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Hey i love how this is all going and I lnow I might be a little late to say this but you had asked about his potential powers and how to show his evolution over time and i was thinking you should keep it at only fire for a few reasons since it can tie into how he grows over time. You can say that after he gets his wings he passes out and is visited by the dragon then he can explain some of his powers and how he has a few stages before he grows completely such as his wings and being able to blow fire being the first with the second allowing him to have full control and being able to manipulate the fire like in avatar and that can fit into him further evolving his martial arts. Im not sure what the next stage can be but the final one can be him turning into a full blown dragon for a given amount of time at this point he would be able to take on all for one on equal footing or even surpassing him. 😅 i know this is a lot but just some food for thought if you end up seeing this
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Overall an amazing story to read and become immersed into, one second I'm on on chapter 1 and the next I'm at the end of the chapters. while the under bars are annoying for audio readers, it's not a huge problem. I definitely recommend this story as it has a lot of potential and I'd love to see more people give it a try.
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while im writing this review in the early stages of the novel, i will say the story is great. This is due to the author writing out and explaining the backstory of the mc and the setting
Author-san here everybody getting ready to get drunk if I don't get enough views or bad reviews. . . . . Just kidding guys, give me your honest review and help me better myself.
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First take out the harem, then we'll talk........................................................................................................................
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Hey i love how this is all going and I lnow I might be a little late to say this but you had asked about his potential powers and how to show his evolution over time and i was thinking you should keep it at only fire for a few reasons since it can tie into how he grows over time. You can say that after he gets his wings he passes out and is visited by the dragon then he can explain some of his powers and how he has a few stages before he grows completely such as his wings and being able to blow fire being the first with the second allowing him to have full control and being able to manipulate the fire like in avatar and that can fit into him further evolving his martial arts. Im not sure what the next stage can be but the final one can be him turning into a full blown dragon for a given amount of time at this point he would be able to take on all for one on equal footing or even surpassing him. 😅 i know this is a lot but just some food for thought if you end up seeing this
Membuka SPOILER Overall an amazing story to read and become immersed into, one second I'm on on chapter 1 and the next I'm at the end of the chapters. while the under bars are annoying for audio readers, it's not a huge problem. I definitely recommend this story as it has a lot of potential and I'd love to see more people give it a try.
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please update more chapters.....🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩
while im writing this review in the early stages of the novel, i will say the story is great. This is due to the author writing out and explaining the backstory of the mc and the setting
Author-san here everybody getting ready to get drunk if I don't get enough views or bad reviews. . . . . Just kidding guys, give me your honest review and help me better myself.
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First take out the harem, then we'll talk........................................................................................................................