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46.59% The Dark Rebirth: A Vampire's Descent into Darkness / Chapter 40: From sheltered to shattered

Bab 40: From sheltered to shattered

The creak of the door was still the same, a revelation that didn't ease him as combined with the footsteps they formed a nightmare relived thousands of times.

He still knew how it went, how it should go, as soon as someone entered he should greet them but he couldn't. Back here, back in his personal hell left him paralysed, his mind fogged in disbelief at the situation.

''It seems all the rules shall have to be taught again huh?"

Black pools opened for just a second before closing behind fluttering eyelashes.

He hadn't slept, couldn't, fear had kept him awake of what was to come.

And here they were, one standing, looking down at the other. The other layed down, ignoring the shivers of cold and the fresh bloody tracks of tears on his deadly pale face.

It hadn't changed...after a whole sixteen years.

Still dark, walls without windows and still the same creaking door with a smaller dog door attached.

Dawn could see them as clear as day when he opened his eyes, his own blood stains still adorning the floor and walls. Even after all those years are still very much present.

How did he ever think he was going to be safe?

As if that day where he was rescued could have ever been the last day of his misery!

How stupid.

His hands clenched as he finally opened his eyes, letting them fall upon his nightmare.

Regret came immediately as his once nice and gorgeously fitting clothes were grabbed tightly, pulling him to his knees and with his last moment of foolish bravado he stood and launched his hand right towards the older looking yet younger male.

One would say he was charming, good looking even but all Dawn could see was a monster. Which was why his expression turned into surprise as the sound of the cheek echoed around.

The mere fact that he had actually hit him made his surprise turn into fear way too quickly, his stinging hand now clawing at the tightly gripping hands on his shirt.

The tears which had stopped, returned like a waterfall as he sobbed out. Eyes bulging as his head looked between the hands and their owner in anticipation and distraught.

Even after not having experienced it for so long, Dawn immediately braced himself.

"Down"

It was as if his body moved on his own, knees buckling as soon as the command reached his ears. Hands let loose and no sooner was he back on the ground shaking.

''It looks like your body remembers." Dawn didn't notice the wide grin that had momentarily spread over Henry's face, too focused on the light taps on his cheek.

It didn't take long before another slap echoed.

Harder, evident by the pained gasp but more so by the force.

Previous kneeling vampire now on his side, holding his left cheek as he cried out because of the abuse.

"Now your hair's a mess.'' Fingers piled the vampire's hair together, carefully stroking them.

Even while Dawn was more than well aware that whatever this was, was just Henry's way of gaining satisfaction he couldn't help but relax slightly.

He hated the way he took so easily to the other's name, it was such a hard habit to break. It made him sick to his very core that not even days into this spiral of abuse he was already used to it again.

With trembling lips, another sob left him. "If you're that sad, should I just kill you?''

The question was immediately followed with action,a grunt leaving Dawn's mouth as his back hit the ground and the face of Henry appearing in front of his shaky vision.

A pressure multiplied on his neck as he felt his own hands clawing.

Lack of air pointed out his still broken nose and the fact he couldn't even heal as he gasped, cut off pleases strewn around and as weight kept him in place.

"Why beg? You don't want to be here.''

The hands, that had been desperately trying to get the much needed air, had stopped. Falling with a loud thud back at his sides, limp and while the struggle to survive stilled, Henry's hands tightened and continued to cut off the air supply.

Small choked up breaths still present as Dawn's skin slowly turned a sickening colour, legs kicking out of selfpreserving instinct as his lungs ached and eyes started to bulge once more

Just like Dawn's lungs burned, Henry's eyes burned bright with evil pleasure.

Not bothering to care about the useless trashing beneath him as he continued pressing down,excited gleam destroyed otherwise beautiful blue eyes.

Now only focused on those blue eyes, Dawn couldn't help but think about Adrian and his own way too blue eyes.

It was the moment he sacked, seconds from fainting if it weren't for the hands to remove themselves from his neck.

Slight sounds of breathing almost disappeared, before returning with a scream and wisps of air.

A harsh kick in the ribs and the vampire almost sprung upright in shock and pain. Hand clutching his side as he noted with relief that he was healing, his rib was healing together with everything else.

''Did I crack your ribs?''

