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My hero academia: magneto(on hiatus)

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Penulis: Edgelord666

2.99 (15 peringkat)

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I got killed,
I met God,
God gave me some wishes
Now I am in my hero academia

truly bad at summery, so just give it a chance, please

also disclaimer.

all of the characters are owned by the someone whoose name i don't remember right now expect my own characters

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  1. mrk070707
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  2. Arion_Sturmklinge
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  3. HUEVOS
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Jester_of_God

He nerfed the character, A LOT LIKE, HE NERFED HIM ON AN INSANE LEVEL. I personally just hate when people nerf characters or their powers it’s so stupid, just give him another ability that’s similar in nature, instead of nerfing it down to useless

4yr
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WikiLover

It’s alright. It’s got good theory crafting and some interesting stuff. It’s slow... like REALLY slow. I’m 17 chapters in and he is still 3 months old. Give this one a wait until it’s like 60 chaps in at least at the rate this is going. I’ll bet he isn’t 15 until like 80 chaps in.

4yr
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Old_Scratch

I will not continue reading your story after this review. Not because it is awful, pretty good compared to some of the other stories on the website. I am done because out of 17 chapter, at least 6 of them were useless. They were either uninteresting infodumps, or you saying you had a late upload, or some Q&A that I skipped. Also, your grammar isn't that good, it isn't unreadable, it's just difficult to read, and lazy. You don't use capitalization correctly and your sentence structure was pretty messy. My final complaint is that your chapters are too short. As is 1,000 words or less, short. The only ones longer were the infodumps, which simply made them annoying to scroll past since it took so long. My review might sound harsh, but it had plenty of points you can use to improve yourself. Change the infodumps and Q&A to auxiliary chapters. Delete the chapters saying you have a late upload, future readers won't care about that. Study up on some grammar, even if it's just correct capitalization and punctuation, it will make your writing look so much better. Finally, spend a little bit longer writing. I don' know how often you update, but just add a day or two. Your readers won't mind, especially if your chapters are considerably longer. A good goal to shoot for is 2,000 or more words. It might seem like a lot, but as long as you add in a good amount of detail and some exposition, you shouldn't have any trouble reaching it.

4yr
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GODKINGASH

Can’t wait for more of this looking forward too it‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️‼️

4yr
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Qvoth
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nerfa your mother's pussy actor mother****er, likes protagonist **** back to naruto damn, excluded this fanfic. trash trash trash trash trash *****

4yr
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I_am_inevitable

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Novel_Guru

hello this fanfic have good story development and i request to pls not drop this fanfic for atleast 100 chs. hope to increase chs/week thx expexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpe

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J4ke
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No real story and it’s kind of a mess so far in the chapters so far. You just introduce random people without flushing out their character.

4yr
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JackbladesFF7

Besides the fact that he needed the character a lot the writer spends so much time on when the OC is an infant which just seems odd for a fan fic but I mean if you give OC powers he should be able to use them.

4yr
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BLANKSAMA

Amazing keep the good work😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😆😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍👍👍👍👍👍👍😆😍😍😍😍😆😍😆😆😍😆😆😍😆😍😆😆😍😍😆😆😍😍

4yr
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LENX
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skorwolf

Great start❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

4yr
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gnuak
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Tbh all of his work are interesting and good but the update is kinda slow........i mean it's really sad.Not pushing him or something but yeah can you push more chps?

4yr
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trenten_perry

Look forward to it👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

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Yuri_yuri

I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet these hands will never tap anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!

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