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Well, I like it, what can I say, clearly it is a clichรฉ in terms of idea, maybe not from this novel but the concept is clichรฉ, even so I like it, what you have to work on is reducing the narration and giving more interaction of characters , at least it feels like it's 90% storytelling and 10% engagement, but overall it's good, I think you'll improve with future chapters. True, I had forgotten, try to avoid placing so many of your comments in the middle of the chapters, put them at the end or at the beginning of the page and separate them, but ideally they do not go in the middle of the chapters.
enough to get to three stars but not par four lacks enough If the story does not fit, it is clichรฉ, so to speak, not so much but it shows and jokes in bad taste do not make you laugh I do not understand what kind of humor that is
If you haven't seen the movie, do not attempt to read this story. The difficulty is set at the highest level. The grammar is terrible, author likes to write in a way that only certain people understand, knows confusion magic and it seems encrypted at most times As everyone knows, five star reviews cannot be trusted
this is the best Twilight story I ever read has the best storyline how you explain he is a hybrid but you can fix how he transforms in to a wolf but it is good keep it up
A word of advice, if you're not funny, don't try to be. Lucifer? really? well that doesn't detract from the plot, but I think it's a little out of place. Other than the lousy, seriously, terrible jokes, and maybe the occasional grammatical error, there's nothing wrong. At least this author understands that his jokes can be improved, to put it mildly, the only thing worse than a bad comedian is a bad comedian who thinks he's good. Overall a decent story.
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overall a good ff so far. keep up the good work! [img=recommend] sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle! sparkle sparkle!
Amazing story pleaSe do not drop iT..... to many decent or good storyโs do.....!!!!!!!!!!!!!๐๐ปโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ
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Jodete autor, 5 meses. 5 jodidos meses sin publicar,que ha pasado. Y fuera de eso lo dejas en la mejor parte, deseas morir o que?. Que pasa que no te veo publicando mas Por cierto,como persona educada que soy y nada grosero. Debo decir que me encanta tu libro, es muy bueno y el humor se entiende perfectamente y me hizo pasar un agradable momento. Asi que porfavor sigue publicando. Y por que 4,6 estrellas y no 5.... pues al grandisimo autor se le dio la idea de no publicar en 5 meses y por eso lo pongo,asi que se joden todos
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Some noice vamps story. Not a great fan of Twilight, but why not... A vampire story in a Castlevania style would be awesome I think. Idk if anything like that actually exist tho.
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Shameles autor here just to say that this is one of the worst but at the same time best twilight fan-fics you have ever read in your life before... of course, after our all might CORNBRINGER. WE WORK FOR THE CORN!