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Otenkatsu

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Penulis: GinisGod

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Tranque and Zwyah are 16 year old brothers in the year ????? and they will do whatever they can in this colorful world to stop Tantekuno from corrupting the world.
Tranque is a swordsman with a long black ponytail a shirt, a trench coat, pants, ans shoes in all black

Zwyah has short, spiky hair and weilds a crossbow. He wears a black vest and a brown overcoat

Sorentaku wears red Dragon armor and wields a 3 pointed spear. She has long yellow hair

These main three will do whatever they can to help the world and eternally bring it to peace!

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LV 4

Flappywaffles

Ok ok ...."Rock hard fist" ??? -.- is it possible to hyperventilate in a fast manner? isn't that a bit redundant? ANYWAYS unique story but... I can't get over how quirky the characters are XD "That's a knee slapper" who says this?! Your story is actually very funny. It's kinda hard to take it seriously but its quite carefree and full of humor... writing quality isn't the best..3 stars..story development is a bit fast...4 stars..the characters are a bit thin in the personality department but characters interactions are funny XD...4 stars... I have absolutely no idea about the world background...3 stars... I still can't get over how Lucifer just pops up in the beginning and gives MC power XD..very funny novel with nice action...hahaha

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LV 1

yeeter2

this is me giving myself my own honest review about my novel (yes i am Oofooferyeah im currently in school) I think this novel lacks good world backround and character design/development and I belive i could do much better than what i currently have if i didnt try to rush all the time

5yr

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LV 3

GinisGod

Great job yeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeyeeyyeyeyeejdbsiiwsisidhsosidhsisosjjaaojsjsjajaiaiasususushdheueufjcbfjfifdfbfhxyzhdjdbgxbsizhsjahsididdkkdiddjjxdnkdskkshdidksvussbiaoajeoabskdisgshehehsueyshsgdbdhdhdnsjaodjx

5yr

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LV 10

GreasyBeer

Hey, the novel might have some shortcomings but I can feel the enthusiasm of the author. There aren't any issues that can't be solved with hard work in it anyway. Keep it up Mr./Mrs. Author !

5yr

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LV 5

MadReader

You need to work on your writing quality, world background, and character design. The story starts so suddenly you can understand very little, though that might add charisma later to it.... But it makes understanding the story very difficult. Stability of updating though... It's very good till now.

5yr

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LV 4

90751052

Insteresting start, but your grammar needs some work. I recommend spacing your paragraphs and sentences more and running your chapters through spell check on word or any software. Make sure to add a synopsis and cover when you have time. But as a new author, you're doing fine. Keep it up! >3</

5yr

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LV 11

SouthToiletWizard

The world feels very flat, and characters aren't well described or feel fleshed out. You also suffer from grammar and flow issues. I think you have decent bones for a story but your chapters are very short at least the ones that I have read up until chapter 5. Silver Linings: Fighting brothers are usually popular. Your zaniness will help see you through action scenes. The action scenes were well executed.

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