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In fact, I liked the work, and it is unique in its own way,since I have not seen anywhere that the COMIC Parker also mixed with DC gets the system, of course I hope that the author will return and continue writing, but these are just wishes (Sorry if there are errors in my review so.as I do not speak English and use the built-in browser translator)
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Bruh.... This is far one of the best Spiderman fic. I have ever read so if you are getting my review please continue it. PS. one of your loyal fans
like the story, the only problem for me is the grammar which confuses me sometimes. But I use it to practice my English skills so that's a plus
No a very good story one of the worst I've read,.................................................................... ............... ..... . ... ... ............. ..........
excelente historia y buen harem.....................................................................................................................................................
No esta nada mal, la gente que se queja del trasfondo tragico del personaje y ect... en marvel el trasfondo sentimental de peter siempre es malo desde un punto u otro, no puedes dar por mala la historia por ese motivo
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I love this if it wasn't the update problem then I would have given full 5.0 rating . Author if you can solve that then you have my support
I knew it I have read this before and I found it I read this in Wattpad from Natsu433 so either you copied and pasted the whole story without changing anything not grammar or spelling or you are just the same author either way I didnโt enjoy reading it back then and nothing has changed.
Interesting topic. I enjoyed reading it. He is a novice writer, so his fault is many, but his effort is admirable. If he improves himself and rewrites about it, he can make a very good fan fic. I can say that the only problem other than the writing style is that it is suddenly and overpowered. Also, the personalities of the characters are very insipid and empty.
Well, this is a very good novel. But I think the mc should be more cruel. But still I love this novel and I hope you continue yo write this.
this is a very good fan fic but lacking in the chapters for being short but not that short but i hope you keep updating us this is a very good fan fic
Apart from the grammar and the fact that the author abandoned the story, I would give it a 10, I recommend that you read it. ............................................
super interesting story with a funny twist on using the system and the multiverse plus the super cool harem.๐๐ฏ
Love the fic pls make move more chapters and donโt care what others say About you ๐
Till chapter 33 it was good. Grammar was at times terrible to read but from the story development is was all cool. Before the story even begins he had like 10 girlfriends one at a time who all cheated on him. With different men from the groups and only 3 or 4 he hates the rest he somehow forgives and joins the avenger in later chapters. Even though they betrayed his trust more then one time. After chapter 34 where he forgives them and says they need to earn his trust again i dropped the story because i cant find myself agreeing with that decision. I hope the review is as neutral as possible even if most of it is negative over the story. I wish all others a good reading experience and the author fun and motivation to write more
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i like this story very much, but the author is not updating it anymore. I hope the author will continue writing it.
In fact, I liked the work, and it is unique in its own way,since I have not seen anywhere that the COMIC Parker also mixed with DC gets the system, of course I hope that the author will return and continue writing, but these are just wishes (Sorry if there are errors in my review so.as I do not speak English and use the built-in browser translator)
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Bruh.... This is far one of the best Spiderman fic. I have ever read so if you are getting my review please continue it. PS. one of your loyal fans
like the story, the only problem for me is the grammar which confuses me sometimes. But I use it to practice my English skills so that's a plus
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excelente historia y buen harem.....................................................................................................................................................
No esta nada mal, la gente que se queja del trasfondo tragico del personaje y ect... en marvel el trasfondo sentimental de peter siempre es malo desde un punto u otro, no puedes dar por mala la historia por ese motivo
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I love this if it wasn't the update problem then I would have given full 5.0 rating . Author if you can solve that then you have my support
I knew it I have read this before and I found it I read this in Wattpad from Natsu433 so either you copied and pasted the whole story without changing anything not grammar or spelling or you are just the same author either way I didnโt enjoy reading it back then and nothing has changed.
Interesting topic. I enjoyed reading it. He is a novice writer, so his fault is many, but his effort is admirable. If he improves himself and rewrites about it, he can make a very good fan fic. I can say that the only problem other than the writing style is that it is suddenly and overpowered. Also, the personalities of the characters are very insipid and empty.
Well, this is a very good novel. But I think the mc should be more cruel. But still I love this novel and I hope you continue yo write this.
this is a very good fan fic but lacking in the chapters for being short but not that short but i hope you keep updating us this is a very good fan fic
Apart from the grammar and the fact that the author abandoned the story, I would give it a 10, I recommend that you read it. ............................................
super interesting story with a funny twist on using the system and the multiverse plus the super cool harem.๐๐ฏ
Love the fic pls make move more chapters and donโt care what others say About you ๐
Till chapter 33 it was good. Grammar was at times terrible to read but from the story development is was all cool. Before the story even begins he had like 10 girlfriends one at a time who all cheated on him. With different men from the groups and only 3 or 4 he hates the rest he somehow forgives and joins the avenger in later chapters. Even though they betrayed his trust more then one time. After chapter 34 where he forgives them and says they need to earn his trust again i dropped the story because i cant find myself agreeing with that decision. I hope the review is as neutral as possible even if most of it is negative over the story. I wish all others a good reading experience and the author fun and motivation to write more
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i like this story very much, but the author is not updating it anymore. I hope the author will continue writing it.