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Vempire Lust

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Jisso's life changes when she inherits a mysterious villa and discovers three handsome vampire brothers—Subaru, Rai, and Kanata—who share a deep connection to her past. As she unlocks hidden powers within herself, she has to face the dark forces threatening her destiny—all with the brothers by her side, while navigating the growing tension and desire between them.

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JJ_Prakoso

Here is my honest thought regarding this book. Writing Quality: For writing quality, yeah there is some room for improvement. One of it is the dialogue writing. I know its the author writing style, but for me its better to be like this format "Okay," person a said rather than person a: "Okay" to make it more smooth for the readera too. World Building: The world building for me so far is alright with the author try to set up the mystery of the villa. I also like the author introduve bunch of how characters, I suggest it to tone down the informafion bit like maybe givinh a little bit of foreshadowing to make it smoother. Characters: Jinsoo is an alright protagonist so far especially with her try to discover moee about mansion she stay. Other side characters are quite fun too. Overall, its an okay novel for me. Just needed some improvement to make it smoother. Thanm you

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LouLou2
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Love the character names and the concept of this novel so far. You can't go wrong with a sexy vampire story, keep it up author :D I would just suggest to work on formatting the dialogue differently and making the chapters a little longer <3 x

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TheLazyDreamer

Story is too fast in the beginning. But since it's a vampire series and I believe you will go harem route later, you can improve your writing style . It's my personal advice that you should edit your earliest chapter again. The story has potential and I think you're going for a short story based on your pace, it will turn out a good short story if try harder.

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THE_LIGHTER_166

lol, though still reading, just finished the third chapter but it's cool. .. worth enjoying .

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PnStar_lighter

Vampire -checked Weaktostrong -checked Am I enjoying the novel-yes Will I recommend it -double yes!!! [img=Loving it]

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Beyond_the_Horizon

keep up the good work man! You were doing great!

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Amiba
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A fast paced story with interesting twists and turns. I like Jisso and I hope for her best, that her brothers have good intentions [img=More pls]

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Crimson_mist_999

The book is shaping up well, but the chapters are too short, like way too short.

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OpenEnd

Although I'd like to see longer chapters, the story is definitely one to follow. The present style is a different take as well. Again, I'd just like to see more descriptive language and longer chapters. Nonetheless, this story gets a 👍.

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