While Dawn had most definitely heard, he could only focus solely on taking in enough of air.

But Henry never allowed no answer, it didn't take long before a mana reinforced leg swung itself toward the still healing rib.

Two hands at the exact spot didn't do much as the sound of broken bones echoed around the room, even going as far as the hallways, where Henry's butler waited without moving an eyelid, very much used to his lord's behaviour

Even when merciless stomping was heard from the room, the butler did absolutely nothing.

The pain that Dawn was experiencing was intense and sharp, not only where the hits quick and mere second after another but there was also the growing needles caused by the other's mana.

A pain so sharp he could only whimper, the space relentless and his modified speed of healing was even more useless then not healing. It barely had time to heal at all before it got broken further and further.

Dawn could only breath shallow breaths as Henry finally stopped and carefully watched as the broken hands started mending first. Small, shattered pieces attaching themselves like glue and erasing all traces of once being broken. His ribs ,hit so hard that they exited Dawn's chest, returned with a silent scream.

Even the blood that the vampire had lost returned from pooling all around him, returning right through the wound and entering the blood vessels where needed.

The blood that didn't, drenched his clothes and would leave the first new blood stains on the ground.

The first of no doubt many to come.

With further healing, the room was engulfed with the groans of Dawn, louder than before as everything was set back in place.

"Does it hurt?'' Even Henry could hear the way his voice lifted, enjoying every sound that roamed his ears.

He would never get tired of how the broken vampire returned to his whole state...not that the inside ever managed to catch up.

"That's quite enough of that for now.'' Crouching down he ruffled Dawn's hair, a movement was again so soft and loving that the vampire stiffened, more than well aware that this was just a premise.

And he was right, bad luck showing, as just before his last wound could fully heal fingers dug in them, face contorting in pain as his high pitched cry made the tormentor chuckle.

It didn't last long as just a while afterwards he got pulled up, wound healing further as bloodied fingers wiped themselves off on his already bloody shirt.

The movement was neither rough or hard, so why was he shaking and trembling like a leaf?

Henry seemingly waited for him to finish standing up as he commemorated his first new blood stains with chilling words.

"I have a surprise for you, I will show you just how much I missed you."

Sickeningly sweet was the movement of hands tracing his golden hair combined with the words before hands pulled him forward and pushed him forward.

Flinching, he instantly walked, eyes wary as he tried to glance behind but was prevented by a hand clutching his neck. Not strong enough to hurt but tight enough to show him where to go.

"Aren't you curious?"

Gulping, a tear brimmed again as forgotten feelings brewed.

"Well?"

"I-i...don't know.'' Hesitantly he spoke, voice raw, still not used to talking much.

''You didn't miss me right?' The obvious answer was silence as they turned a corner to another hallway.

''That much was obvious.

Don't worry after these coming weeks you shall never leave me again.''

Threat disappeared to the back of his mind as they apparently reached their destination.

A door that looked...normal, albeit small and far away from the other rooms.

But nothing was ever normal with Henry and Dawn felt scared as a hand reached out from behind him and placed it lightly on the door, magic seal that appeared familiar as it was the same on Aethelstan's room.

It would only let in the keyed magical signature and if this was needed that meant whatever was behind that door wasn't meant for wandering eyes.

Slight surprise mixed with apprehensiveness showed on Dawn's features as the only thing he saw was darkness once the door opened, nothing like the walk in the light they just had.

Foul stench that wafted out of the room left him turning his nose in disgust, repulsing his very being as he weakly called out. ''Wh..what?''

''Why don't you go take a look?''

Hair falling down in waves upon being released , the free hand soon pushed but Dawn remained rooted in place. ''I don't..want too.'' Flickering his eyes between Henry and the butler, he pleaded silently with the butler but nothing happened.

''You have nothing to say here!" With a push he was forced into the room, stumbling as hands blindly reached out in the darkness, feeling for something to grab on.

And he did, something kept him upright. Soft to the touch for meagre second, until he realised the unusual stiffness, the dirt and freaky texture on his hands.

It was when he ventured in the darkness that he could feel his heart drop to his stomach as hair grazed his arm. Not even seconds later did his eyes get accustomed to the darkness.

