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Author, don't feel down trodden your work isn't perfect but then again no book is perfect. Not everyone will like your story-telling but that doesn't mean you have to change your story to fit their exact desires. Create the story you like, obviously improve on some logistical points like timeline, history reference accuracy, mythology accuracy and grammar. I saw many comments disdaining the usage of hypnosis for kingdom building, personally it doesn't matter as long as it matches the MC's personality. It does seem a little rushed however. Damn this was a long comment, keep up the good work!
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VIVA ROMA!!!!!!!!----!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!++!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!×××!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Really good but it hasn’t updated in along time. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - — - - - -
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es una buena novela, el protagonista es bastante inteligente y conspirador que usa estrategias y tramas mas que fuerza también tiene los elementos de la construcción de ríenos junto con peleas entre Dioses pero sin cultivo ni ciencia ficción además que cuenta con mucha historia que es muy precisa y entretenida
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The story started nice but it went down the drain. 1.I could deal with the grammar but what pissed me off is the fact that the mc feel in love with his fiance the first time he met her and the fact that she has been raped and abused her whole life which makes her pregnant but mc is still cool with that shit. How can u love a raped and pregnant girl u met for the first time and be cool with it. I really loved the beginning but reading this novel may give me a heart attack so Imma drop this.✌
Gosto muito da história espero que continue o jeito que você consegue desenvolver os personagens e muito bom , espero que haja mais capítulos até lá vou reler todos os outros mesmo
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At the age of five, the main character already communicates with the emperor like a friend, has a wife for ten years who was raped. The main character immediately fell in love with her and paved her. The author has a clear desire for NTR. Disgusting heroes, weak plot, no sense of rhythm 0.1 / 10
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This Book is just digusting ! I don't have any other words to discribe it . The idea is intriguing and interessting but the content disgusts me! This Book is on Hiatus for 4 months now and I hope it stays that way.
I- I cannot describe....the book it's not bad so far I like the world building and god lore introduced however, the geography confuses me for the story was supposed go take place in Abya yala or America to rebuild the roman society yet, Germanic slaves I amussed it would be pre- explorers and with no contact with Europe however, it seemed I was mistaken, futhermore, the writing is similar to a badly machine translated book lacking emotion
Spoiler alert MC got NTR'd in the 11th chapter. If that is what you want then continue. I'm only willing to continue to read because im not the type of person to drop something on just measly few chapters. But that NTR really hit me hard.
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Interesting plot ruined by garbage grammar, MR. and Mrs in a time where that wasnt used at all. Separating conversations in different lines makes things difficult to read or enjoy. Then out of nowhere character just forgets his mannerisms and attitudes of five years and start acting like he was in the old life which is crap, Then out of nothing, just thin air, he finds out he has hipnotic powers activated by eye contact, which he never tried before or found by mistake. And suddenly the story turned into obey me at all times kind of garbage. I do not recommend story. Esta novela es una mierda. El autor sigue separando las conversaciones lo que hace leer esta basura mas dificil y me quita las ganas de continuar. El autor sigue utilizando MR y MRs como si eso fuera utilizado en los tiempos romanos. Y para culminar esta diarrea de novela, el autor decidio de la nada que el personaje tiene un poder de hipnosis cuando mira a la gente en sus ojos. Un poder que nunca sabia que tenia ni que habia practicado ni que por error habia activado. En resumen esto es una churrada de novela por un autor novato sin sentido de comun ni un poco de buscar informacion para ver como eran las cosas en esos tiempos. No leas.
I 100% loved the story until one of the chapters said that Mc fiancé was raped by the nobleman, and I fu*king hate ntr. This was an automatic drop for me
A great concept gone wrong. Everything happens and ends too fast, the story isn't even a bit well developed. The writing is absolute garbage, grammar was brutally murdered in the making of this novel.
quick question author is taneri (the minister of enviroment) a girl or a boy. I it is really confusing ..................................... anyway awesome book but horrible grammer but not horrible enough to make me drop it
People who like this must have be braindead. I can't fathom how people can like this **** ..........................................****tttttttt
there will always be plot armor in stories but the bad start that introduced the plot armor and then added more plot armor right away just made it worst let start with the make me a god wish (but what powers does that bring) is this fantasy or historical fiction, then we have knowledge of all things wish ( that is so vague and overpowered for a god that supposedly lost) what year did he die is important information i might of missed it not sure does he literally know everything?? hypnotism?! that is horrible plot armor for these type of novels you might as well just skipped to hes 12 if you want to deal with personality of maturity changes. all of this is my opinion and i can see you put alot of effort into the story by the number of chapters written and i want to tough it out till atleast chapter 20 but the first 5 chapters have just turned me off and the im a god thing partnered with the hypnotism is too much.
