Not sure if this says something about me, but I couldn't help but laugh a few times despite the bullying that is happening... Oh well, it's a good story, all I would say is in Chapter 1 probably shorten the worldbuilding a tiny bit so we get into the story quickly.
Nice and polished grammar and overall structure. Update rate is good as well, and I am a sucker for system novels so I would definitely recommend to you all :P
Enjoyed reading through the book. For my taste the paragraphs can sometimes be a bit on the long end, however nonetheless it's a very entertaining read. Romance again isn't my cup of tea however I can see the appeal of the story! Good luck!
For somebody who doesn't have English as a first language this is impressive. There aren't too many errors or at least I didn't make many out. Would recommend you write up a few more chapters and then release them daily to get your viewer numbers up! Good luck!
There definitely is a lack of updates to be seen. I would also say work on less rumbustious descriptions, they are sometimes a bit much to read. Overall though, good beginning to a story and I hope you continue writing and get into a consistent groove of it. :P
Spelling error, Reflection*
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The Sequinned Potential [VOLUME 1] - The Green Crystal of Meyercliffe
Fantasy · Mahasweta_16
Hello everyone, author here. I have returned to Webnovel after almost a whole year. It has been a laborious time at my university, however I am ready to create something new for you all to enjoy! Hope you've been doing well during this godforsaken pandemic :P
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original The Halfling Demon Mage
He is a demon living in a human world. Vice had always looked different. Cursed as a twisted halfling, his appearance makes the townsfolk both terrified and hateful. He spends his days struggling to coexist with the town and blaming himself for his human mother’s hardships. But when his burden becomes too much and he attempts to end it all, a flashing light blinds him. A meteor rains down, bringing with it mysterious voice that echoes in his mind. It calls itself Favian, and claims to come from a faraway place called Earth… Paired with this strange voice and tasked with a destiny beyond his wildest imagination, Vice must grapple with his identity while carving out a place for himself in this world filled with magic– and that’s not easy to do as a 6-foot purple demon… Packed with thrilling action, gritty detail, and plenty of magic, you’ll love The Mage of Chaos. Embodying classic cultivation adventure with LitRPG elements, this fantasy epic is one you won’t want to miss. Grab your copy now! https://www.patreon.com/AuraOfMagic?fan_landing=true27 Chs 15 Collections
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Dusk and Dawn
Instead of learning powerful offensive magic such as the fireball or tornado, Dusk instead decided to devote his time to studying support spells. Why? Well, because he wanted to, of course. And maybe because he's just too lazy to learn offensive magic. It is obviously known that learning spells like barrier, haste and torchlight consume much less time.1 Chs 4 Collections
I have no clue how the author is juggling through so many different books, but kudos to you. You're able to create convincing characters in this one and I look forward to more!