A scream of fright left him as a wide eyed, sunken face stared back at him. Disturbed his head moved on his own as Dawn took in the whole room, moving past the riddled bodies strewn across the floor, hung in cages and even strung on chains. Hesitant he looked closer, the bodies covered in wounds and bones outside discoloured skin.

His own horror reflected forever in their eyes, he wanted out, out, unable to turn away from what was in front of him he stumbled backwards.

Breathing a mess as he slowly became more hestaric, even more so when strong, dextrous hands gripped his shoulders tightly, keeping him firmly in place.

"Did you like it?"

Dawn couldn't speak, eyes wide and fear taking over his entire body as burkley fingers traced his chest before grabbing his jaw, clenching it as he forced black pools to watch all the atrocities he had done.

''Did you notice?"

That one has your build, that one your length of hair, that one your eyes and that one sounded so much like you!

The way he begged for mercy was laughable too.''

With the amount of bodies it was clear this had been going on for a long time. If it weren't for the decaying smell and the unmoving state of all of them one would not believe them to be dead.

''All dead. Every single one of them."

Emphasized words left Dawn gulping, pupils dilated as his body shook in the other's grasp.

"All because of you.'' On a softer note he added" You should have just stayed Dawn.

Rosy lips opened and closed just as fast, unsure and fear stricken eyes closed as his clammy hands grabbed onto the other pair, clenching in a twisted way of getting reassurance.

"We have so much to catch up on, I learned so much and even attained new toys. I can't wait.''

It was a reassurance that Henry wouldn't give, merely smiling as he peeled off one finger after another. His words stiffening the already scared out of his vampire.

Making his sack as his emotions ran wild, unable to control his body he went limp in the other's grasp. Yet Henry had merely let go after a sickening have fun, a thud taking over the silent room as the vampire's knees hit the ground.

It had taken Dawn a few seconds to realise the words that had left his mouth and the one he received as an answer.

"Just kill me."

"Never, my pet, never."

Dazed as he was, he still heard the door lock behind him as he stared at the sight in front of him.

All in one way looking like him.

all very much dead

and all because of him.

Black eyes looked even more empty than usual as they glazed over, dissociation taking Dawn away for who knows how long.


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Bab 41: Academy of Aurelia

It had been a surprising turn off event when he was all but ripped away from Aethelstan and Dawn. The ride from the outer garden of the castle till now had been silent, brisk and with no other sudden intrusions.

Even now as he was high in a tree, lounging, Adrian couldn't see even one person around. Ofcourse it wouldn't be weird to imagine that the whole street towards the academy was cut off and forbidden for all to enter, he was without a doubt one in a billion.

And if the royal family was anything like Avery then that would make even more sense.

Besides the drama after his existence was found to be true should have been immense, Adrian almost felt the urge to explore, skipping the most likely tedious first day at the academy.

But of course he couldn't do that.

One, he should appear as quiet and as peaceful as could be for a certain period of time. It was the best attitude for gaining information, adding to that, there was always the possibility that Avery might get sent to ask the teacher how he was doing.

Seeing that he already faked that personality ,beside a closer snarky one, it would be best if he just continued with that.

As the only vampire child there would also be no doubt of a high number of eyes on him.

Which brings him to the other reason, there was in fact already a number of eyes on him.

And sadly enough there wasn't even one that he could pinpoint. Even the system could only find the underlying emotion for one of them and that was apparently because he didn't hide.

Probably thinking that he wouldn't even know, sadly enough that person was right.

Throwing his head back on the tree, he wallowed in his sadness and melancholy. Questioning in a whisper what he was doing here.

He should practice his acting and what better way to start fooling as soon as he could?

{Tear please!}

{You're so dramatic.}

Grinning internally he felt the lonely tear appear and slowly drop down his pale cheek before opening his eyes in horror, wiping it away and jumping down from the tree in one smooth motion.

''God damn it!'' Gritting his teeth, he punched the tree with just enough mana to 'accidentally' break it in an anger burst.

His sigh of relief was quickly replaced with shock as he heard the cracks and not even seconds later saw the top begin to fall down.

"Woah woah wait!"

Opening his hands fully in concentration a purple seal appeared, reversing the process and returning the tree to it's state before he pushed it.

Crashing down in relief, he lamented the start of his school year while staring at the sky.

''I haven't even started yet and I almost fucked up.

