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Nice fanfic and the chapter words length is super long 10k words. Go and read this, it's worth your time. its really good i like reading it when are you going to make more chapters IM looking foward to reading more. also what other worlds will he go 2.
The worldbuilding is done nicely. The MC motivations and actions are understandable, while not commendable at times. The worlds inhabitans do not feel out of character to a degree that hinders enjoyment while reading. All in all enjoyable fanfic
I like this fanfic it scratches all the itches I've had for a good story ..............................................................
Man u do better than a lot of writers Good chapters, but if u already do some cutting chapters like 1 chapter of yours is 5-8 chapters for normal fic Do cut them and i think u will grow up in tops
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It started of great but progressively went downhill Some characters introduced to the story are repeatedly left in an unresolved relationship with the MC. Author spends many chaps building up to a relationship beginning with these heroines, only to then not have anything happen and him leaving for another world again. This happens repeatedly. Again and again. It might be ok if it happened once and it was explained why, but nope this occurs again and again. characters are developed after loong long chapters if build up to a beginning relationship with our MC only to have nothing happen and he leaves to do the same thing. Some heroines with a supposed backstory with the MC is just shrugged off as another side char where the author never bothers explaining about them despite being a significant part of the MC’s identity. (Eg Balor) TLDR; Author needs to respect his own writing and what he has built up for his characters and not just throw it all away to move the “story” on. And tbh it’s not working and the fanfic is getting boring and uninspired.
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The beginning is good, but after the somewhat confession from tatsuki and orihime... after that the nxt chap is just meh. If your here for the romance dont expect much cuz his firting style is just a repeat. Then after making a big move(like confessing and stuff) or making the relationship with a girl official, mc will left them hangging in an instant. If your here for the gamer, its a meh but also dont expect much. Its ok in the beginning, but when mc go to soul society. The vibes of a gamer become thin.(its hrd to explain, but mehh🤷🏻♂️) If your here for the plot... dont bother as the ending is the same in every arc. Even thought many big events happen that should chance the of plot... but nothing change. The plot stick to the og one with just many “big” events happen in the middle. Also the mc’s personality is... 😔😔 Even then, i want to commend the author for the long chaps. Some chaps can be divided in to 3 some into 2 and the first few chaps into 4 or 5(i think). To make it as long as the common chaps for ff novels. (Chap 20, 1 arc)
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For most part the storyline and characterisations were excellent apart from some minor examples. That said those minor details added up together to make a situation that suddenly destroyed my entire enjoyment in the story. The first around 20 chapters were very enjoyable but the moment it started to crossover all the previous story become a waste.
I'm only 1 chapter in but this is very enjoyable. The chapters are very long and the updates seem to be decent. Not to mention the mc. The mc is truly what they call a pro gamer
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s usual, the main hero gives his powers to others without the advantage of himself (it would be better if he did it so that they would have to give half of their experience to him so that they would not even reach a hair of his strength, well, no, you have to give them all the power of the system and the point is what is special hero) (google translate)
it's quite good but the author just put the part concerning the plot its just thickening it more and more but it becomes extreamly tiring. He forgot that the gamer is more about his farm and how he progress little by little but here that was only exploited at the Begening. The character design is simply skipped. And there is too much cliff hanger, promonition, you just can't enjoy the curent events.
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Nice piece of work. PS for those who love gamer-system fics and really evil/dark MCs should read all fics of The_Dark_Wolf_Shiro, they are my favourite fanfictions of alltime! (you find on ao3 or fanfiction.net, but i would recommend aoe bc the interface is a lot better aswell as the whole website...he already has 2 fics finished and they are around 400k words each....)
Well this is good even nice but updates are really uneven so maybe try to stabilize that other than that it's done deal for me.👍🏼👍👍👍🏼👍👍👍🏼👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I like the story ....................................................................................................................................
An enjoyable tale. I like how the author doesn't stick with canon. That's the worst thing for many ff's. The system is strange, but most systems end up like that, or being totally OP.
This book is becoming awesome and hot, can't wait of who he will summon either companions from other universes or like the fate cards and I hope his zanpakto is like the black beast or the susano unit from Blazblue.
I like the attitude of the mc, the truth interests me this fic. I've been looking for bleach fics and yours is one of the few out there, and they're good. Currently, everything I am looking for there is only 4 (counting this one), which are a good fic. Could someone recommend another bleach fic?
In principle, the fanfiction is very good, the characters are not made of cardboard and are well written, the background of the world is the same as in the canon, so there is no point in talking about this, I can't say much about the battles, since there were not so many battles at the moment, updates are enough unstable. The only thing I really didn't like was that MC gives away not only his system, but almost all his skills to all those close to him, and even sometimes gives quite cheat items, I don't mind MC making his loved ones stronger , but I am opposed to him giving everything that he has, having lost the whole point of his system and skills.
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Author plEase come back it too goOd dont drop it 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻✍🏻🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
Nice fanfic and the chapter words length is super long 10k words. Go and read this, it's worth your time. its really good i like reading it when are you going to make more chapters IM looking foward to reading more. also what other worlds will he go 2.
