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One of the better Naruto fics I've read on here so far... it's a bit of a slow burn and While I get that's not for everyone who wants to read about Ninja's remaking landscapes with explosive jutsu's or the harems screwing every konochi with a pulse this is panning out to be something with... limitless potential. [img=update][img=update]
Fantastic so far. Unique take on Naruto reincarnation and i love how you're showing his growth and even though you keep it within a small group of people he interacts with the story already feels broad. keep up the great work! 👍
It’s amazing, srsly, give this a read. Good MC, good writing, good plot and updating stability is perfect as of now. I especially love his “cheats” and hope he uses them more in the future; there’s a lot more to his abilities than just growing stronger.
More chapters plzz....... .. . . . . . .. . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . . . . .. .. . .. . . .. . .. . .. . . . . ..
Anticipating the future development of this story, it's been a while since I got a good read. I really like how the author portrays the characters and it's really immersive, superb! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Simplesmente absolute cinema Esse fanfic está sendo umas das melhores, já que é original nada de chinês meio cérebro, não é feito por IA é nem copiado de outras fanfic, algo original é gostoso, o protagonista não é full power, é tem uma evolução gostosa de ler, parabéns estou impressionado que ainda existe bons autores, igual nosso querido joker... Que Deus o acolha
I like it. Though, if I can be more greedy. I want more fluff chapters. Like him spending his time with his mom and Taro plus I want to see him become an overprotective siscon to Ino. Just a thought.
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I need mooooore chapter pls The best fanfic the i see this month very recommended the beginning is very good construct the world the Konoha and clans history good
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Definitely a lot of potential here especially with a full mage build, i just hope that he will not show the full extent of his abilities to anyone and will be a hidden boss behind the scenes like madara otherwise we all know that if a single person grows too strong every ninja village even your own will try to kill you if they can’t control you ( has happened with all uchihas, white fang, all senju, pakura, all uzumaki, even minato arguably).
Meh.😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
I’m just reading this for fun, but I also have critiques if the author wants to be better as a writer. If you’re also writing this for fun then take this review with a grain of salt, but still read it(Hopefully this won’t make you emo teenager upset, I’m just trying to get your head on straight). 1. Mc gets 3 gacha rewards and goes to naruto world, and in the most cliche way-starts chakra training around the age of 2. How dumb is that, you literally could’ve had him start at 6 or 7, and then work your way to being op. There’s this fake drama the author wrote, to try and offset how moronic his characters decisions are to get strong so early, which leads to his shinobi parents becoming a bit suspicious about his training and obvious maturity and wisdom(Idc if mc has limitless improvement, still a hot dumpster take AT age 2). Getting strong from the VERY start when you’re born-is insanely cliche and overdone, it doesn’t reward anything and makes everything seem redundant. 2. Another mind palace bs ability, mc has also started on it age 2. Apparently has knowledge how to do it because plot, a lot of authors do this and it shows non-critical thinking and lack of intelligence on their part. 3. Grammar is good, story seems ok right now. I don’t mind op stories, but the fact that you’re just instantly getting to it instead of growing from weak to strong is abysmal. You gotta find a balance because you are the author, it’s your job to make a story entertaining without bs plot devices and drama for the sake of drama that adds nothing to character development or story progression. Also be realistic in some cases, like what made you think having your mc start chakra training at age 2 was a smart idea? In a shinobi world, everyone would find that suspicious and think of you as an anomaly or worse, ESPECIALLY the parents. Now you’ve written yourself in a corner and have to find a way to justify it, which could’ve been avoided if you just started at least 4 years later. Common sense goes a long way into these stories, don’t let anyone tell you different.
Esta historia hasta ahora está 10/10 tiene mucho potencial siendo el hermano mayor de uno tiene la oportunidad de erradicar cualquier tipo de estupidez he ingenuidad de ella poner el clan Yamanaka a la par de los Uchiha y hacerlos poderosos en su conjunto con adiestramiento más especializados y mucha menos de pendencia de clanes aliados y lo más importante incorporar sangre Uchiha por medio de un matrimonio con Izumi así atrayendo una alianza con los Uchiha y desde un principio evitar una masacre injustificada tengo ideas de técnicas y desarrollos en el complejo de clan por si te interesa
Story progresses well, his "cheats" are also very good. I especially like the interaction with his mom and the worldview created by the shinobi world.
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This fic is just way too wordy and overly descriptive for me. Also, are you using AI? Because the MC’s personality seems to change from scene to scene. For example, how he acted after the leaf sticking exercise seemed wildly out of character.
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A decent fanfic with quality writing and a unique take on the Yamanaka clan! Highly recommended for any person deprived of Naruto fanfics
Yamanaka huh? An interesting choice! They are certainly underutilized in fanfiction. There are a lot of possibilities. Mind jutsus can be really scary even though they are not at all flashy. I sincerely hope the author will be able to deliver an intriguing story. The start has certainly got me hooked.
I honestly hate reading everything about childhood, but I know it will be necessary for the character's development, but oh well. Keep in mind that there are only 11 chapters, so there's not much I can say yet. 1. I would like the protagonist to have a more haughty attitude, something like Dr. House (this doesn't mean he'll be bad or good). 2. There are so many possibilities that you can give to new jutsus with the brain. Something like being able to enter nzt mode. 3. There are many possibilities of illusions/spells of Loki, Cassandra Nova, Legion series, etc. in the form of jutsus. 4. It must have some negative effects. I know you have unlimited potential, but I don't know if at least when he starts with the powers he'll get a migraine or need to eat something specifically repeatedly xD.