I even cursed, "Dad's going to kill me."

{You're working so hard.} Ignoring the twirl of eyes he envisioned his system to be doing he continued.

"Luckily no one saw that! If they did-''Shuddering at the exaggerated thought, Adrian rapidly lost his cheerful moment.''They would make things even worse. As if it isn't going to be like that.''

Stepping slowly towards the academy, he added a few more sentences for good measure.

"How does one even act around people with the same age?

Well it's not like anyone would be my friend.''

{Cherry on top, master?}

{Hmm, nothing but the best after all.

Do you think they will fall for it?}

{Highly likely.}

{Search for the auras and if you find one let me know.}

{Yes, master.}

It was weird, not having Aethelstan here. The empty spot inside his core and soul seemed like a part of him was missing.

However the other would be fine, it was Dawn that he wondered more about.

A little while after they had left, the mission concerning Dawn had ticked itself off, the chest still closed, probably for his birthday just days in the future.

Once he got the important things from the academy he would visit Dawn and even go back to that labyrinth the other's talked about.

Aethelstan only said what he needed to know most likely and Dawn...well Dawn was Dawn.

Just like him Aethel was restricted in his movements, evident in the way the murderous aura had closely followed his carriage with piercing eyes.

While he had been inside the carriage Adrian could see right through it, showcasing the bloody red colour of the woman's core, thick and vast.

An assassin and a good one.

It hadn't looked like she was actively planning on killing him so he let her be.

It wasn't difficult to realise the reason, Aethel was dangerous, even with his limited mana and well Avery had wanted to be the upper hand no doubt.

Adrian couldn't overlook the other possibilities yet if people would send an assassin for those then they would have just killed them so they where unlikely.

It was quite a nuisance too, assassins were sensitive, wich was why he didn't train his mana and he also wasn't allowed to look outside.

Wich is why he just went over some plans, even planning some escapees, right until they reached the academy. With a small bow she and the red coach with the royal family sigil faded away.

And here he was, standing in front of the hundreds steps of the academy, no one in sight...again left in total silence.

Huffing slightly he would almost could regret coming because of the annoyingly huge, pearly white stairs.

Yet grinning in a childish way he created a small gleamy white footstep and let him get raised up after a check of no seeing no one around.

{Master, you're doing it again.}

{Naive as a child should be. Considering I was sheltered it would make perfect sense.}

{If you say so.}

A three tall story building soon gleamed in front of him, walls the same huge white stones and two pillars of fire lazily burning before big metal doors. As magnificent it's height was it's width was even bigger, he wasn't certain but it stretched at least two whole football fields.

Curious, Adrian approached the huge metal door, hand raising to knock yet it was unneeded as the door opened on it's own accord. The large hall opening before him was tiled with same pearly white, in fact everything was pearly white.

A chandelier as huge as half of the academy floated in the middle of the hall, around it, pieces of stairs twisting and turning, useless alone but together they fitted. Whoever walking across could without a doubt go in whatever direction they wished.

An instantaneous smile brimmed, accompanied with the feeling of happiness that surged wildly inside of him. Gosh, it looked so cool!

While the two hallways beside him looked big, it was only half of the hall itself and with everything concerning magic he ventured farther in the hall.

Just as he crossed an invisible barrier, the farther off wall in front of him shimmered golden before vanishing in it's entirety, leaving fields and fields of equipment to be found.

Swords attached to seemingly nothing, rows after rows of different variations. Same with spears, bow and arrows. Even maces, good mornings, Adrian could continue for ages.

Stunned he ventured further, breathing heavily his core lightened albeit only a little. The air was rich and plentiful, considering it was in the middle of a very, very crowded.

Still, just staying in this place would do wonders for ones core and magic, not only that you could even leisurely train in whatever you wanted.

A big pool, full of wonders inside and even on the opposite side a parkour...high above ground. So it could pose some risks, Adrian was almost sure there would be some sport about it.

Such thing were almost always the case. Shaking his head, he cursed himself for almost cursing himself.

If he hasn't wrong, he could see in the distance a bunch of students running while avoiding numerous objects. Flying objects, underground obstacles and even objects that teleported back and forth.

Other objects appeared from nowhere with no trajectory at all, ranging from full fledged desks to sharpened, glistening swords.

