in terms of Doulou something. (Sorry, don't know the Doulou Daolou? I don't know)
the synopsis ensnared me completely. absolutely got my attention. im still in the middle of reading something different(on a different platform), so for now ill just add it to my library and read this later. as a man that Judges other novels on their cover and synopsis(like everyone else does) i can only say that this one won completely.
5-5=0>-1-2=-3>0<1>-14324324535555555555555555555555++++++++++"""""""""""""""""""""LLLLLLLLLLLLLJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJdddddssdsdsd?????????????????????????????????????
After their finish the spirit control training, ask them to maybe separate colored sand like medic Nin in narutoverse for precise control and for combat experience, just get them on a hunt of bandit and killer instead of in arena... That would let them know fro start that they would kill instead of the shock from canon... Hunt some bounty maybe..
BEST SYNOPSIS SO FAR HAHAHAHAHAHAHHA I havent read the story but here I am doing this review to give kudos to e intro. it made my day lmaoooo
Lanjutkan makasih author ceritannya bagus. .................................,...............................................................
The Author here! I will make it clear for anyone who expects anything! First no harem. I have not even thought which character to use as a love interest. If I really decide to do it, it will be Bi Ji, the Emerald Swan. And the plot might feel fast for the first 20 chaps but it will be reasonable as he is a spirit beast and there will be a lot of time skips...for the first 20 chaps or so he will be getting power. He will try and be a strong spirit beast. I plan to make him involved in plot events of DD1 which is only like 50 years away from the main plotline so that's why I am making him reasonably strong. I also try to make my writing better though English is not my first language, I promise you won't feel uncomfortable reading it. There may only be mistakes regarding commas or there maybe more but hey I am not perfect. I will try and add much humour as possible to make it enjoyable for you. So let's make the comment box and reviews as peaceful as possible. I hope if you have complaints regarding the novel, I hope you comment it here. I will be checking it always and try to get back at you always. Also I REQUEST of you STRONGLY that please comment what you think about certain paragraphs in the story. I hope that you will try and make the comment box as lively as possible. Because personally, when I see those comments I feel glad that at least someone is enjoying them, they act as a motivation to me. Be it fair criticism or praise I will be there to answer you! I may have missed something but if you wanna know something just fill the reply box below!