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The novel already reached to a good point❤️ but still it would be better if the dear author added the Yuri tag (and more Yuri plot) to the novel👌, because many fans are searching for a good Yuri storyline and this can help them to find a good material storyline.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Love this freaking book it is awesome but got one Issue please please please drop at least two pages at once 😭 i want read more then one page and u keeep leave me hangin. Drop something soon please
It's a greats story so far, I'm on chapter 6 so I don't really know what up to come on the future chapters when I get there. Gonna be a little surprised :) but I like it so keep up good work!
wow ,one of the best novel on webnovel so far...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Fantastic read that i kinda regret bing reading but the detailing In both the Battles and Smur is freaking great gove it a try for a good read! 👍✨
I was very respectful and careful in my assessment of your story. I had only gotten to either 18 or 20 some chapters in your story before I decided that it was not my cup of tea. the world background was very detailed and contained a lot of explanation which I enjoyed. as for the updating stability I cannot accurately give a rating as I have not personally received an update; for I have only started reading the story recently. your character design is very in-depth, although I did not really get to experience that much of the character I really enjoyed the story. for the story development I gave the highest rating possible for the length of time that I read your story. the writing quality leaves a little bit to be desired as I can easily tell that English is not your first language, or it is your first language and you're just having trouble like me in using grammar. either way it was very entertaining and I looked forward to more stories from you.
really like the story, I only wish Freya got to take Sally's virginity. Freya has almost no personality later in the series (I'm on 65) and I think something like that could've brought about an emotional change
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I used to be bored, found Madjic's books and now i can procrastinate with a smile and boner.😂🤣 the book is nice what i've read so far, i still preffer "Futanari System", and Iona from "Trap Online" best waifu 😌.
I think this could be counted as a side story of Futanari Sistem book. If the two protagonists encounterd each other it could be a good story and if Salvie became Chelsea wife it could be eaven better.
I don't normally go for domination one way or the other however I truly enjoy this novel the chapter length is great the characters are well made and as a story progresses more war about the world opens I truly enjoy this novel and look forward for more
I love this novel. but it's getting really low paced lately pace it up a little plz. Also the story update timing is too small so plz at least provide a chapter every two days.
Saddly I have to rate this novel low. There are jus 2 things that are wrong: 1st. Author should put yuri/girls love in tags as he gain readers that does not now about it, like me. Yuri is just not my cup of tea. 2nd. And more important. Autor has no idea what dominatrix means, probably not even bdsm is. Here I don't see any power exchange (maybe in case of 1 girl who is a masochist) only abuse. I am not sure if Autor did good research about this or even any. Not everything on the Internet is true. I've read this story till ch 60+ and what I found is brainwashing, abuse slave trading and training, more abuse and what rly pissed me of what torture... What is the most important in domination relationship is willingly giving someone power over him/herself. Here she just takes is for herself. So what I recomd doing if I were in Autor place: 1. Delete story (this is extreme so don't do it unless the story is beyond saving which is not true) 2. Change title as main character is not dominatrix but slave trainer probably with daddy issue looking how she treat males (abuse/sissification). 3 edit story after doing research about proper bdsm relationships not only about pain and humiliation. I would choose 3rd option as it would enrich your knowlage for your future works. So Autor Cheer up and start studying. You can't just write what you want without knowing what you write. Woow it was rly long.
One of the best novels I have ever read. I love the plot. The main character is so badass. Side characters are also very interesting. specially, kitty keep up the good work and plz don't abandon the novel
Well, boys and girls - here is what I think about this story. Worth reading! If you are into FemDom & BDSM and want to have fantasy and lore to the R-18 chapters then have a look here. But: if you have triggers concerning sissy boys and feminization - hands off! The character of FL is well and credibly drawn. With a few exceptions the description of the punishment scenes is very well done and in my opinion very realistic. Concerning the updates, the development and the background there is nothing to complain about. Only the writing quality weakens, as the author himself also judges. But I think that is absolutely ok. There are worse stories here.
The early chapters were really hard for me to read. I suggest the author to come back to it and fix the amount of typos that reduce the flow of read. The story starts to shine on the kinky side, and that is definitely the strongest point.