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One of the better Naruto fics I've read on here so far... it's a bit of a slow burn and While I get that's not for everyone who wants to read about Ninja's remaking landscapes with explosive jutsu's or the harems screwing every konochi with a pulse this is panning out to be something with... limitless potential. [img=update][img=update]
Fantastic so far. Unique take on Naruto reincarnation and i love how you're showing his growth and even though you keep it within a small group of people he interacts with the story already feels broad. keep up the great work! 👍
It’s amazing, srsly, give this a read. Good MC, good writing, good plot and updating stability is perfect as of now. I especially love his “cheats” and hope he uses them more in the future; there’s a lot more to his abilities than just growing stronger.
More chapters plzz....... .. . . . . . .. . . .. .. . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. . . . . . . . .. .. . .. . . .. . .. . .. . . . . ..
Anticipating the future development of this story, it's been a while since I got a good read. I really like how the author portrays the characters and it's really immersive, superb! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Simplesmente absolute cinema Esse fanfic está sendo umas das melhores, já que é original nada de chinês meio cérebro, não é feito por IA é nem copiado de outras fanfic, algo original é gostoso, o protagonista não é full power, é tem uma evolução gostosa de ler, parabéns estou impressionado que ainda existe bons autores, igual nosso querido joker... Que Deus o acolha
I like it. Though, if I can be more greedy. I want more fluff chapters. Like him spending his time with his mom and Taro plus I want to see him become an overprotective siscon to Ino. Just a thought.
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I need mooooore chapter pls The best fanfic the i see this month very recommended the beginning is very good construct the world the Konoha and clans history good
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Definitely a lot of potential here especially with a full mage build, i just hope that he will not show the full extent of his abilities to anyone and will be a hidden boss behind the scenes like madara otherwise we all know that if a single person grows too strong every ninja village even your own will try to kill you if they can’t control you ( has happened with all uchihas, white fang, all senju, pakura, all uzumaki, even minato arguably).
Meh.😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
I’m just reading this for fun, but I also have critiques if the author wants to be better as a writer. If you’re also writing this for fun then take this review with a grain of salt, but still read it(Hopefully this won’t make you emo teenager upset, I’m just trying to get your head on straight). 1. Mc gets 3 gacha rewards and goes to naruto world, and in the most cliche way-starts chakra training around the age of 2. How dumb is that, you literally could’ve had him start at 6 or 7, and then work your way to being op. There’s this fake drama the author wrote, to try and offset how moronic his characters decisions are to get strong so early, which leads to his shinobi parents becoming a bit suspicious about his training and obvious maturity and wisdom(Idc if mc has limitless improvement, still a hot dumpster take AT age 2). Getting strong from the VERY start when you’re born-is insanely cliche and overdone, it doesn’t reward anything and makes everything seem redundant. 2. Another mind palace bs ability, mc has also started on it age 2. Apparently has knowledge how to do it because plot, a lot of authors do this and it shows non-critical thinking and lack of intelligence on their part. 3. Grammar is good, story seems ok right now. I don’t mind op stories, but the fact that you’re just instantly getting to it instead of growing from weak to strong is abysmal. You gotta find a balance because you are the author, it’s your job to make a story entertaining without bs plot devices and drama for the sake of drama that adds nothing to character development or story progression. Also be realistic in some cases, like what made you think having your mc start chakra training at age 2 was a smart idea? In a shinobi world, everyone would find that suspicious and think of you as an anomaly or worse, ESPECIALLY the parents. Now you’ve written yourself in a corner and have to find a way to justify it, which could’ve been avoided if you just started at least 4 years later. Common sense goes a long way into these stories, don’t let anyone tell you different.
Esta historia hasta ahora está 10/10 tiene mucho potencial siendo el hermano mayor de uno tiene la oportunidad de erradicar cualquier tipo de estupidez he ingenuidad de ella poner el clan Yamanaka a la par de los Uchiha y hacerlos poderosos en su conjunto con adiestramiento más especializados y mucha menos de pendencia de clanes aliados y lo más importante incorporar sangre Uchiha por medio de un matrimonio con Izumi así atrayendo una alianza con los Uchiha y desde un principio evitar una masacre injustificada tengo ideas de técnicas y desarrollos en el complejo de clan por si te interesa
Story progresses well, his "cheats" are also very good. I especially like the interaction with his mom and the worldview created by the shinobi world.
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This fic is just way too wordy and overly descriptive for me. Also, are you using AI? Because the MC’s personality seems to change from scene to scene. For example, how he acted after the leaf sticking exercise seemed wildly out of character.
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A decent fanfic with quality writing and a unique take on the Yamanaka clan! Highly recommended for any person deprived of Naruto fanfics
Yamanaka huh? An interesting choice! They are certainly underutilized in fanfiction. There are a lot of possibilities. Mind jutsus can be really scary even though they are not at all flashy. I sincerely hope the author will be able to deliver an intriguing story. The start has certainly got me hooked.
I honestly hate reading everything about childhood, but I know it will be necessary for the character's development, but oh well. Keep in mind that there are only 11 chapters, so there's not much I can say yet. 1. I would like the protagonist to have a more haughty attitude, something like Dr. House (this doesn't mean he'll be bad or good). 2. There are so many possibilities that you can give to new jutsus with the brain. Something like being able to enter nzt mode. 3. There are many possibilities of illusions/spells of Loki, Cassandra Nova, Legion series, etc. in the form of jutsus. 4. It must have some negative effects. I know you have unlimited potential, but I don't know if at least when he starts with the powers he'll get a migraine or need to eat something specifically repeatedly xD.
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