There should be a #Harlem and #incest. I guess some people will like it, but I feel there is so much pointless pornographic chapters. Understand the author is growing. However in some ways the earlier chapters were better crafted I honestly enjoy the story concept and character building. But I got to say there is a lot of POV problems, not sure if it’s meant to be a technic but, the switching of a female character between him and her is confusing. Then there are these sentences structure and strange word choice. At times I felt like I was reading a raw google translation. For me It has started to drag. I also wonder if the author will be able to remember all these character and build them. The author keeps creating what appears to be important character but stops using them, or appears sporadically. I still enjoy the story and will support but... I have less expectations now.
Ignoring grammar errors It was great the first few chapters but once the author decided to add more fantasy elements it quickly fell apart. The fantasy elements are the divine mythic Fantasy stuff and divine powers. Maybe some people are fine with it but I genuinely thought it was an ordinary guy who time traveled back in to Ancient Rome with nothing more than modern knowledge to help him, but fortunately it turned out the MC has brainwashing powers and starts introducing radically wild ideas like normal like: oh yes there’s this virus things responsible for sickness so put alcohol to disinfect.... so on Can’t he just say : “ here’s a bottle of holy water rub it on wounds to receive the gods blessings to heal your wounds or something” Can the MC be more subtle when introducing new stuff. There’s also the music stuff as I’m quite dubious about ancient Roman’s musical taste with modern music. There are other dubious parts and larger elephants in the room which I won’t state as I’m people can read the comments section.
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It starts off with ok grammer and a ok story but then it goes down hill fast. The mc is reincarnated but he acts childish, any problem he faces he hypnotizes people. The grammer gets so bad i don't know what is going on in certain parts of the story. Also it uses greek terminology which is find but its never explained what the words mean, so its gibberish mixed in with ****ty grammer. 😠
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I really wish I could enjoy this story, but no the story is incredibly rushed and have no feeling to it, all characters are paper cutouts that have even less peronality than a Wuxia martial arts novel Combine that with 0 proof reading and the murder of the English language, it’s just a recipe for disappointment
Guys I'm the author leaving a message, I'm just a guy trying to bring all of you a work of quality but I'm alone, if you want to help you can join in the discord server the link are in the description of the novel, I will get grammatically premium for correct the mess of the first chapters and you can have a better reading, if you want to help or comments something you can leave a message in discord, I'm and author who likes to read the readers critics and recommendation. Anyway ty for all you who keeps reading the novel, I will correct the mess of the first 50 chapters, just givme time, remember the link in discord are in description, all the news or notice you can read there ;)
Author, don't feel down trodden your work isn't perfect but then again no book is perfect. Not everyone will like your story-telling but that doesn't mean you have to change your story to fit their exact desires. Create the story you like, obviously improve on some logistical points like timeline, history reference accuracy, mythology accuracy and grammar. I saw many comments disdaining the usage of hypnosis for kingdom building, personally it doesn't matter as long as it matches the MC's personality. It does seem a little rushed however. Damn this was a long comment, keep up the good work!
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VIVA ROMA!!!!!!!!----!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!++!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!×××!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Really good but it hasn’t updated in along time. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - — - - - -
Déception [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
es una buena novela, el protagonista es bastante inteligente y conspirador que usa estrategias y tramas mas que fuerza también tiene los elementos de la construcción de ríenos junto con peleas entre Dioses pero sin cultivo ni ciencia ficción además que cuenta con mucha historia que es muy precisa y entretenida
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email：luffyringdom@gmail.com
The story started nice but it went down the drain. 1.I could deal with the grammar but what pissed me off is the fact that the mc feel in love with his fiance the first time he met her and the fact that she has been raped and abused her whole life which makes her pregnant but mc is still cool with that shit. How can u love a raped and pregnant girl u met for the first time and be cool with it. I really loved the beginning but reading this novel may give me a heart attack so Imma drop this.✌
Gosto muito da história espero que continue o jeito que você consegue desenvolver os personagens e muito bom , espero que haja mais capítulos até lá vou reler todos os outros mesmo
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact zekiringdom@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
At the age of five, the main character already communicates with the emperor like a friend, has a wife for ten years who was raped. The main character immediately fell in love with her and paved her. The author has a clear desire for NTR. Disgusting heroes, weak plot, no sense of rhythm 0.1 / 10
I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
This Book is just digusting ! I don't have any other words to discribe it . The idea is intriguing and interessting but the content disgusts me! This Book is on Hiatus for 4 months now and I hope it stays that way.
I- I cannot describe....the book it's not bad so far I like the world building and god lore introduced however, the geography confuses me for the story was supposed go take place in Abya yala or America to rebuild the roman society yet, Germanic slaves I amussed it would be pre- explorers and with no contact with Europe however, it seemed I was mistaken, futhermore, the writing is similar to a badly machine translated book lacking emotion
Spoiler alert MC got NTR'd in the 11th chapter. If that is what you want then continue. I'm only willing to continue to read because im not the type of person to drop something on just measly few chapters. But that NTR really hit me hard.
