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It’s really a good story. 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻 the only less point is the writing quality but it’s not a big deal. The background history, the character, the way the power of the main is draw is really good. I love it. 🎉🥰😘👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻💐
i like the story it different from original mc but also make story interesting the twist and turn are more interesting. i like read new chapter soon
Grammar needs a lot of work! The story is good wish he could improve or have someone correct it 😅 I really like you Mc making this review for the daily mission lol
Hes weaker than Tang san. hes always 10 rank lower than tang san. why? hes older than tang san and yet his cultivation is lower? he wasted 6 years for gods sake without advancing a single rank just so he doesn't surpass tang san. Mc is tangsan's support character
The story is pretty good though there are some problems with the grammer its pretty much improving every chapter....but the consistency of the chapters makes me think that you're dropping it ( pls don't drop this novel author since it would be a waste )
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I really enjoy the overall plot of the dolu dalu fic and enjoy how the author is diverging from the plot to fit in with the main characters plot, while I do see why people are complaining so much about the writing quality. I would say it is pretty good compared to the past when I read novels that were bad quality I would just plain stop reading it, but this novel has such a good plot that even if there were one or two mistakes in the grammar I would still say the novel is of great quality compared to a novel that would be written in one huge paragraph where grammar made no sense half the time,
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If you don´t have have time to edit or find a editor I would recommend the free version of Grammarly it would fix the worst grammar mistakes
Of all the era you choose why do you have to choose the same era where Tang san live the MC is bound to be overshadow by that guy other than that i have no problem at all cause i'm gonna stop reading it here.
Honestly I've tried to read this but the grammar is SO BAD. Like it hurts to read and I know that some books are like that in the beginning and from what I've heard from others this is one of those books that you have to power through to get to the good part but **** man it's to hard. I feel like I'm losing brain cells reading this. I liked where he was going with it I just need it to be edited before I can give it another try.
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At first Main character origin quite mysterious, some character as well in the story are mysterious as well as the enemy, so far the twist for plot of the story is really good can't wait for the next chapter to be post. God Bless and keep up the good work 😊
very good story easy to undestand 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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Great story and plot! Although the part where his girlfriend parts ways with him was sad, I shall always be with him! But now, all you need is an Editor! And if you are interested, I could help you with that for free, I don't really care about money, but I like reading with quality.
The story and concept of the story is overall good. As for the quality of writing is mediocre at best. Not everyone starts off great in the beginning, that is why we have fan fiction. With enough time and effort, even a mediocre writer could become a polished author like the original. I will update and change this review as the story progresses.
The story and concept is good. But the writing quality no less than mtl novel. The novel is more like putting prototype story , unedited from writing condition ( Capital letter, (.) (,) and etc. ), grammatical, and vocabulary. It's mess. It's get better in latter part but not that much. It's often require the reader to auto-correct the sentence by them self to understand what are they read. It was annoying to some extent. It's like reading mtl. So bear with it, but maybe the writing goes better. I hope.
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The story and concept is good. But the writing quality no less than mtl novel. The novel is more like putting prototype story , unedited from writing condition ( Capital letter, (.) (,) and etc. ), grammatical, and vocabulary. It's mess. It's get better in latter part but not that much. It's often require the reader to auto-correct the sentence by them self to understand what are they read. It was annoying to some extent. It's like reading mtl. So bear with it, but maybe the writing goes better. I hope.
I was completely honest with this review, I think the novel itself has potential, but the Mc has no personality and spelling hurts my eyes, I just arrived at chapter 5, I will continue reading and see if it improves with time, if so I will delete this review and publish a better one.
Its unreadable. The story seems passable but oh boy, let me tell you the grammar is completely horrendous like my God. The sentence structuring and missuage of words is mind boggling I just don't understand how someone can leave so many words out of a sentence and still think "oh, I'm sure they can understand when I speak like a caveman".
It is one of the good ones in dalu fics. Must read..............................................................................................
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English is not my first languange so I can tolarate grammar mistake and typos but this one is too much for me. Hope that this novel would do well and maybe you can improve your english or get a good editor but untill then i'm going to put this one aside.
