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Don't get me wrong. Just like the characters, I can't help but be shameless for once you know. It makes the fun funnier. Sorry! What exactly was that supposed to mean? Anyways! jokes aside it is a fun fantastic book with some comedy after the first introduction chapters. Correction will be made later on. Just leave a chapter comment and its done. Just read and have fun. More chapters coming in. Your shameless author 😂 ~ Brightbrain 256 Show some love and drop a power stone. I can lend you some if you don't have enough. Just say a words and your soul shall be healed. Oops! This is the longest review in history! And that's what makes us unique. Being shameless!
It shows a promising start. It immediately caught my attention and made me curious about the book. Just slight edits and grammar improvements and this could be an amazing story. There is some potential to this story.
Really good novel! A good backstory, and great plot. THe characters feel alive, and overal realy well written. Can;t wait for more chapters!!!!
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I like the direction this is going but it seems a little rushed and lacks some details. Spelling could be improved too but this has good potential
The story was fun and little funny I have not much to say but it was good. So about 4.67/5 would be the perfect rating for it
The story is good so far, but the world building is lacking, and side chracters too, especially c the part where thE mc’s Ye Futian’s Parents died, i fekt nothing since that side Wasn’t built up well
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This is definitely an imaginative story.it details a time very different from our current one and paints a clear picture of the world. I'm sure readers will be entertained by this one.
Amazing and intriguing story ,I recommend it a lot and you won't be disappointed. It just needs to go through a grammar correction at a few places,But the story and concept is great..Definitely worth reading.
The start up is... Unique (I like how you end your chapters). The pacing is good and the writing quality is perfect.I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters.
This a must read detailed and descriptive writing, this book is one of a kind i love how everything is brought down to detail, its a book i will add to my library and look for to its updates, this author knows his story thank you for sharing your talent and giving us something decent to read.
The dramatic setup to the story is quick, simple, and effective. The introduction to the system makes sense, and the dialogue between a moderately large cast in the first few chapters is nice. The MC isn't annoying. Unfortunately, the writing quality itself is terrible. Here's an example from Chapter Four: '" You see... I won you. So pay up!Two gold coins!" The fatty one Carrying a bow in this back said joyously.' If that doesn't bother you and you enjoy xianxia-inspired stories then give this one a try.
Okay, so the pace of the story is perfect and even the plot is good, but I think you should work on your writing style. Little edit can help. Overall, I enjoyed reading it. The main plot just grips you in. I would love to read it further. All the best author [img=recommend]
A very engaging story and I love the historical setting. Grammar definitely got better as the story progressed. Please keep it up; I will be following up to read more! [img=update]
Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an intriguing plot though: 1. Good idea to start the story with an interesting prologue. 2. Good language control. 3. Few edits are needed to but, everything is just fine. Again, thank you and best of luck to you.
The world background is awesome. The character design and storyline is the best. Good work author.
Awesome job.... slight edits should be made and grammar could be improved as well. Overall, it was a good read for me and I really liked the story....
The storyline is very entertaining. The use of the first person added a peculiar sense of excitement. The grammar was okayish, but the thing that needs most of your attention is structural error.
I'm so hooked! Although there're a few grammar mistakes the fact is that its simplicity is a good thing, keeps you hooked and interested. The premise is promising and as I read on- the rest of the novel too! Keep it up author, i'm camping here for sure!
I love the empire setting of the story. The story has a lot of potential. The character building is great. I would really recommend this book.
I really enjoyed it, it's very interesting and I like this kind of story, I'll definitely keep reading
Amazing work, I would recommend slight fixing for grammar and such but other than that the story is good!
Hi, your book looks like something you could sell in amazon with some tweaks here and there! I like your writing style, it is just as unique and good as any good author. I see a lot of potential, and this is one of my fav books to review bc of the well spaced paragraphs and nicely formulated sentences. I would suggest you to keep reading and hope you reach your goal you were talking about at the end of the chapters.
I love the pace of the story; the use of the first-person narrative technique does not make other characters abstract. I have read a few chapter, and I love it. Can wait to see how the MC grows.
What a fun story it is... The fantasy magic school... Wow the concept is cool itself... And reader gonna attract themselves bcz everyone loves to read this kind of stories a lot... Some improvements needed and for that l am suggesting author to use grammerly... And after that this story gonna be like a master piece... All the best author .. Don't loose hope and keep writting...
The writing style of the novel is still immature yet it shows great promise. If the Author can use Grammarly to correct their grammar then it will have a tremendous effect as well. Regarding the story, the system was not introduced at the very beginning but around the 18ish chapter, making it so that the readers will learn about the world first and then get introduced to the system. While the story up to now is quite admittedly cliche, hope that author brings some spice on the following chapters. Keep up the good work author^^
I must say good story line, captivating and intriguing chapters that keeps you clued on a spot... The writer really did a great job with the book and I really do love reading it, just the grammar seems a bit confusing... Anyway, overall the book is amazing and the writer should keep up with the amazing job 🙂
Good storyline, we, reader sometimes need to travel to a place of fantasy. Work a little bit on your grammar. No one is perfect
Wonderful work. The author did an amazing job in his choice of words and sentences. Not my kind of book but I would continue reading.....👍👍
An awesome work....... slight edits have to be made and also the grammar can be improved. Overall a good read for me and I liked the story that much.....potential is also there and It needed more features for a traction of boosts in views. The readers would like to see its end so don't give up [img=recommend]
Don't get me wrong. Just like the characters, I can't help but be shameless for once you know. It makes the fun funnier. Sorry! What exactly was that supposed to mean? Anyways! jokes aside it is a fun fantastic book with some comedy after the first introduction chapters. Correction will be made later on. Just leave a chapter comment and its done. Just read and have fun. More chapters coming in. Your shameless author 😂 ~ Brightbrain 256 Show some love and drop a power stone. I can lend you some if you don't have enough. Just say a words and your soul shall be healed. Oops! This is the longest review in history! And that's what makes us unique. Being shameless!