Swords that pointed right to their hearts, even the training partners just miles away didn't go easy on the students. Beside being made of metal, they where even capable of using magic!

Adrian could be wrong but the scoring fire that left one of their mouth's told him he wasn't.

Aftereffects just adding to the realness of the situation as the student was now left with scalding hair.

Despite his growing unease Adrian turned with excitement, the prospect of magic even more enchanting then he imagined.

Waltzing back inside, still high from the beauty of everything, he barely noticed two small, engraved flowers in the hall activating the concealment magic again.

Keeping what he saw in his memories, he decided to roam the halls of the academy.

It was tempting to go upstairs but ultimately he decided against it. It wouldn't do if he where found wandering in places where he shouldn't be.

On his first day no less.

Deciding to go left, he reminisced about his old schools. To sya they lacked immensely was an understatement. Even something as normal as lockers where enchanted!

It wouldn't open for anyone, except the owner. He only noticed as he accidentally graced one and the locker in question just vanished. It was even color coded, probably in the color that suited the owner's soul or just their favourite colour.

Either way it probably prevented a lot of bullying!

Even the roof was magical, reflection staring right back at him with blush red eyes.

Dad had told him that in their world there hadn't been a need for mirrors and while the mortals had believed they didn't have a reflection when looking into mirrors that hadn't been the case.

It was merely the silver used as a thin layer behind the mirror that would cause them to be unable to see their reflections, wich was rapidly resolved as humans stopped using them after a while. In fact they stopped using them long before the different races had stepped on the earth's soil.

But that wasn't important right now, his eyes made him remember that he hadn't eaten in quite a while and as he was now in the human world he could finally try some human food.

He would have to be cautious about the fact that he could eat human but if it's just as magical as this place then it would be worth it!

Adrian would still be careful with it, it was an ace on his sleeve that could come in handy in the future.

So caught up with his future plans mixed with mischief, Adrian didn't even notice the person crossing his path until said person coughed and not only that as Adrian actually bumped into the other.

{This is the aura that was filled with emotion.}

It didn't take long before he acted, eyes blinking as he looked up, gulping visible as his eyes flashed, taking in the crossed arms and mismatched eyes staring back at him.

An imposing character at a 190, blank pants combined with a black sleeveless shirt, muscles flexing in their crossing position, making the scars even more visible as they went from his upper arm to the underarm. His rough cut features and messy black hair sticking out of a bun wasn't the person he had imagined as the owner of the emotional aura.

''You took your time. Enter.'' Even his voice was rough around the edges, a low gravy sound. His own failing in comparisons ''What d-do you...ohh''

The hallway, wich up until that point had just been filled with lockers, had a wall transforming into a door as quickly as sound.

Golden lines had appeared, turning and twisting over one another before flashing and taddaa there was the full fledged foor. He was getting ahead of himself, not even hours in and he couldn't be bothered to hide his amazement. Nothing was normal in this school, even the knob was shaped in a golden flower.

The hand placed on his shoulder made him flinch, even while struck with amazement he didn't forget to do what he needed.

Door swung open the moment they were centimetres from it, still being led Adrian entered. Voices that had been speaking loudly and laughing wildly diminished completely as they full entered.

Some faces stared blankly, others with anger and another few with obvious curiosity or even hidden cruelty. Now he was truly surround with teenagers, maybe the only downside of this place.

Tensing slightly Adrian moved his back to the door, intent obvious by who he assumed to be the teacher as said person moved in front of his gaze and nudged him to stand in front of the other students properly.

That was step one, now he just needed to further cement his facade for...fourty, his quick head counting left him with fourty students. A lot of students for just one adult.

''Attention please!

As you all have heard we will have a new student joining.

Not only does he start the school year late, he also managed to miss his first period because he decided exploring was more important!"

Just for a second Adrian let his eyebrows rise in surprise before moving his head down, just enough so that his shoulder length hair obscured the view of his face.

The teacher was actually trying to help him, he only said that with the intent of showing the other teenager that he was just like them. Truly the emotional aura it seems yet the teacher sighed at his reaction, recognising his attempt as a failure and avoiding his quest for later.

"Introduce yourself.''

Licking his lips, he let unsure eyes look between his silver curtain of hair to the fire burning in the student's eyes.

