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I found myself reborn in Naruto as Hinoka Hyuga, the older non-identical twin sister of Hinata Hyuga.
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So it has a a lot of plot holes... So read at your own risk but I'll try to improve! So if you have anything you have to say on how I can improve it, then please let me know! (having a writers block so may not update for a while).
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Hinoka feels so detached from the story, like everything is easy. Bam bam bam, she feels just like a sideliner. There is no emotion to thiss
For me this is more of a fantasy than a story so its just not my thing but grammer is kinda ok so its readable at least[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
I won't badmputh this even If I don't like the work .You clearly need to research more about Naruto or Just watch it or read it .I mean yes you said there will be plot holes but there are many things that you skipped over and if you want to do AU thing be my guest its not a bad idea but there are somethings that feels like nonsence even if we think from Naruto Anime Prospective.Also take inspirations from other stories not just make it lazy writing like putting MC on team 7 because they found no idea .Its bad The problem is in your knowledge and execution otherwise this could have been fantastic fanfic .Even from wish fullfilment point of view this story feels weird and just no offence There IS NO STORY NO DIRECTION
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I don't usually write a review for fanfics but I have to write one with this fanfic to warn you people not to read this or they will experience brain rot. I will be completely honest with you this story is not well written and has many plot holes first the timeline does not make sense the Uchiha massacre should have happened when the MC was seven but it didn't Mc hasn't even entered the academy yet. Second, she's on team seven now that wouldn't be a problem if the team excluded someone from the og team seven but no the author decided to put MC on a four-man team with Naruto Sasuke, and Sakura. The worst part about this is that it could be completely avoided by giving Mc a private teacher that could have been a Huyga. I known its some authors might not want to create an oc but the author could have gotten Mc a private teacher that isn't an oc an example is Anko but no we got mc on a four man. The last problem with this story is that it feels like the author did not research anything about Naruto.