Finally the novel reach the expectation that I was waiting for.🥳 The chapters got longer, the writing quality got so much better and more importantly the storyline got more amusing😍, Ofcourse I was going to point out about the slow flow of story (about 40 chapters in one city) But I think this time pretend to see nothing.😎 Also congratulate on reaching {1M} for your work for the first time, madjic👏🥇
Well this story starts A bit light hearted with a brutal death seen, before a rather light hearted afterlife and rebirth. I feel yhat at the begining the MC shows proper impatiance and frustion and beiNg stuck as a baby
Okay so first off this is a combination story, so if you really want to understand everything going on you should also read the Futurani System that they made. Secondly it has very few mistakes (Like maybe one or two every 10 chapters) and it is really interesting doing a proper balance between **** and storytelling. The only thing I can possibly suggest is having two endings one for each story part (where both win and lose) That way people can still enjoy their choice of favorite.
One more character added to the reverse harem in an unpredictable way❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ It's gotten so exiting😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
Just one chapter a week?!😭😭😭 This is what happen's when the aouthor increased his work by starting another novel.😑 I saw this happen and warned aouthor to reduced his work's by droping one of three novel, but now he write's four novel and don't has any time for any of them.🧐😓
I am the exp of my sword. webnovel is my body, and exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless review. Unknown to death, nor known to life. Have withstood pain to create many reviews. Yet, those hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray...Unlimited Exp Works!. - [ ]
It would be great if the autour decide on update times. One time once a week and the other time four times a week. 😡😤😤😤😤😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘
I think it would be better if the writer, write more in each chapter, and write more about other characters than main character. The balance in story is important too. Continue the good work👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
First the story went slowly forward but now story developted pretty good and it show us more action. Good plot and an interesting world, make a woderful story that I recommended this to those who don't read this yet.👍
this is like the only dom fic thats really gets inro the nitty gritty stuff love it. [][][][]]]]][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][]
It's a greats story so far, I'm on chapter 6 so I don't really know what up to come on the future chapters when I get there. Gonna be a little surprised :) but I like it so keep up good work!
Started reading this story, and so far its really good. Even for the beginning! I'm all curious about what's going to happen next. Thank you for writing this, and also for your hard work! The main character of this novel/ story is amazing!
I love this story❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ Author, don't even think about abandoning this story or I will be mad. 👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿
The novel already reached to a good point❤️ but still it would be better if the dear author added the Yuri tag (and more Yuri plot) to the novel👌, because many fans are searching for a good Yuri storyline and this can help them to find a good material storyline.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Love this freaking book it is awesome but got one Issue please please please drop at least two pages at once 😭 i want read more then one page and u keeep leave me hangin. Drop something soon please
It's a greats story so far, I'm on chapter 6 so I don't really know what up to come on the future chapters when I get there. Gonna be a little surprised :) but I like it so keep up good work!
wow ,one of the best novel on webnovel so far...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Fantastic read that i kinda regret bing reading but the detailing In both the Battles and Smur is freaking great gove it a try for a good read! 👍✨
I was very respectful and careful in my assessment of your story. I had only gotten to either 18 or 20 some chapters in your story before I decided that it was not my cup of tea. the world background was very detailed and contained a lot of explanation which I enjoyed. as for the updating stability I cannot accurately give a rating as I have not personally received an update; for I have only started reading the story recently. your character design is very in-depth, although I did not really get to experience that much of the character I really enjoyed the story. for the story development I gave the highest rating possible for the length of time that I read your story. the writing quality leaves a little bit to be desired as I can easily tell that English is not your first language, or it is your first language and you're just having trouble like me in using grammar. either way it was very entertaining and I looked forward to more stories from you.
really like the story, I only wish Freya got to take Sally's virginity. Freya has almost no personality later in the series (I'm on 65) and I think something like that could've brought about an emotional change
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Membuka SPOILER I used to be bored, found Madjic's books and now i can procrastinate with a smile and boner.😂🤣 the book is nice what i've read so far, i still preffer "Futanari System", and Iona from "Trap Online" best waifu 😌.
I think this could be counted as a side story of Futanari Sistem book. If the two protagonists encounterd each other it could be a good story and if Salvie became Chelsea wife it could be eaven better.
I don't normally go for domination one way or the other however I truly enjoy this novel the chapter length is great the characters are well made and as a story progresses more war about the world opens I truly enjoy this novel and look forward for more
I love this novel. but it's getting really low paced lately pace it up a little plz. Also the story update timing is too small so plz at least provide a chapter every two days.