The writing quality is a bit bad. The comcept is good. The character development is great. The character design is great. Please update this story. I like ittttt. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
It’s really a good story. 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻 the only less point is the writing quality but it’s not a big deal. The background history, the character, the way the power of the main is draw is really good. I love it. 🎉🥰😘👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻💐
i like the story it different from original mc but also make story interesting the twist and turn are more interesting. i like read new chapter soon
Grammar needs a lot of work! The story is good wish he could improve or have someone correct it 😅 I really like you Mc making this review for the daily mission lol
Hes weaker than Tang san. hes always 10 rank lower than tang san. why? hes older than tang san and yet his cultivation is lower? he wasted 6 years for gods sake without advancing a single rank just so he doesn't surpass tang san. Mc is tangsan's support character
The story is pretty good though there are some problems with the grammer its pretty much improving every chapter....but the consistency of the chapters makes me think that you're dropping it ( pls don't drop this novel author since it would be a waste )
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Membuka SPOILER I really enjoy the overall plot of the dolu dalu fic and enjoy how the author is diverging from the plot to fit in with the main characters plot, while I do see why people are complaining so much about the writing quality. I would say it is pretty good compared to the past when I read novels that were bad quality I would just plain stop reading it, but this novel has such a good plot that even if there were one or two mistakes in the grammar I would still say the novel is of great quality compared to a novel that would be written in one huge paragraph where grammar made no sense half the time,
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If you don´t have have time to edit or find a editor I would recommend the free version of Grammarly it would fix the worst grammar mistakes
Of all the era you choose why do you have to choose the same era where Tang san live the MC is bound to be overshadow by that guy other than that i have no problem at all cause i'm gonna stop reading it here.
Honestly I've tried to read this but the grammar is SO BAD. Like it hurts to read and I know that some books are like that in the beginning and from what I've heard from others this is one of those books that you have to power through to get to the good part but **** man it's to hard. I feel like I'm losing brain cells reading this. I liked where he was going with it I just need it to be edited before I can give it another try.
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At first Main character origin quite mysterious, some character as well in the story are mysterious as well as the enemy, so far the twist for plot of the story is really good can't wait for the next chapter to be post. God Bless and keep up the good work 😊
very good story easy to undestand 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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Great story and plot! Although the part where his girlfriend parts ways with him was sad, I shall always be with him! But now, all you need is an Editor! And if you are interested, I could help you with that for free, I don't really care about money, but I like reading with quality.
The story and concept of the story is overall good. As for the quality of writing is mediocre at best. Not everyone starts off great in the beginning, that is why we have fan fiction. With enough time and effort, even a mediocre writer could become a polished author like the original. I will update and change this review as the story progresses.
The story and concept is good. But the writing quality no less than mtl novel. The novel is more like putting prototype story , unedited from writing condition ( Capital letter, (.) (,) and etc. ), grammatical, and vocabulary. It's mess. It's get better in latter part but not that much. It's often require the reader to auto-correct the sentence by them self to understand what are they read. It was annoying to some extent. It's like reading mtl. So bear with it, but maybe the writing goes better. I hope.
Membuka SPOILER The story and concept is good. But the writing quality no less than mtl novel. The novel is more like putting prototype story , unedited from writing condition ( Capital letter, (.) (,) and etc. ), grammatical, and vocabulary. It's mess. It's get better in latter part but not that much. It's often require the reader to auto-correct the sentence by them self to understand what are they read. It was annoying to some extent. It's like reading mtl. So bear with it, but maybe the writing goes better. I hope.
I was completely honest with this review, I think the novel itself has potential, but the Mc has no personality and spelling hurts my eyes, I just arrived at chapter 5, I will continue reading and see if it improves with time, if so I will delete this review and publish a better one.
Its unreadable. The story seems passable but oh boy, let me tell you the grammar is completely horrendous like my God. The sentence structuring and missuage of words is mind boggling I just don't understand how someone can leave so many words out of a sentence and still think "oh, I'm sure they can understand when I speak like a caveman".
It is one of the good ones in dalu fics. Must read..............................................................................................
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Membuka SPOILER English is not my first languange so I can tolarate grammar mistake and typos but this one is too much for me. Hope that this novel would do well and maybe you can improve your english or get a good editor but untill then i'm going to put this one aside.
The writing quality is a bit bad. The comcept is good. The character development is great. The character design is great. Please update this story. I like ittttt. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]