The worldbuilding is done nicely. The MC motivations and actions are understandable, while not commendable at times. The worlds inhabitans do not feel out of character to a degree that hinders enjoyment while reading. All in all enjoyable fanfic
I like this fanfic it scratches all the itches I've had for a good story ..............................................................
Man u do better than a lot of writers Good chapters, but if u already do some cutting chapters like 1 chapter of yours is 5-8 chapters for normal fic Do cut them and i think u will grow up in tops
I swear to god the title changed NICENICENICENICENICENICENICE NICENICENICENICENICENICENICE NICENICENICENICENICENICENICE FILLERFILLERFILLERFILLERFILLER
It started of great but progressively went downhill Some characters introduced to the story are repeatedly left in an unresolved relationship with the MC. Author spends many chaps building up to a relationship beginning with these heroines, only to then not have anything happen and him leaving for another world again. This happens repeatedly. Again and again. It might be ok if it happened once and it was explained why, but nope this occurs again and again. characters are developed after loong long chapters if build up to a beginning relationship with our MC only to have nothing happen and he leaves to do the same thing. Some heroines with a supposed backstory with the MC is just shrugged off as another side char where the author never bothers explaining about them despite being a significant part of the MC’s identity. (Eg Balor) TLDR; Author needs to respect his own writing and what he has built up for his characters and not just throw it all away to move the “story” on. And tbh it’s not working and the fanfic is getting boring and uninspired.
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Its a new GhostZ account dont buy anything, he writes stories and then drops them!!!! Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit Word limit
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The beginning is good, but after the somewhat confession from tatsuki and orihime... after that the nxt chap is just meh. If your here for the romance dont expect much cuz his firting style is just a repeat. Then after making a big move(like confessing and stuff) or making the relationship with a girl official, mc will left them hangging in an instant. If your here for the gamer, its a meh but also dont expect much. Its ok in the beginning, but when mc go to soul society. The vibes of a gamer become thin.(its hrd to explain, but mehh🤷🏻♂️) If your here for the plot... dont bother as the ending is the same in every arc. Even thought many big events happen that should chance the of plot... but nothing change. The plot stick to the og one with just many “big” events happen in the middle. Also the mc’s personality is... 😔😔 Even then, i want to commend the author for the long chaps. Some chaps can be divided in to 3 some into 2 and the first few chaps into 4 or 5(i think). To make it as long as the common chaps for ff novels. (Chap 20, 1 arc)
I like the main character, he's evil, but Peri gets what he wants[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
For most part the storyline and characterisations were excellent apart from some minor examples. That said those minor details added up together to make a situation that suddenly destroyed my entire enjoyment in the story. The first around 20 chapters were very enjoyable but the moment it started to crossover all the previous story become a waste.
I'm only 1 chapter in but this is very enjoyable. The chapters are very long and the updates seem to be decent. Not to mention the mc. The mc is truly what they call a pro gamer
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s usual, the main hero gives his powers to others without the advantage of himself (it would be better if he did it so that they would have to give half of their experience to him so that they would not even reach a hair of his strength, well, no, you have to give them all the power of the system and the point is what is special hero) (google translate)
it's quite good but the author just put the part concerning the plot its just thickening it more and more but it becomes extreamly tiring. He forgot that the gamer is more about his farm and how he progress little by little but here that was only exploited at the Begening. The character design is simply skipped. And there is too much cliff hanger, promonition, you just can't enjoy the curent events.
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Nice piece of work. PS for those who love gamer-system fics and really evil/dark MCs should read all fics of The_Dark_Wolf_Shiro, they are my favourite fanfictions of alltime! (you find on ao3 or fanfiction.net, but i would recommend aoe bc the interface is a lot better aswell as the whole website...he already has 2 fics finished and they are around 400k words each....)
Well this is good even nice but updates are really uneven so maybe try to stabilize that other than that it's done deal for me.👍🏼👍👍👍🏼👍👍👍🏼👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I like the story ....................................................................................................................................
An enjoyable tale. I like how the author doesn't stick with canon. That's the worst thing for many ff's. The system is strange, but most systems end up like that, or being totally OP.
This book is becoming awesome and hot, can't wait of who he will summon either companions from other universes or like the fate cards and I hope his zanpakto is like the black beast or the susano unit from Blazblue.
I like the attitude of the mc, the truth interests me this fic. I've been looking for bleach fics and yours is one of the few out there, and they're good. Currently, everything I am looking for there is only 4 (counting this one), which are a good fic. Could someone recommend another bleach fic?
In principle, the fanfiction is very good, the characters are not made of cardboard and are well written, the background of the world is the same as in the canon, so there is no point in talking about this, I can't say much about the battles, since there were not so many battles at the moment, updates are enough unstable. The only thing I really didn't like was that MC gives away not only his system, but almost all his skills to all those close to him, and even sometimes gives quite cheat items, I don't mind MC making his loved ones stronger , but I am opposed to him giving everything that he has, having lost the whole point of his system and skills.
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