Saddly I have to rate this novel low. There are jus 2 things that are wrong: 1st. Author should put yuri/girls love in tags as he gain readers that does not now about it, like me. Yuri is just not my cup of tea. 2nd. And more important. Autor has no idea what dominatrix means, probably not even bdsm is. Here I don't see any power exchange (maybe in case of 1 girl who is a masochist) only abuse. I am not sure if Autor did good research about this or even any. Not everything on the Internet is true. I've read this story till ch 60+ and what I found is brainwashing, abuse slave trading and training, more abuse and what rly pissed me of what torture... What is the most important in domination relationship is willingly giving someone power over him/herself. Here she just takes is for herself. So what I recomd doing if I were in Autor place: 1. Delete story (this is extreme so don't do it unless the story is beyond saving which is not true) 2. Change title as main character is not dominatrix but slave trainer probably with daddy issue looking how she treat males (abuse/sissification). 3 edit story after doing research about proper bdsm relationships not only about pain and humiliation. I would choose 3rd option as it would enrich your knowlage for your future works. So Autor Cheer up and start studying. You can't just write what you want without knowing what you write. Woow it was rly long.
One of the best novels I have ever read. I love the plot. The main character is so badass. Side characters are also very interesting. specially, kitty keep up the good work and plz don't abandon the novel
Well, boys and girls - here is what I think about this story. Worth reading! If you are into FemDom & BDSM and want to have fantasy and lore to the R-18 chapters then have a look here. But: if you have triggers concerning sissy boys and feminization - hands off! The character of FL is well and credibly drawn. With a few exceptions the description of the punishment scenes is very well done and in my opinion very realistic. Concerning the updates, the development and the background there is nothing to complain about. Only the writing quality weakens, as the author himself also judges. But I think that is absolutely ok. There are worse stories here.
The early chapters were really hard for me to read. I suggest the author to come back to it and fix the amount of typos that reduce the flow of read. The story starts to shine on the kinky side, and that is definitely the strongest point.
Finally the novel reach the expectation that I was waiting for.🥳 The chapters got longer, the writing quality got so much better and more importantly the storyline got more amusing😍, Ofcourse I was going to point out about the slow flow of story (about 40 chapters in one city) But I think this time pretend to see nothing.😎 Also congratulate on reaching {1M} for your work for the first time, madjic👏🥇
Well this story starts A bit light hearted with a brutal death seen, before a rather light hearted afterlife and rebirth. I feel yhat at the begining the MC shows proper impatiance and frustion and beiNg stuck as a baby
Okay so first off this is a combination story, so if you really want to understand everything going on you should also read the Futurani System that they made. Secondly it has very few mistakes (Like maybe one or two every 10 chapters) and it is really interesting doing a proper balance between **** and storytelling. The only thing I can possibly suggest is having two endings one for each story part (where both win and lose) That way people can still enjoy their choice of favorite.
One more character added to the reverse harem in an unpredictable way❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ It's gotten so exiting😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
Just one chapter a week?!😭😭😭 This is what happen's when the aouthor increased his work by starting another novel.😑 I saw this happen and warned aouthor to reduced his work's by droping one of three novel, but now he write's four novel and don't has any time for any of them.🧐😓
I am the exp of my sword. webnovel is my body, and exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless review. Unknown to death, nor known to life. Have withstood pain to create many reviews. Yet, those hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray...Unlimited Exp Works!. - [ ]
It would be great if the autour decide on update times. One time once a week and the other time four times a week. 😡😤😤😤😤😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘
I think it would be better if the writer, write more in each chapter, and write more about other characters than main character. The balance in story is important too. Continue the good work👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
First the story went slowly forward but now story developted pretty good and it show us more action. Good plot and an interesting world, make a woderful story that I recommended this to those who don't read this yet.👍
this is like the only dom fic thats really gets inro the nitty gritty stuff love it. [][][][]]]]][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][][]
It's a greats story so far, I'm on chapter 6 so I don't really know what up to come on the future chapters when I get there. Gonna be a little surprised :) but I like it so keep up good work!
Started reading this story, and so far its really good. Even for the beginning! I'm all curious about what's going to happen next. Thank you for writing this, and also for your hard work! The main character of this novel/ story is amazing!
I love this story❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ Author, don't even think about abandoning this story or I will be mad. 👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿👿