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The Taleweaver
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One man to change a life
Two to change a world
An outworlder comes to Otherworld
where words come true
where he comes true
The Taleweaver
This is a story of mine from 2003. It's long since finished, or at least two out of three planned books are written. There will be no third.
Now while each book is a finished story in its own right there are loose ends after book two that will never get tied together.
So, dear reader, you have been warned before you decide to embark upon this journey.
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NOTE THIS IS A CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK REVIEW AND PROBABLY DOES NOT RELATE TO CURRENT STATE OF NOVEL *You can always delete if you care that much about the rating* First your novel is written like a movie script. Don't do that, those are for directors, not readers and aren't fun to read. Also dont put a enter space in a quotes paragraph. End paragraph and make new quote paragraph. There was too much info dumping, you need to make it gradually appear as your world setting needs a lot. I know its easiest to do it all at once, but it makes readers want to read less like me, to be honest I can't even remember much about what I was supposed to. I would reread once more a bit slower, your spelling looks generally god so far (maybe errors in parts I didnt read), but you need to put some commas in certain places like before and (most of time it is needed there). Too much scene changes. If you change it like that you should just write it so it makes more sense and flows better for reader. We can't see what your imagining. Also don't do #, better to just - - - or . . . or _________ or ===== to split scenes. # Just weird from a thrid perspective, even if you use, it spam it. To make a line about big enough fe a phone so 20 taps ish, you dont want to forget what readers might be resding on. Describe 5 senses more, it felt 2D. Also you should work on detailing a little more, plus make more relatable things. Fourth chapter in I still have no idea whats going on other than they landed on another planet (possibly) and the story of Arthur (mightve got name wrong) Im a stop reading now as I already wrote enough, hopefully this helps.
Just your average shameless author selfplugging his own story. Well, and collecting the daily EXP for writing a review as well. Science fantasy. Space ships and magic. Even dragons. Oh, and there's mecha as well. Any of the above central to the story? Naeh. Two men on a journey, however, is. Is this an all five star story? Hardly. Thorough editing should yield a five star writing and it's updated daily. I'll collect those. While I did give myself the other three stars as well I guess story, character and world is subjective. I don't see a reason why any of them should drop below four though.
Probably I will write not quite a typical review. Even if you want objectivity, it will still be subjective. In a good review, you need to praise the author, scold him, point out mistakes and give advice for corrections. But this can only be advised by a writer, writer, literary critic. I'm a techie, so I will write what I think and feel while reading your novel. I hope that such a review will be useful to you as an author, or at least interesting. ... Fantastic, cosmos ... for some reason, other novels immediately come to my mind ... Star Trek - Chekhov, Spock, Kirk, Leonard McCoy, Hikaru Sulu ... and then the image emerges from Crest of the Stars written by Hiroyuki Morioka Sensei and the continuation of the novel pentalogy ... ... or the Russian writer Boris Stern. Inspection of "Smuggler's Flight" ... and then you read this novel ... is it unusual ... does it seem to be a breed on StarTrek? and very interesting, thin ... or it just seemed to me ... ... And now it seems that the first chapters. like a movie screensaver ... The action itself here in the third chapter ... as if we are again returning to the newest history, reality. It is pleasant that the chapters are small, clearly stated, it is clear what is at stake. The first chapters were fascinating, full of tragedy, dynamism, but were perceived as chronicles of the documentary. The third chapter - returns the reader to the modern world. On the one hand, verbal fencing in the East is perceived as likosti and toughness, but only in relation of the elder to the younger. Otherwise, like rudeness, which leads to a problem in the future. But it is in the East, in the West other traditions. And this is already a case of a more captivating one, Chapter 5 ... well, I will read further, as long as I can read 4.4 points from what I read. I will slowly read, thanks to the author, for the opportunity to read an interesting job to brighten up the summer vacation. Respect If the author is interested, I will continue to write tomorrow ... my thoughts about this novel Respectfully,
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