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Author everything is Good I like this Novel Even Spennded some coins but there is only one this is lacking it is Dialogue there are no dialogue it's like you are writing a Essay. If you would have written some dialogue first volume would have more chapters. Although I am not saying why you ended Protagonist very fast but Try Adding More dialogue now that you have Contract also
There are very few harem members, that's why I give it a low score. I love harem?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
the story is unbelievably boring, the first arc was good but now in that other world everything was boring there is no plot advance, that torture of the supreme 5 was absurd, about 6 chapters lost in that meaningless torture, just kill them and Done, another important thing, the villain looks like a beta protagonist letting himself be commanded and manipulated by his women, another point is that the dialogues of his "harem" (only 2 women) are so flat that they seem robotic, anyway, I hope that this third arc is better written and adds more women to the harem and doesn't make their conversations so flat and robotic postscript: If you delete the review I will repost it
First of all The story has great potential, the villain mc was great and the plot was fantastic. Now here’s the problem Many words not wording correctly Hard to understand unless you read MLT before and even then it is hard to understand. I suggest rewriting it and fixing many of the grammer mistake. Also I get that you are trying to make the mc overpowered and started taking everything (former)mc would have before(former) mc gets it but give the (former mc) some chance. Destorying them before they start to get stronger is good and all, But giving them hope and chance then crushing them (Imp) is better Take his (future wife) infront him then taking them before they meet or slowly destorying everything they build then finally killing them 😅 Well overall I really wanted to give 3.5/5 but I just can’t >.< sorry
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Author everything is Good I like this Novel Even Spennded some coins but there is only one this is lacking it is Dialogue there are no dialogue it's like you are writing a Essay. If you would have written some dialogue first volume would have more chapters. Although I am not saying why you ended Protagonist very fast but Try Adding More dialogue now that you have Contract also
There are very few harem members, that's why I give it a low score. I love harem?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
the story is unbelievably boring, the first arc was good but now in that other world everything was boring there is no plot advance, that torture of the supreme 5 was absurd, about 6 chapters lost in that meaningless torture, just kill them and Done, another important thing, the villain looks like a beta protagonist letting himself be commanded and manipulated by his women, another point is that the dialogues of his "harem" (only 2 women) are so flat that they seem robotic, anyway, I hope that this third arc is better written and adds more women to the harem and doesn't make their conversations so flat and robotic postscript: If you delete the review I will repost it
First of all The story has great potential, the villain mc was great and the plot was fantastic. Now here’s the problem Many words not wording correctly Hard to understand unless you read MLT before and even then it is hard to understand. I suggest rewriting it and fixing many of the grammer mistake. Also I get that you are trying to make the mc overpowered and started taking everything (former)mc would have before(former) mc gets it but give the (former mc) some chance. Destorying them before they start to get stronger is good and all, But giving them hope and chance then crushing them (Imp) is better Take his (future wife) infront him then taking them before they meet or slowly destorying everything they build then finally killing them 😅 Well overall I really wanted to give 3.5/5 but I just can’t >.< sorry
😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😗😄😃😃😃😗😗😗😗😗😗😗😗😗 😗😀😄😃😜😉😃😄😜😃😜😄😜😜😄😜😜😃😃😜😄😀😃😃😜😜😃😜😃😜😃😜😃😜😄😜😄
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