Black Onyx - Forgotten Magic

LV 3

Virgin_Loli

I'm disappointed. I thought this was a story about secrets with a deep magical system, but after 85 chapters, nothing special has happened, except that the author constantly puts a stick in the wheels of the main character. First, by adding a useless female character that created a lot of problems for the main character, then I introduced nanites that should help, but instead only harm by interfering with the effects of really useful potions, I do not know what will happen next but at the moment I can't imagine how else the author can ruin the life of the main character except by crippling him completely and leaving him to die in some roadside ditch arriving in the abyss of despair and suffering Writing Quality: 5/5 Updating Stability: 5/5 Story Development: 3/5 Character Design: 3/5 World Background: 4/5

LV 12

KarmaKalo

If you're still on the fence for reading this one I would say just do it. This story has solid progression with the growth of the characters' power. None of the instant op, and he is given roadblocks constantly but finds a way to get himself out. One thing I'm not to sure of is romance for him but aside from that full marks from me

Pretty good, at times could use a bit more of the "show don't tell" rule like for example at the beginning it states that he's highly intelligent witch comes off pretty bad. It's better usually to explain stuff like that trough actions and achievements rather than to blatantly say it. Other than that, the world is pretty interesting and I'm wondering if he'll end up going back to earth at some point in the story since it seems kinda relevant.

LV 14

dnl499

Can't say much about this book, for now. But it is worth a shot. There are a few grammar mistakes, but not enough to make it unpleasant to read.

LV 5

ARES

Great story, I like the character development a lot, its not like the normal storyline its realm intriguing. Haaa but alas it has the problem of slow release

LV 6

Armand_Targaryen

Oh dear author, chapter 21 of the novel ruined everything for me, your magic system is very simple, just say a word and I pseudo understand some things you can use infinite magic, I wish it was more complex like "Warlock of the Magus" World" " or like "A Sorcerer's Journey" in those novels if you have a high quality magic system

LV 15

bookdevourerworm

i highly suggest to read this top notch novel. very well written and well thought plots although there are very fewww typo errors. the story is very interesting with many twist and turns + character development is top notch. world development is very rich and interesting. i would also like to add with the mc not being too op. thank you author for sharing 😄 keep it up ✊

LV 1

GrassHopperSensei

BALANCE IS RESTORED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ................................................................................................................

LV 1

Andrei_Manea

I really enjoyed the story so far(up to ch. 305), in particular the Gothic lore elements. The cultivation system build-up is interesting as I especially enjoy the western mana/magic combination with the wuxia/xania cultivation. Great work so far, hope to read many more chapters.

LV 1

Itamar_Giovanini

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So apparently I gotta write something in here hmm... ight I guess compared to other novels on here this is pretty good. Thats all i have to say for now.

Pretty good read. World and magic system are interesting. The characters could be better developed, the girl who hangs with the MC got less of a personality than a market owner in another city for example.

LV 1

RandomName368

The start was a bit weak but it gets better as the story develops. The writing is a little bit clunky at times and there are a few typos but not too many. The world and the magic systems are interesting, but I kinda find it hard to believe that nobody would figure out some of the more basic stuff the MC did. The characters could be a bit more fleshed out, none of them besides the main character are developed and a lot of the time just feel like NPCs. They don't really have any defined goals or motivations. Overall its a fun read watching the protagonist slowly grow and face struggles, but don't go in expecting some deep plot. Oh, I almost forgot, Mister/Master G best girl, fight me.

LV 1

The_General_8652

Great story, a few cliche's, but overal completly different than the usual novels. It is getting more interestes as time goes on, I would deffenetly recomend

LV 3

Connoisseur

A very long start on the introduction of the world, almost made me drop the novel right there. The MC is a popular hot dude WITH A GIRLFRIEND, another red flag on my personal notebook, but the chapter lengths seem more acceptable now. Hoping to see shorter chapters and less normie main characters, makes me spiteful. :)

LV 4

meraj_panahande

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