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I am Ayumi Madrigal, the sole Survivor of Katana pack. Katana Pack are werewolves who are blessed with abilities sought after by people. Abilities we can harness when we turn 18 years old after our first shift. We share these abilities with our true mate, mate chosen by the Moon Goddess.
Once a Katana member dies our abilities are passed on to our family member or our mate. Making them acquire more strength, providing them with a new ability.
I have been hunted for 8 years now by Tibolo pack; the people responsible for my packs' demise. Although I am powerful, revenge is not an option. Surviving is my priority.
I have discovered recently that my mate is the only Son of Alpha Apollo Saavedra head of Tibolo pack. He is my hunter who turned prey. Will he survive the surge of pain till the full moon? How will his pack accept the fact that now I am paired by the Moon Goddess to its future Alpha.
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This book has a decent theme. It's pure hearted voice and calm battles makes it a different story. The plot is interesting giving you the scent of peace to defend your thirst of revenge, this way can be better in getting back what you want. Anyway, the writing style is great and world setting is easy flowing. good book
Okay the book has an interesting plot but the writing needs to be fixed. the beginning of the first chapter just felt like an info dump maybe add suspence or action or mystery any thing of that nature to spice up the opening hook of your novel. good luck you have a good book.
Okay so while this book has a really good plot, I feel the writing could use some work. The first part of chapter 1 feels a bit like an info dump - I'd recommend starting with the action scene (where Ayumi is being attacked), adding all your world building in between. Remember to show instead of tell. Also, while I get that chapter 2 is a continuation of chapter 1, half of it is just repeating scenes from chapter 1. Instead you should start where chapter 1 ended and move from there. As for dialogue, it's a bit weird how you've written it - Ayumi: "...". It would be better to do something like - Ayumi said, "...". This way you can add actions to dialogue and it makes for better story flow. Last thing would be grammar. You change tenses quite often - would recommend either using past or present tense (past tense is typically the better choice). Also be a little careful with your spelling. Otherwise you have a good story here. It has a great plot and a strong mc. If you work on it a little, you should have a great story.
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