The King Of Arsenal

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Hwangze

I can only say one thing,the main character is a npc.He gives out such chatgpt responses like he wins man of the match and in his interview he just says things that scream to me this guy does not have emotions.He says the same phrases over and over again like im grateful to the fans,manager.Once you hear one time you're like alright no problem but this guy only has that response.Updates are very stable though so thats a plus.

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John_Paul_Sumawang_1989

keep up the good work bro can you add more chaps it's promising

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Bouncy_Beast

I gave your writing quality and character design 2 and 3 stars (5 stars to other 3 categories). I've read your wrestler fic and this one and in both the stories I've seen same problem. in every single chapter you upload the MC feels rush of emotion once, feels grateful for everything twice, take a step in long journey thrice, think about the dedication of past, feels grateful for partners/ teammates, feeling surreal ffs he is a reincarnated soul. after reading two three chapters it becomes very repetitive. it would be okay for someone who reads and forget in next ten minutes but for anyone else it makes the story stale. I like where the story is going and I also like how you develop the story just don't repeat the same thing over and over again in different words in every single chapter.

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TeaTop

It had a lovely bit of potential at the start, I guess I just really liked the concept as an Arsenal fan. Its flaws are too many to ignore though. The main character is as stiff as a wooden board, there is zero variation in his personality, he comes across as quite robotic in his responses. Then there's the pacing, every single match so far is written about over about 3 chapters and they all have the exact same energy. Which means literally every match feels the same, the opponents might as well be the same people because there is no real life to them, neither is there any life to the press or even any aspect of the footballing community at large. Everything in this rather LukeWarm.

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Billy_Agustian17

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uncreativeguy

It's honestly a pretty enjoyable read. The man character is pretty talented, going through Arsenal's junior teams and has made his debut for the senior team. It is a breath of fresh air, seeing a non-translated football book of an English player who starts in the Premier League with big players. Let's hope the Author keeps the chapters coming.

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HellDaoist12

Great work! Keep it up! Have great premises while it was somewhat slow paced but I like how it builds up! It's like we follow the character's journey from the MC was a child and slowly growing, of course, there were some time skips that helped in advancing the story much faster!

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LastGod

The big problem with sport fanfic. Is they normally focus on writing about every match. So u get maybe one chapter every 5 chapters about the MC life. Litterally the novel becomes a running tally of every game he plays. While his life get put on hold and all he does is play a sport. It would be soo much better if u only describe the most important games and tell us about his life around them. otherwise it gets super boring and we get used to the games and never have any suspense built for any wins or loses.

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Elemise

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Heavy_Space

You can clearly tell this was written using AI. Constant repeatings of things told in previous passages, weird heading like divides in a singlular chapter, that certain AI-like writing style which I am not a huge fan of....

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uchiha_satoru

I like the premise but give the mc a personality and the pacing of the story is very slow

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earth_19998

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