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nice one. But I wonder, why did you finish the story? You can continue writing. But I love it.
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The idea is amazing, but the character and character interactions are garbage. Nice idea bad execution, quirk apprehension test he for some reason holds back.. when he can test his limits and understand how to grow.. he's meddling in things that don't concern him he's an attention seeking whore..
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to be honest i am very interested in this story because of the powers,yet the grammar and other little things threw me off,and make me can't focus on the story,i suggest u hire a good beta coz this shit is a gold covered dirt and needs a lot of refinement to shine
finally a story where the mc is not op and not teaching his skills to other people. i don't mind the occasional advice to others as long as it's from canon and he is just speeding up their discovery and not giving them special advices that they never would have thought in the canon.
good story though but not for me........................................................................................................................................
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Bad syntax, awkward and wrong punctuation, and even more awkward character interactions. Idea is pretty cool just not very well executed.
nice one. But I wonder, why did you finish the story? You can continue writing. But I love it.
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The idea is amazing, but the character and character interactions are garbage. Nice idea bad execution, quirk apprehension test he for some reason holds back.. when he can test his limits and understand how to grow.. he's meddling in things that don't concern him he's an attention seeking whore..
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to be honest i am very interested in this story because of the powers,yet the grammar and other little things threw me off,and make me can't focus on the story,i suggest u hire a good beta coz this shit is a gold covered dirt and needs a lot of refinement to shine
finally a story where the mc is not op and not teaching his skills to other people. i don't mind the occasional advice to others as long as it's from canon and he is just speeding up their discovery and not giving them special advices that they never would have thought in the canon.
good story though but not for me........................................................................................................................................
nice good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good 👍☺️👌👌 good 😊👍💪 the chapter 😊😊☺️☺️👍💪👍👍💪👍👍
Bad syntax, awkward and wrong punctuation, and even more awkward character interactions. Idea is pretty cool just not very well executed.