The premise is good, the writing is up to par, as always. But the execution is mediocre at best. Any increase in Paul's power feels hollow. You just completely skipped any development of his abilities. What about the silent cast? You'll just have him use it as it suits the script? Will everything be resolved with convenience? Will we have another rushed and anticlimactic ending?
I know the patch looks good on her, but it doesn't make any sense that Hwa Ryun lost his eye xD
It's been years since I've read a decent douluo dalu story. And yours is more than just decent, it's very good. It has good ideas, good execution and even better writing. I especially like the mutation of the white tiger, being similar to the 3 eyed white tiger that Huo Yuhao's son awakened, but with a Sharingan. If I had to highlight something negative, it would be that I personally don't like manhua, and this fanfic seems to be inspired by it. For example, Dai Mubai and Dai Weisi always had a bad relationship in the novel.
Isaac?
While reading this I could only imagine the faces of Paul's haters xD. Honestly, Paul sucks, but he's one of the best characters in Mushoku tensei. I think a lot of the hate towards him is unjustified. I'm glad to see there's a relatively neutral author with him. By the way, there's something you forgot, you didn't mention what Seraph, Eric and Silphy's progress was in these two years.
Frankly I don't love the idea of MC's relationship only with Endorsi. She's nice, but I feel that Hwa Ryun, Yuri and Maschenny are much better(Well, in terms of design and charisma) But I understand that creating a romantic relationship with them is not very realistic. Although I think with Yuri it's definitely possible, not because Baam didn't dare means MC can't. And as for Hwa Ryun, him being an irregular should open a couple of doors with her.
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Fate/Tower of God - Climbing the Tower as/with Mordred (fanfic)
Anime & Comics · Jaed21
Maybe this is just me, but I feel like the fight scenes are terribly bad. The mc's fighting style is terribly simple and uncreative. Of all the versions of gravity magic I've read, yours is without a doubt the worst. I'd like to believe it's because you're still many years away from mastering such complicated magic. But I'm pretty sure I read that MC had already mastered it.
The demonic eye of Gishlaine
Why is it that every time I read a stupid comment, it's yours?
I would still have another training session and shower later in the day, and did not want to bother Lilia with excessive laundry, so I put on the same underwear and only changed my clothes into something clean to wear around the house for the time being.
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Anime & Comics · Jaed21
Mi muchacho tiene problemas serios con la religión. Por alguna razón, casí todos los Mexicanos lo tienen, aunque ninguno de sus problemas actuales tenga algo que ver con esta.
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Anime & Comics · Brian17Greyrath