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hmmmm it was actually okay as a pass time but if you can tolerate that mc was still in his Academy arc till 140+ chaps or more then you can give this a try. aside from having too much info that it becomes confusing it was passable but boring nonetheless.
it's an okay story.Kinda of boring though.It feels more like a narration instead of a getting an immersjve experience.It feels like I'm reading his journal or like he's narrating his past or something.Instead of saying "I wanna eat food" the author says "Yoruichi wants to eat food".It feels like ur writing in a third person pov. Just narrating the story.Kind of mid.World background their isn't much of it.At the end of the day he's still in school so I guess it tames time.I didn't get that far anyway. not bad but it's also not good either
Idea about his bankai make it so that he can create and manipulate a mirror dimension like Dr strange and can make reflection of his opponents and maybe he can even imitate their abilities
The story is really well written, but the fact that the protagonist has not achieved at least a 3rd seat power in over 140 chapters makes it very boring to read. The original subplot you created is interesting but it also seems too convoluted to finish. Anyway, I will continue reading but not having only small, slow advances in power makes the story very boring.
The story has a good idea. But it has a lot of unnecessary repeating sentences. it feels like it was written to fill the page for an essay exam rather than an engaging chapter.
I prefer this over most stories because this one has a slower pace than most and I don't feel like the Mc makes ridiculous progress immediately.
i read till chapter 50 and it is starting to get on my nerve, dont get me wrong the story is good but idk why but you nerfed the mc too much and the overall power levels of the characters are inconsistent and vague.The training of the mc seemed forced with no substantial development. The characters mei and kira comes out of the blue and the story develops around them. This is not bad but the arc is too long and gives vibes of flashback jutsu with every monologe of the character being a chapter. This is just my opinion and the story is very readable but i hate dramas . Just my taste i guess. Thanks again for the story.
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you are confuse.. yhwach timeline was a thousand years ago.. aizen born between 110-130 years ago.. how could you mix that up? theres even a quincy song for it.
Its a soap opera of bleach in book form so if thats your thing cool but this is moving way to slow for me nearly 100 chapters and barely any hint of progress it feels.
I usually don't do this but j got to since its mid and could be better I'm not sure if you know but what you doing is making something en trailing off to a different statement aka place in a time of the novel example is the garden then a paragraph later you say drying in as such they were in a pool or beach Your idea of doing He decided to He want to He needed to as a thought I would stop Because the he thought is bad way of saying it just put the name of the character instead of he him her ETC ALSO tip when having multiple people talk non stop make it so if i-stop make it so if it's an internal thought say [NAME] said internally also it would be good if you set up a normal coverstaion looking/places such as There's useful info “…”= internaly talking example, “of course you would say that” ‘…’= said out loud example [Name] ‘did you know that there are optional classes’ Add more livery when Mc dose it in a conversation Also the location more detailed instead of changing it mid sentence doesn't need to be something good it before scene change have something happen
A stupid grim-derp version of bleach that is taking far to long to get anywhere. Given that most fanfics get dropped by cha 100 to 200, the fact that at 50 mc has made what seems like no progress. As for the grim-derp part, I get suspicion at the beginning. But after 50 chap they are still threatening his life. If I was him i would have either killed myself or go live in the forest with the hollows. 0 out of 10, wouldn't read if it was the only bleach fanfic.
This is one of the very few bleach series that i can genuienly enjoy, I personally like yuichi's progression and the interactions with the characters and how they tie in to the story. Thank you for your hard work autour.
