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To Be The Devil's Daughter: The Beginning

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Auteur: yukides_

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When Roxy is accidentally summoned by a group of Men in New York amidst a tragedy they couldn't avoid. She smirked as soon as she realized what realm she had come back to. Humanity had joined forces to defeat a common enemy: The Shifters. And to that, the system of Shifter Regime was established, back in the year after The Cold War.

"So what's your story, girl? Why should we take you as a scout?"

"Many people call me many names. Some call me the Daughter of Hell, and some call me The Cursed Offspring of Lucifer, the Fallen Angel. Most of the times, I go by the name...Roxy. Humans here call me Roxy Malford, but don't know how to respect me." She introduced herself but even this human had laughed at her.

"You're hired. Welcome to the Regime, Roxy Malford. Here we defeat evil...with evil. My secretary will direct you to your designation, starting from now." Oh, the smirk on her face.

They say, there's Good in every Bad thing and there is Bad in every Good thing.

Roxy is set to test her limits by the powers she possesses as the fate of the darkness depends on her.

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    Shink_a
    LV 13 Badge

    It's a nice story. it isn't hard to warm up to the characters, and the author did a good job in making them feel alive. Although author needs more editing to make the reading experience feel smoother. P.S. Still waiting for more chapters.

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    2yr
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    Rita_Chioma_9038

    This is an interesting story and I love it especially that it has to do with the 'fate of darkness' Thumbs up author, keep up the good work.

    2yr
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    yukides_

    Hello! it's me, your author! please don't hesitate to put in your beautiful comments and make me happyyyy I would feel relieved that people are indeed enjoying my work ♡

    2yr
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    savagequeen999517

    What we have here is a masterpiece,mind blowing,well written, beautifully made work 👏👏👏👏👏 I am speechless I don't know what to say but what I know is I LOVE ITTTTTT!❤️ Don't quit!

    2mth
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    xlntz
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    Hmm... The story's flow is cool. I like it. However, not sure why no one mentioning about the sentence structure? Normally, a sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a period. But almost all sentences here start with small letters. Not sure why it's like that. Anyway, a simple auto-correct function will help in that... no big deal. Other than that, it's really nice concept as well since the author is doing his/her research well. keep it up!

    2yr
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    Obaze_Emmanuel

    I love the setting of the story very intriguing I must say well done author 🙋🙋💯

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    Thalia_Ilace

    This novel has a lot of potential as the story itself is intriguing, however, I do believe it needs a lot of work to reach that potential. A lot of the sentences tend to ramble and are very repetitive and while this is something that can be utilized to amplify the tension or feeling in a scene or dialogue, that was not done properly here. There's also a lot of telling instead of showing. I felt like as soon as there was any sort of question on anything that had me curious, that curiosity was squashed when the information was given right after. The flow felt quite jagged due to the above mentioned as well which made reading along feel like quite a drag despite the essence of the story being very intriguing so it felt very unfortunate and frustrating because I WANTED to read more but it felt really difficult to do so. Character descriptions were practically non existent for the characters other than Lust (and I liked that his description was simple but painted a clear picture in my head with only a few words). It also is a bit confusing because Persephone marries Hades in usual mythology and it seems like this novel tends to follow that, however, Hades and Satan are not the same person/do not have the same origin. Satan rules over Hell and Hades rules over Hades/the Underworld but the Underworld is not the same place as Hell. Satan is an angel who opposed God and is a ruler of evil, while Hades is a God who rules over the land of the dead. So it seems you mixed/confused two different pieces and while I do think this is something that is doable, I don't feel it was executed correctly with the set up. The first chapter is a "prologue" so I thought that Chapter 2 would jump right into the plot in the summary, but instead of the prologue being contained to the first chapter, it was dragged out to many chapters after. I think it would be better to change these chapters to the auxiliary volume for the complete prologue, or this part of the plot should be made apparent in the summary since it's such a drastic change from what the summary explains. I think that these are quite easy fixes and just need some polishing so don't give up. This novel has a lot of potential! You can do it author!

    2mth
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    Stina_Sia

    I read your stories and really enjoyed it, If I may give my feedback, the topics you choose are very interesting, and I hope you continue creating such amazing stories, also i have some ideas for you

    2mth
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    yukides_

    yall better start supporting me or face my wrath

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