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If I'm being honest, I do prefer the first iteration of the story. Which means the first version of this crossover that was made by the original author. However, this version improves a lot of the aspects that were in the first version in terms of story progression, including around the prologue. The writer decided to create Hachiman as somewhat a parallel version of Sung Jin Woo, albeit the two have similarities including their current parential status. Either way, looking forward for more things to come with this one. It is rare to read a very good Oregairu fanfic these days.
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Honestly, while the writing itself is better, the story flow is much worse than the previous one. Hachiman has had no growth in personality despite all the fights and disappointment, I haven't seen him try to abuse the system to gain knowledge since it grants it instantly, and there are entire chapters from a POV of yui or yukino, hachiman still wants to apparently hangout, and they have classic "im a total snowflake don't use mean words" vibe like in the original. it is just annoying for me.
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This is most well written fic I've seen in a while like a long while. The characters feel real and there is depth emotionally and there is growth character wise. The fights are well choreographed and executed splendidly. Like I was expecting mid since it was so low on the power stone hierarchy but this is insane I highly recommend this.
very good, it has a lot of potential, no lo tires por favor-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Words can't describe how excellently structured these opening chapters are.
The quality of writing in this novel is vastly superior to its predecessor. The story development has been impressive so far. However, it is crucial to enhance the hero's character development alongside other main characters, avoiding the shy demeanor depicted in your previous work. Consider the transformative impact on the protagonist’s mentality, similar to the evolution seen in "Solo Leveling." Maintaining this level of storytelling and ensuring no character is neglected will elevate this novel to a fairy tale masterpiece. Ensure the characters' perspectives are balanced in length—moderate for general scenes and longer for significant events. Despite the peculiar start to the first chapter, I have confidence in your abilities as an author. What do you think about making the image of the main character like the image of the previous novel because it is an ideal image?
Yo, tag it under the snafu or my teen ... etc. - tags or whatnot. Otherwise, I wouldn't have known you were rewriting it if I had not checked to see if you had abandoned your previous version.
La calidad de escritura es muy buena, la duración de capítulos también. La historia está tomando una forma muy interesante y sin centrarse en los acontecimientos de la historia original por ahora. Recomiendo 100% el leer este fic.
If I'm being honest, I do prefer the first iteration of the story. Which means the first version of this crossover that was made by the original author. However, this version improves a lot of the aspects that were in the first version in terms of story progression, including around the prologue. The writer decided to create Hachiman as somewhat a parallel version of Sung Jin Woo, albeit the two have similarities including their current parential status. Either way, looking forward for more things to come with this one. It is rare to read a very good Oregairu fanfic these days.
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Honestly, while the writing itself is better, the story flow is much worse than the previous one. Hachiman has had no growth in personality despite all the fights and disappointment, I haven't seen him try to abuse the system to gain knowledge since it grants it instantly, and there are entire chapters from a POV of yui or yukino, hachiman still wants to apparently hangout, and they have classic "im a total snowflake don't use mean words" vibe like in the original. it is just annoying for me.
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This is most well written fic I've seen in a while like a long while. The characters feel real and there is depth emotionally and there is growth character wise. The fights are well choreographed and executed splendidly. Like I was expecting mid since it was so low on the power stone hierarchy but this is insane I highly recommend this.
very good, it has a lot of potential, no lo tires por favor-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Words can't describe how excellently structured these opening chapters are.
The quality of writing in this novel is vastly superior to its predecessor. The story development has been impressive so far. However, it is crucial to enhance the hero's character development alongside other main characters, avoiding the shy demeanor depicted in your previous work. Consider the transformative impact on the protagonist’s mentality, similar to the evolution seen in "Solo Leveling." Maintaining this level of storytelling and ensuring no character is neglected will elevate this novel to a fairy tale masterpiece. Ensure the characters' perspectives are balanced in length—moderate for general scenes and longer for significant events. Despite the peculiar start to the first chapter, I have confidence in your abilities as an author. What do you think about making the image of the main character like the image of the previous novel because it is an ideal image?
Yo, tag it under the snafu or my teen ... etc. - tags or whatnot. Otherwise, I wouldn't have known you were rewriting it if I had not checked to see if you had abandoned your previous version.
La calidad de escritura es muy buena, la duración de capítulos también. La historia está tomando una forma muy interesante y sin centrarse en los acontecimientos de la historia original por ahora. Recomiendo 100% el leer este fic.