Really glad that I stumbled upon this read. I found it about a day ago, & I just now caught up. So far the story is amazing. The only thing that’s making this not be a 5 star read, for me is the lack of images when describing a weapon, an OC, or location. But the pacing is great. The interactions are great. Almost everything else is super solid. Your upload schedule seems great too. Keep up the good work, I can’t wait to see how far you’ll take this story. Have a good day/night. <3
Hey man, really good job on this story! I really like the character development and the setting in general. I think this book is going to go really far! Cheers man 🍻!
hmmmm it was actually okay as a pass time but if you can tolerate that mc was still in his Academy arc till 140+ chaps or more then you can give this a try. aside from having too much info that it becomes confusing it was passable but boring nonetheless.
it's an okay story.Kinda of boring though.It feels more like a narration instead of a getting an immersjve experience.It feels like I'm reading his journal or like he's narrating his past or something.Instead of saying "I wanna eat food" the author says "Yoruichi wants to eat food".It feels like ur writing in a third person pov. Just narrating the story.Kind of mid.World background their isn't much of it.At the end of the day he's still in school so I guess it tames time.I didn't get that far anyway. not bad but it's also not good either
Idea about his bankai make it so that he can create and manipulate a mirror dimension like Dr strange and can make reflection of his opponents and maybe he can even imitate their abilities
The story is really well written, but the fact that the protagonist has not achieved at least a 3rd seat power in over 140 chapters makes it very boring to read. The original subplot you created is interesting but it also seems too convoluted to finish. Anyway, I will continue reading but not having only small, slow advances in power makes the story very boring.
The story has a good idea. But it has a lot of unnecessary repeating sentences. it feels like it was written to fill the page for an essay exam rather than an engaging chapter.
I prefer this over most stories because this one has a slower pace than most and I don't feel like the Mc makes ridiculous progress immediately.
i read till chapter 50 and it is starting to get on my nerve, dont get me wrong the story is good but idk why but you nerfed the mc too much and the overall power levels of the characters are inconsistent and vague.The training of the mc seemed forced with no substantial development. The characters mei and kira comes out of the blue and the story develops around them. This is not bad but the arc is too long and gives vibes of flashback jutsu with every monologe of the character being a chapter. This is just my opinion and the story is very readable but i hate dramas . Just my taste i guess. Thanks again for the story.
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you are confuse.. yhwach timeline was a thousand years ago.. aizen born between 110-130 years ago.. how could you mix that up? theres even a quincy song for it.
Its a soap opera of bleach in book form so if thats your thing cool but this is moving way to slow for me nearly 100 chapters and barely any hint of progress it feels.
I usually don't do this but j got to since its mid and could be better I'm not sure if you know but what you doing is making something en trailing off to a different statement aka place in a time of the novel example is the garden then a paragraph later you say drying in as such they were in a pool or beach Your idea of doing He decided to He want to He needed to as a thought I would stop Because the he thought is bad way of saying it just put the name of the character instead of he him her ETC ALSO tip when having multiple people talk non stop make it so if i-stop make it so if it's an internal thought say [NAME] said internally also it would be good if you set up a normal coverstaion looking/places such as There's useful info “…”= internaly talking example, “of course you would say that” ‘…’= said out loud example [Name] ‘did you know that there are optional classes’ Add more livery when Mc dose it in a conversation Also the location more detailed instead of changing it mid sentence doesn't need to be something good it before scene change have something happen
A stupid grim-derp version of bleach that is taking far to long to get anywhere. Given that most fanfics get dropped by cha 100 to 200, the fact that at 50 mc has made what seems like no progress. As for the grim-derp part, I get suspicion at the beginning. But after 50 chap they are still threatening his life. If I was him i would have either killed myself or go live in the forest with the hollows. 0 out of 10, wouldn't read if it was the only bleach fanfic.
This is one of the very few bleach series that i can genuienly enjoy, I personally like yuichi's progression and the interactions with the characters and how they tie in to the story. Thank you for your hard work autour.
Really glad that I stumbled upon this read. I found it about a day ago, & I just now caught up. So far the story is amazing. The only thing that’s making this not be a 5 star read, for me is the lack of images when describing a weapon, an OC, or location. But the pacing is great. The interactions are great. Almost everything else is super solid. Your upload schedule seems great too. Keep up the good work, I can’t wait to see how far you’ll take this story. Have a good day/night. <3
Hey man, really good job on this story! I really like the character development and the setting in general. I think this book is going to go really far! Cheers man 🍻!
One question. Is there romance in this fanfic?