Bre_dan

Did you read my whole comment. I wrote this does not line up with the dumbledore YOU have portrayed in this book. In the original book figg didn’t tell dumbledore much because she didn’t see what was happening in the house she could only suspect from the way he looked. dumbledore in the original book was a little dark and didn’t care as long as the his plan was done. But you have portrayed your dumbledore to be a saint then out of nowhere you are saying He knew everything. The original didn’t know everything only suspected.

Dumbledore can’t say no it’s not his choice he is not a legal guardian of Harry. Harry was his ward as he is a orphan but that went away when Sirius got released. And your saying dumbledore knew of the abuse and did nothing or even try to help him. This in not the dumbledore you portray in this book. Very poor writing on this chapter

So the mc is so weak now he can’t even see bullets coming. He can fight kiado and survive but normal bullets catch him lacking. There is no consistancy in this book. I swear you make it up as you go. There is Cleary no pre planned story line

So is this a sanji fan fic now. Are you going to just add another reincarnater to the crew when ever you want.

Can you make the chapters a bit longer.

Im starting to think that the author of this book has a unhealthy obsession with 11 and 12 year olds. No 12 year old is the hottest girl in ravenclaw. And the mc is in his first year so why are you calling him “hot” and saying older girls are jelous of cho. This book is uncomfortable to read and doesn’t make sense. If there is one more chapter about hot underage minors I think I’m gonna report this book for pedophilia.

Just letting you know that 11 year olds don’t flirt with each other. That is just weird and why would older students care. Are they all pedophiles or something.