''We don't have all day, get your hair out of your face and start.

With shaky hands he quickly wipped his hair back, voice speaking upon within the silence.

''I uh I'm Adrian Amdis Acheron and I will be sixteen in a few days. Nice to...meet you.''

"Is that all?"

The words of the teacher unlocked a storm of outrage as student upon student began voicing their thoughts.

"How can that be all?"

"Aren't you a vampire?''

''Obviously, look at his eyes.''

''Will he suck blood?"

"Blood?! What he tries to take ours?''

''Why is he even here? He's not even sixteen yet!''

''Good point.''

''This is outrageous. This shool is going to the dogs.

Even allowing a monster to attend!''

"For once I agree with the stuck up."

''That's enough, sit down!''

The energetic voices died down quickly when the teacher spoke.

''Well then Adrian, if that's all you can take that free chair over there. Stay after class, you have some catching up to do.''

Chuckles went around as a low ''yes sir'' left Adrian's mouth before silently passing between two rows of eight students each. In total there where five rows, his own row now with nine students.

As soon as he sat on the last chair, next to the window a black backpack appeared with his own name swirled in red on the fabric.

How very fitting!

Cautiously taking it, he looked inside, listening to his teacher's voice as he admonished some students for their earlier comments.

''Now, while Adrian maybe younger then you, it was out school leader who decided to place him in our class. I trust all of you are mature enough to accept that fact.''

''Teacher he's two years younger!''

''He will turn sixteen soon.'' The teacher pointed out but that was just rapidly dismissed by another student.

''That still makes him 2 years younger, there are even some turning nineteen soon!''

"Well that makes it so that there's even more reason for all of you to take care of him.'' With a whisper he added ''He will definitely need it."

Flushing at his teacher comment, he buried himself in his new backpack.

{You look so small from the outside but you're grinning like a madman.}

{The teacher is doing a fine job isn't he?}

Focusing back on his surroundings he picked up the small whispers.

"He...is a little small isn't he?"

"A little adorable too.''

''My brother is just like that when he's shy."

''Hasn't he been ripped from all he has ever known?" Flinching at the timely mention, he buried himself even deeper.

{Tears again, master?}

{You know me so well, brimming only please.}

Getting rid of the grin, he conjured some memories that even made his pale vampire face look normal.

Hastily wiping his eyes, he shielded his face with the bag while silently sniffling as he looked outside.

"Look now he's crying.''

''What a child!''

''Peyton, that's enough!

For that comment and the previous one you shall clean the stalls for a month."

"Hah, you deserve it stuck up!"

"And you shall join him,Daniel. I didn't forget how you agreed so readily before.''

The hissed curse was overshadowed by the brimming laughter of the rest of the class, a few of them were looking in his directions and even the teacher's eyes lingered on him for a while before he continued speaking of the previous discussed laws of magic and the consequences of breaching them.

Adrian groaned in silence, he really did have to catch up on a lot. The only reason why he was allowed to slack like this was because it was his first day and the comments of the student.

It was also the only reason why he managed the catch a figure appearing out of nowhere.

Squinting his eyes he tried to make sense of the person's features yet he got disturbed by a appearing message.

{DING

Congratulations

You have gazed upon a protagonist

Resulting in the opening of a new option in the system database.

Within fifty seconds you shall be transported!}

Truly surprised by the sudden turn of the events Adrian could do nothing but gape.

Not even the system counting down inside his hed could knock him out of his stupor.

It's in this way that before he knew it the countdown reached five.

{FOUR}

{Wait what!}

{THREE}

{Wait wait}

{TWO}

{What's the meaning...}

{ONE}

{OFFFF THISSSSS?!?!?!}

{ZERO

good luck}

No sooner had the system, had the ground started rumbling underneath him.

A frantic expression took over his face as none of the other students noticed something wrong, even the teacher kept talking.

Only he could see the thick, black veins appearing and surrounding him. Just when things finally stilled he suddenly felt the black gloey, seemingly living substance turn into hands that clawed it's way up his leg. Tugging him piece by piece of his chair and no matter how he hold on, fought against he still felt himself ebbing away.

Legs totally invisible, gone from beneath, he couldn't even feel them. He couldn't further try and understand the situation as with a last shriek of surprise he pulled into the puddle of gloey.


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