Aurelian Sol = Celestial (Arishem, Tiamat, etc) better save it for last.
- League of Legends
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tl;dr constructive criticism, writing could be improved. There's some SAT reading and writing principles which would improve the flow of the paragraph and the story. At the top of my head: When the words or paragraphs correlate, put them closer. The information they're trying to convey would come across clearer with less chance of ambiguities and less jarring, especially when they are trying to be descriptive. If you read enough books within the complexity strata, you will get the feel (+flow) when proof reading and writing. example of complexity strata: light novel should fall within teen strata such as Harry Potter series and Percy Jackson 1st series, while complex novel such as GoT and LotR would fall within adult (21+) strata. Sherlock Holmes original series fall within adult strata, while the edited penguin publisher version of Sherlock Holmes fall within teen strata. fyi, there's also academic strata, children strata, pre-world war and post-world war strata. Just think intersectionality, but for literature (don't go crazy with the division). No matter what style of writing you chose, if the flow of the sentence and paragraph staggered or choppy (jarring choice of words or sequence of sentences, readers can't really immersed in reading and enjoy the story. IF you've read this far, thanks for sparring your time reading my semi rambling comment, I really mean well.
correction. bunbound=>unbound
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Harry Potter - Smut Fiction
Book&Literature · LemonZawodowiec
looking forward for the story.
this MC is looking more like an idiot right now, with inconsistency to boot.
ROFL 🤣🤣🤣
"What technique?" He asked with thick sarcasm covering his tone, "All you do is Kawarimi right before you are hit with a singular slip of paper while activating the storage seal on that paper which pops in a paper clone mid-Kawarimi. There is that henge sustained by the clone itself that makes it seem as if my attack really hit you and blood actually spurted out before the clone dissolves back into paper slices a second later. All you do is use Clone Technique, Kawarimi, and Henge." Rei wanted to scream. "So why the fuck is it so hard to freaking hit you! What is this bullshit! You didn't even try to dodge! You didn't take even one step during the entire fight! Kawarimi, Kawarimi, Kawarimi! The fuck is that shit!?" He raged.
In Naruto: Reborn with Talent
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thx for the chapters ^^
roger
WE HUNGER FOR MORE!!!! thx for the chapters btw.^W^
space faring or space themes... like KotOR or SWtOR? Warframe? Megaman?StarCraft? or a curveball like CIV 6? coz he's developing madripoor. maybe Xcom?
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