Webnovel Author: MIMI24 - Novel Collection

Thanks for the critics. In the first few chapters, I wanted to focus on the FL's relationship with her parent. She had no perfect family and struggled to prove herself to her mother. She had high self-esteem, so when she saw that she was being ignored and the whole focus was on Aurora, she left as she wouldn't stay in a place where no one wanted her. Besides, she was adamant about following etiquette and rules and thus didn't argue in the party but they had a discussion later on.

Thank you for the nice review. She will change as the story continues.

Thank you for the nice review

The writing is good. It is just the beginning but the premise is good and has suspense. Cleo's backstory needs to be stronger. Waiting for the work to update more. All the bast.

The story was a fun read. Although it had only a few chapters, the premise is there so there must be many exciting things to read. The characters were nicely crafted.

The writing is good and the chapters are long!!!!!!! (I hope I can do that too.) The characters are nicely crafted and their images are cute too. Nice work. Just the first chapters were too packed with information that made it hard to understand the whole system.

The writing is good and smooth. The story is a bit confusing. The second and third prologues are long and somehow add to my confusion. But when the story begins, things become clearer. The world background needs to be more explained. It is a multi-realm background and should be taken one by one to be understandable for readers. At first, many characters do many things in many places. Try to focus on the MC from the beginning and let her discover the realms by herself. The first prologue is a good start, but if the first chapter began with Luna, maybe it would be simpler and easier because I really had a hard time tracking the story. All the best.