It shows a promising start. It immediately caught my attention and made me curious about the book. Just slight edits and grammar improvements and this could be an amazing story. There is some potential to this story.
Really good novel! A good backstory, and great plot. THe characters feel alive, and overal realy well written. Can;t wait for more chapters!!!!
Membuka SPOILER I like the direction this is going but it seems a little rushed and lacks some details. Spelling could be improved too but this has good potential
The story was fun and little funny I have not much to say but it was good. So about 4.67/5 would be the perfect rating for it
The story is good so far, but the world building is lacking, and side chracters too, especially c the part where thE mc’s Ye Futian’s Parents died, i fekt nothing since that side Wasn’t built up well
Membuka SPOILER This is definitely an imaginative story.it details a time very different from our current one and paints a clear picture of the world. I'm sure readers will be entertained by this one.
Amazing and intriguing story ,I recommend it a lot and you won't be disappointed. It just needs to go through a grammar correction at a few places,But the story and concept is great..Definitely worth reading.
The start up is... Unique (I like how you end your chapters). The pacing is good and the writing quality is perfect.I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters.
This a must read detailed and descriptive writing, this book is one of a kind i love how everything is brought down to detail, its a book i will add to my library and look for to its updates, this author knows his story thank you for sharing your talent and giving us something decent to read.
The dramatic setup to the story is quick, simple, and effective. The introduction to the system makes sense, and the dialogue between a moderately large cast in the first few chapters is nice. The MC isn't annoying. Unfortunately, the writing quality itself is terrible. Here's an example from Chapter Four: '" You see... I won you. So pay up!Two gold coins!" The fatty one Carrying a bow in this back said joyously.' If that doesn't bother you and you enjoy xianxia-inspired stories then give this one a try.
Okay, so the pace of the story is perfect and even the plot is good, but I think you should work on your writing style. Little edit can help. Overall, I enjoyed reading it. The main plot just grips you in. I would love to read it further. All the best author [img=recommend]
A very engaging story and I love the historical setting. Grammar definitely got better as the story progressed. Please keep it up; I will be following up to read more! [img=update]
Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an intriguing plot though: 1. Good idea to start the story with an interesting prologue. 2. Good language control. 3. Few edits are needed to but, everything is just fine. Again, thank you and best of luck to you.
The world background is awesome. The character design and storyline is the best. Good work author.
Awesome job.... slight edits should be made and grammar could be improved as well. Overall, it was a good read for me and I really liked the story....
The storyline is very entertaining. The use of the first person added a peculiar sense of excitement. The grammar was okayish, but the thing that needs most of your attention is structural error.
I'm so hooked! Although there're a few grammar mistakes the fact is that its simplicity is a good thing, keeps you hooked and interested. The premise is promising and as I read on- the rest of the novel too! Keep it up author, i'm camping here for sure!
I love the empire setting of the story. The story has a lot of potential. The character building is great. I would really recommend this book.
I really enjoyed it, it's very interesting and I like this kind of story, I'll definitely keep reading
Amazing work, I would recommend slight fixing for grammar and such but other than that the story is good!
Hi, your book looks like something you could sell in amazon with some tweaks here and there! I like your writing style, it is just as unique and good as any good author. I see a lot of potential, and this is one of my fav books to review bc of the well spaced paragraphs and nicely formulated sentences. I would suggest you to keep reading and hope you reach your goal you were talking about at the end of the chapters.
I love the pace of the story; the use of the first-person narrative technique does not make other characters abstract. I have read a few chapter, and I love it. Can wait to see how the MC grows.
What a fun story it is... The fantasy magic school... Wow the concept is cool itself... And reader gonna attract themselves bcz everyone loves to read this kind of stories a lot... Some improvements needed and for that l am suggesting author to use grammerly... And after that this story gonna be like a master piece... All the best author .. Don't loose hope and keep writting...
The writing style of the novel is still immature yet it shows great promise. If the Author can use Grammarly to correct their grammar then it will have a tremendous effect as well. Regarding the story, the system was not introduced at the very beginning but around the 18ish chapter, making it so that the readers will learn about the world first and then get introduced to the system. While the story up to now is quite admittedly cliche, hope that author brings some spice on the following chapters. Keep up the good work author^^
I must say good story line, captivating and intriguing chapters that keeps you clued on a spot... The writer really did a great job with the book and I really do love reading it, just the grammar seems a bit confusing... Anyway, overall the book is amazing and the writer should keep up with the amazing job 🙂
Good storyline, we, reader sometimes need to travel to a place of fantasy. Work a little bit on your grammar. No one is perfect
Wonderful work. The author did an amazing job in his choice of words and sentences. Not my kind of book but I would continue reading.....👍👍
An awesome work....... slight edits have to be made and also the grammar can be improved. Overall a good read for me and I liked the story that much.....potential is also there and It needed more features for a traction of boosts in views. The readers would like to see its end so don't give up [img=recommend]