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Honestly it's a pretty decent ff but only problem is you are making a 8 years old too op. ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Honestly the book isnโt that bad, say for some minor grammar mistakes. I enjoy the cinical naruto, the only thing that gets a little annoying is his constant talks of leaving the village. While not as frequent as sasugay talking about revenge, he still repeats it often enough that it gets irritating. Otherwise its a good book and I canโt wait for it to update.
Sangat baik, hanya MC naruto harusnya tidak akan pernah seperti itu,....... karena sepintar pintarnya naruto akan lebih mementingkan perasaan daripada logika,...... itulah isrimewanya Prontagonis Naruto
not going to resume update story ? [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
This is the perfect โfanfictionโ I have ever read and it is unlikely that i will ever find any close to this. If the authour is reading this I just want to say thank you for the enjoyable read(even though i wish you hadnt dropped it) and I hope you are as happy as you have made me and your other readers -Thanks William
I enjoyed this quite a bit. hope the author will return to it. it's basically what Naruto would be like if he were smart alongside getting training from his gamer abilities to make him OP. also approve of the love choice.
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Itโs pretty good. Itโs awesome in some ways..... like seeing (err reading) Naruto do say or think things he wouldnโt ever have done in the original story line. I like that the author here made how skewed the original world was and thatโs fine but Iโm a bit annoyed by how disconnected it is to me. And, in a way I feel like the MC is really the Gamer in a Naruto suit BUT I mean it is supposed to be โfusionโ after all. That said, I kinda seen a lot of this in the Gamer but didnโt care for it there and here either. I mean I get that itโs like a game and you try to get benefits like skills etc but I mean REALLY he met his dead mom and dad and he simply exploited them while callously gave him gifts then he does 360 turnaround?! He supposed to be a lot more the wisher and live more the way he wants to live yet he listens to a strange disembodied voice? I mean itโs way more then in the Gamer where there itโs like a computerized system instead of you know an obviously fully sentient being thatโs not you. Itโs just that itโs hard to get that nostalgic feeling when the character is so so different... that said I like the idea of seeing this Naruto take the darker paths he almost did yet I get that the author here wants to make a unique path that the MC takes an thatโs cool but itโs just.... kinda hollow feeling and ends up being a kinda parody which I actually enjoyed a lot. Still at other times it felt dull... like I wasnโt in any real anticipation because itโs trying to be one thing then another yet not really entirely getting both and itโs just him talking to a voice and doing everything unfeelingly and selfishly then taking a 180 occasionally. Still the concept is interesting and well itโs okay overall. In the end it has potential and doesnโt have to super serious, in all it is the authorโs dream and is awesome for sharing it.
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Dont really know what to even say.. Your writing is the kind that I can read for hours and not realise the time that has passed by. Though it is a shame that there isnt anymore out right now, but I am excited for when you decide to continue.
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Well written to be honest. Very well written. I loved everything about this story. I do hope to read more to come. It world be a Shane to let such a masterpiece disappear
Amazing!! Love the different version of naruto. Arthur where you at? Come back to us!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Character count ......
Not bad....โฆ........โฆ..................................โฆ................โฆ,,,,................................................................
Membuka SPOILER
๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธ๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค
please dont drop..........best story of naruto....please........update.....please i have been waiting like two months...................................
This is the best Naruto friction I have ever read But it's too bad that the writer are not releasing new chapter I really hope the writer will bring something interesting in the near future
This is by far the best naruto fan fiction Iโve ever read. If youโre unsure still check it out and you wonโt be disappointed. I feel like itโs a very realistic approach to how naruto should act and how he should have viewed the village in my opinion. Great work author and I hope you can continue this story soon ๐๐ฝ
Last update 1 month ago so still hope it will get updated ( as I have seen people update a year or 2 after ) Really good fanfic ( one of the best naruto fanfic I have read ) Although he is too against the village ( it's okay as it's logical and also most fanfics tend to do this ) And lastly awesome system ( one of the kind ) ~ Really enjoyed it... ( hope it's not dropped )
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I love the story.--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Amazing..the best fan-fic that i've read until now Evrything is perfect, 100 times beter that the canon If you are a naruto fan you need to read this .
Dude mix Dante style and forward the time to which he gets out and we get another time line where he goes out of the village better yet world like dxd or danmachi or something but please no harem its good story drop with 4 girls or something
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Honestly it's a pretty decent ff but only problem is you are making a 8 years old too op. ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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ะฏ ะฟัะพัั ะฟัะพัะตะฝะธั ะทะฐ ะฟัะตะดัะดััะธะน ะพัะทัะฒ ัะฐะฝัะธะบ ะดะตะนััะฒะธัะตะปัะฝะพ ั ะพัะพัะธะน๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
ะะผะตััะพ ัะพะณะพ ััะพะฑั ะถะธัั ะฝะพัะผะฐะปัะฝะพ ะพะฝ ัะตัะธะป ััะฐัั ัะตะฒะพะปััะธะพะฝะตัะพะผ ััะพ ะฟัะตะฒัะฐัะธะปะพ ัะฐะฝัะธะบ ะฒ ะผััะพั๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ๐คฎ
Honestly the book isnโt that bad, say for some minor grammar mistakes. I enjoy the cinical naruto, the only thing that gets a little annoying is his constant talks of leaving the village. While not as frequent as sasugay talking about revenge, he still repeats it often enough that it gets irritating. Otherwise its a good book and I canโt wait for it to update.
