Fortune's Chosen - The Legend of Ivo

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La_Boule

My dear ladies and gentlemen. You know what I want from you, don't you? I hope we understand each other. (￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ(￣▽￣)ノ

LV 15

TempestasUmbra

First of all, the whole background and the world building in this story is really great. Very unique and interesting. BUT sadly the plot starts out great and then just implodes on itself. Let me explain: The author stated rellatively early on that he doesn‘t luke cliche development, forced plots and idi*tic MCs, which I greatly appreciate, because I also had enough of them... The system was also ver intriguing and original, as was the early development of the story. But all that was lost, when the author(around chapter 20) just forced the plot into a direction that makes no sense. Minimal spoilers ahead! Beware! From the appearence of a young master to the betrayal from his own tribesmen and being enslaved, all packed into one or two chapters, none of it made sense or wasn‘t cliche. During all this we don‘t see a mature ex-military man making calm and logical decisions. No, what we got was a typical dumb MC relying on his protagonist aura and plot armor to survive. One of the most infuriating parts was, that he doesn‘t acitively use his sytem to gain strenght. No, he just keeps his FP(system points) stored and than gets owned like an id*ot. He practically wasted 10yrs of his life with the ultimate cheat, namely linitless knowledge, and didn‘t gain enough strenght to be more than one of probably dozens of elite tribe warriors. So, if this isn‘t nerfing or a typical dumb MC, than I don‘t know what is... Moving on, he is enslaved and again doesn‘t even use the system to ask about the method they used to restrain him or for a way to break it, despit the massive amount of points he has available. The author made some lame excuse about not wanting to stand out in case of an interrogation, but one chapter later he used his system to learn their language. Contradiction at its finest! From there the story starts to make less and less sense to me. After being bought by some aristocartic magician and losing his restraints, his ‚owner‘ proceeds to treat him like some honorable guest and not an uncertain threat, despite having no knowledge about him or his capabilities, excluding the war between ‚barbarians‘(which the MC is part of) and the ‚southerners‘(which she is part of). All that is once again glossed over by the author, with another laughable excuse, that she wants to know if barbarians can learn their magic. This woman, who is supposedly someone from noble status and a magician to boot, shows zero common sense by teaching a foreigner about a power that gives their part of the world a military advantage, to be able to contend with the barbarians and doesn‘t even use some kind of restraining method in case he turns against her. Another absolutely baffling moment was, when he showed of his cultivation technique which was better than that of his ‚owner‘ and she didn‘t even ask him about it, demanded to teach or even tries to trade for it. Despite her possessing knowledge about how rare and valueable these techniques are. I could only question myself about who the slave and the master where in their relationship, as they didn‘t talk about it, nor did the MC ever ask her about his freedom... Again something the author didn‘t clarify and glossed over... The author also seems very defensive when asked about these obvious flaws, and didn‘t give a clear answer. I do not recommend this story to all those who have problems with plotholes and a forced development, as this story will drive you crazy.

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louisjacq

I was honestly surprised. The story is good, the mc think logically and there are no grammatical mistakes. Nice job author, I think that you don't have many readers only because of the lack of chapters(and this of exposure). Some people will not read chapters without title on webnovel(because most of the time it is a sign of an author that didn't pass much time on each chapter) so I suggest adding them. Finally, the title is not really appealing(try things with barbarian and/or systems if you want to grab the reader's attention).

LV 5

Dobrillo

The MC knows what he's doing and doesn't act stupid. That alone makes it much better than several novels here. Then there is the fact that there are few chapters, so I can not give my own opinion formed on the plot. But for now he is on the right track! **: I will update this as soon as they reach about 50 chapters.

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Az1

Somebody's gonna flame me for this one. First off, Webnovel Readers' fetish for protagonists that aren't 'goody two shoes' blinds them to any other aspect of Characterization. The character of Ivo is whatever the plot needs it to be, from what I can see, the one constant being that he's a somewhat average person with a somewhat ambiguous moral compass d a practical mind set and zero naïvete. That's...okay, but outside of that, I don't see much consistency here. But the real problem in my opinion is the author's writing style. It's very 'Tell not Show'...Which is very much NOT something you want to see in an author. Rather than choosing to show Ivo's personality traits slowly through action and character development, the author tends to tell us why a character does something directly. it's something I see a lot on webnovel and it's unfortunate because it weakens a lot of otherwise good novels. Moving on...The plot is essentially an isekai that subverts a few different common tropes of the genre...and so far, little more than a few. Ivo seems set up to be mostly the center of the plot, and there is little outside of him, which is unfortunate. The truly sad part is that if you can get past the author's writing style, somewhat thin characterization, and...very un-special plot. The rest of the story is quite good, as the rest of the reviewers can attest. And the only issues it has are quite common ones. In conclusion, if you can endure somewhat standard development and somewhat poor writing quality, this story is definitely for you. if you have a very gourmet taste in webnovels however...You will probably not like this one.

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glacer_blade

please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.

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Dev_013

plot is nice and the world background is decent but the execution of the is poor... there little to no conversation... nothing like any emotional moment... yeah you can not find any moments like that... not even angry or happy or any as you can think of... mc directly get into relationship...without even any developments... too many flows... yeah too many...

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FastestOfAllSperm

Not gonna say anything about the story because you probably read all the other reviews. Just read it. Its rating doesn't lie. JUST READ IT JUST READ IT JUST READ IT JUST READ IT

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lecas86075

Nice Kingdom Building with Modern Knowledge gotten through a system. I hope more authors do this. I mean getting Modern Knowledge through a magic Smart Phone or Augmented Reality glasses or a System that allow the MC to access modern knowledge in a medieval world. Unlike what novels like to portray it is impossible for a single person to know and remember a lot of practical knowledge from modern earth. A system or magical smart device that allows access to knowledge or internet from earth would solve this issue.

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Aaron_McLeod_1690

dozens of grammatical and syntax errors. the MC is not a well rounded or developed character, just a dime dozen two bit hero. the world background is interesting, but the entire story is pedantic

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alode

good good

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cupofnoodles98

it's a pity, such a good book but the author dropped it 🙃

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LoboVicious

An enjoyable read, a hidden gem for sure considering the degeneracy and zero to no substance i’ve come across on this platform. Silly awards with silly badges for mediocre stories but you my friend are the real deal.. I had to dig to find you but i‘m happy I did. Looking forward to reading how the elves and dwarves fit into your world.. I can see the dwarves loving the MC because of earths alcohol and engineering he can provide. Now the elves? I’m sure the beautiful vegans with a superiority complex will appreciate the MC’s green powers. All surface level, i’m sure it’ll go deeper with the goddess and Titans/Giants connection with the dwarves. You got me hooked, hopefully I get to see more of your work soon!

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cupofnoodles98

is a pity that this book has been drop it was one of the best stories out there. ........................... . ................. .... .. s

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Ghostly_Prince

This is really a hidden gem amongst gems and I read it more than once...so please start writing again Mr Author..... Please, please, please.

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Hexmonkey_2020

Good. It is good, I like it, idk if spaces count as characters but the limit on a review is 140 characters so I am still typing,

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Uchiha_Trump

This story is really good maybe can be paired with "the birth of demonic sword" only if the author can update daily at least one chapter This story will be exploded with new readers I hope the author can or could write it more

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StormFireReborn

I like the mc’s personality and how the story is going so far but i really like the fantasy/belief/myth mechanic of the world which is really cool . Hope the author completes the story .