Membuka SPOILER Interesting plot ruined by garbage grammar, MR. and Mrs in a time where that wasnt used at all. Separating conversations in different lines makes things difficult to read or enjoy. Then out of nowhere character just forgets his mannerisms and attitudes of five years and start acting like he was in the old life which is crap, Then out of nothing, just thin air, he finds out he has hipnotic powers activated by eye contact, which he never tried before or found by mistake. And suddenly the story turned into obey me at all times kind of garbage. I do not recommend story. Esta novela es una mierda. El autor sigue separando las conversaciones lo que hace leer esta basura mas dificil y me quita las ganas de continuar. El autor sigue utilizando MR y MRs como si eso fuera utilizado en los tiempos romanos. Y para culminar esta diarrea de novela, el autor decidio de la nada que el personaje tiene un poder de hipnosis cuando mira a la gente en sus ojos. Un poder que nunca sabia que tenia ni que habia practicado ni que por error habia activado. En resumen esto es una churrada de novela por un autor novato sin sentido de comun ni un poco de buscar informacion para ver como eran las cosas en esos tiempos. No leas.
I 100% loved the story until one of the chapters said that Mc fiancé was raped by the nobleman, and I fu*king hate ntr. This was an automatic drop for me
A great concept gone wrong. Everything happens and ends too fast, the story isn't even a bit well developed. The writing is absolute garbage, grammar was brutally murdered in the making of this novel.
quick question author is taneri (the minister of enviroment) a girl or a boy. I it is really confusing ..................................... anyway awesome book but horrible grammer but not horrible enough to make me drop it
People who like this must have be braindead. I can't fathom how people can like this **** ..........................................****tttttttt
there will always be plot armor in stories but the bad start that introduced the plot armor and then added more plot armor right away just made it worst let start with the make me a god wish (but what powers does that bring) is this fantasy or historical fiction, then we have knowledge of all things wish ( that is so vague and overpowered for a god that supposedly lost) what year did he die is important information i might of missed it not sure does he literally know everything?? hypnotism?! that is horrible plot armor for these type of novels you might as well just skipped to hes 12 if you want to deal with personality of maturity changes. all of this is my opinion and i can see you put alot of effort into the story by the number of chapters written and i want to tough it out till atleast chapter 20 but the first 5 chapters have just turned me off and the im a god thing partnered with the hypnotism is too much.
There should be a #Harlem and #incest. I guess some people will like it, but I feel there is so much pointless pornographic chapters. Understand the author is growing. However in some ways the earlier chapters were better crafted I honestly enjoy the story concept and character building. But I got to say there is a lot of POV problems, not sure if it’s meant to be a technic but, the switching of a female character between him and her is confusing. Then there are these sentences structure and strange word choice. At times I felt like I was reading a raw google translation. For me It has started to drag. I also wonder if the author will be able to remember all these character and build them. The author keeps creating what appears to be important character but stops using them, or appears sporadically. I still enjoy the story and will support but... I have less expectations now.
Ignoring grammar errors It was great the first few chapters but once the author decided to add more fantasy elements it quickly fell apart. The fantasy elements are the divine mythic Fantasy stuff and divine powers. Maybe some people are fine with it but I genuinely thought it was an ordinary guy who time traveled back in to Ancient Rome with nothing more than modern knowledge to help him, but fortunately it turned out the MC has brainwashing powers and starts introducing radically wild ideas like normal like: oh yes there’s this virus things responsible for sickness so put alcohol to disinfect.... so on Can’t he just say : “ here’s a bottle of holy water rub it on wounds to receive the gods blessings to heal your wounds or something” Can the MC be more subtle when introducing new stuff. There’s also the music stuff as I’m quite dubious about ancient Roman’s musical taste with modern music. There are other dubious parts and larger elephants in the room which I won’t state as I’m people can read the comments section.
Membuka SPOILER It starts off with ok grammer and a ok story but then it goes down hill fast. The mc is reincarnated but he acts childish, any problem he faces he hypnotizes people. The grammer gets so bad i don't know what is going on in certain parts of the story. Also it uses greek terminology which is find but its never explained what the words mean, so its gibberish mixed in with ****ty grammer. 😠
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I really wish I could enjoy this story, but no the story is incredibly rushed and have no feeling to it, all characters are paper cutouts that have even less peronality than a Wuxia martial arts novel Combine that with 0 proof reading and the murder of the English language, it’s just a recipe for disappointment
Guys I'm the author leaving a message, I'm just a guy trying to bring all of you a work of quality but I'm alone, if you want to help you can join in the discord server the link are in the description of the novel, I will get grammatically premium for correct the mess of the first chapters and you can have a better reading, if you want to help or comments something you can leave a message in discord, I'm and author who likes to read the readers critics and recommendation. Anyway ty for all you who keeps reading the novel, I will correct the mess of the first 50 chapters, just givme time, remember the link in discord are in description, all the news or notice you can read there ;)