Sangat baik, hanya MC naruto harusnya tidak akan pernah seperti itu,....... karena sepintar pintarnya naruto akan lebih mementingkan perasaan daripada logika,...... itulah isrimewanya Prontagonis Naruto
not going to resume update story ? [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
This is the perfect โfanfictionโ I have ever read and it is unlikely that i will ever find any close to this. If the authour is reading this I just want to say thank you for the enjoyable read(even though i wish you hadnt dropped it) and I hope you are as happy as you have made me and your other readers -Thanks William
I enjoyed this quite a bit. hope the author will return to it. it's basically what Naruto would be like if he were smart alongside getting training from his gamer abilities to make him OP. also approve of the love choice.
ExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExp
I just people to know how good this novel is ZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzZzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
Dvrvrcbh gcdykfxufxbfgjzj gauchos khfiiydcyeyodtidutd txjgxgk uguxkbclhvphcohcit igclbfoycohvoyvitcyigp oyclncoycogvpuvpjvoncoh oh our gfj vpjgpugyofjlvpy
Itโs pretty good. Itโs awesome in some ways..... like seeing (err reading) Naruto do say or think things he wouldnโt ever have done in the original story line. I like that the author here made how skewed the original world was and thatโs fine but Iโm a bit annoyed by how disconnected it is to me. And, in a way I feel like the MC is really the Gamer in a Naruto suit BUT I mean it is supposed to be โfusionโ after all. That said, I kinda seen a lot of this in the Gamer but didnโt care for it there and here either. I mean I get that itโs like a game and you try to get benefits like skills etc but I mean REALLY he met his dead mom and dad and he simply exploited them while callously gave him gifts then he does 360 turnaround?! He supposed to be a lot more the wisher and live more the way he wants to live yet he listens to a strange disembodied voice? I mean itโs way more then in the Gamer where there itโs like a computerized system instead of you know an obviously fully sentient being thatโs not you. Itโs just that itโs hard to get that nostalgic feeling when the character is so so different... that said I like the idea of seeing this Naruto take the darker paths he almost did yet I get that the author here wants to make a unique path that the MC takes an thatโs cool but itโs just.... kinda hollow feeling and ends up being a kinda parody which I actually enjoyed a lot. Still at other times it felt dull... like I wasnโt in any real anticipation because itโs trying to be one thing then another yet not really entirely getting both and itโs just him talking to a voice and doing everything unfeelingly and selfishly then taking a 180 occasionally. Still the concept is interesting and well itโs okay overall. In the end it has potential and doesnโt have to super serious, in all it is the authorโs dream and is awesome for sharing it.
Membuka SPOILER Dont really know what to even say.. Your writing is the kind that I can read for hours and not realise the time that has passed by. Though it is a shame that there isnt anymore out right now, but I am excited for when you decide to continue.
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Well written to be honest. Very well written. I loved everything about this story. I do hope to read more to come. It world be a Shane to let such a masterpiece disappear
Amazing!! Love the different version of naruto. Arthur where you at? Come back to us!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Character count ......
Not bad....โฆ........โฆ..................................โฆ................โฆ,,,,................................................................
Membuka SPOILER ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธโ๏ธ๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค
please dont drop..........best story of naruto....please........update.....please i have been waiting like two months...................................
This is the best Naruto friction I have ever read But it's too bad that the writer are not releasing new chapter I really hope the writer will bring something interesting in the near future
This is by far the best naruto fan fiction Iโve ever read. If youโre unsure still check it out and you wonโt be disappointed. I feel like itโs a very realistic approach to how naruto should act and how he should have viewed the village in my opinion. Great work author and I hope you can continue this story soon ๐๐ฝ
Last update 1 month ago so still hope it will get updated ( as I have seen people update a year or 2 after ) Really good fanfic ( one of the best naruto fanfic I have read ) Although he is too against the village ( it's okay as it's logical and also most fanfics tend to do this ) And lastly awesome system ( one of the kind ) ~ Really enjoyed it... ( hope it's not dropped )
I like it I like it I like it I like it I like I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it I like it
I love the story.--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Amazing..the best fan-fic that i've read until now Evrything is perfect, 100 times beter that the canon If you are a naruto fan you need to read this .
Dude mix Dante style and forward the time to which he gets out and we get another time line where he goes out of the village better yet world like dxd or danmachi or something but please no harem its good story drop with 4 girls or something
