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Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra
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Abandoned on the battlefield, all he could do was endure the hellish life.
He had no family to rely on, as they had turned their backs on him.
A soul from the battlefield, Lucavion Thorne.
But apparently, he was a lot more than a mere soldier, as fate had many things stored for him.
A soul from Earth....When they merged, he realized.
He was a one-chapter villain whose sole purpose was to serve as a background setting for the protagonist's tragedy.
But was he truly a one-chapter villain, or did fate still have some tricks up its sleeve?
Watch the story of Lucavion Thorne as he finds the purpose behind his transmigration and discovers his own fate.
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Chapter Length 1500-2000
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man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories
Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.
Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you
The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.
five star from me, cuz why not. i enjoyed both of authors previous works. all the best for this book also.
I may be biased due to reading the author other works (Hunter Academy: Revenge of the Weakest) This is very good start. Still too early to give my full thoughts of the story but from knowing the author previous work I know I'm going to love this story. One thing I love what the author does is he takes his time with the main character development and power level. I am so tired of reading a op main character who barley worked hard to obtain their power. shattered innocents we see the mc struggle and I am so excited to see how he will prevail and get back at everyone who wronged him. Maybe I'm just odd but I like seeing a main character who we see starts at the bottom and crawl their way to the top. Overall, I'm quite excited to see how this story will unravel. i do hope the author will have the main character have guy friends (I do not mean Bl lol) Typically with stories with harems the mc only surrounded by women. They don't have guy friends if they do it's like comedy relief. I hope I explain that well like I want the mc having his own group his bros. I hope explained what I thought well this was my first time writing a review so if I made a mistake cut me some slack.
Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach
The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.
Just an opinion after I read few chapters... the author uses purple proses a bit too much. The excessive descriptions are unnecessary and to the point of obsession. 🤢 It doesn't change at all. NOT. AT. ALL. More I read, more I get that. Overall story is good but the roundabout narration seems deliberate only to increase the number of words to reach the per chapter word quota and hence, individually the chapter lack substance. The world setting seems alright (though much wasn't revealed), the character design was likeable too, even the plot development was great. However, the purple proses are what make it shit for me. I know that only shows how dedicated the author is towards certain details but they really are unnecessary. Better to burn your brain cells on something else for efficient writing - that's what I want to say.
Bro, have you really given up on EROTIC RPG ??you took a new novel ,which you are going to update 1 chapter everyday . But you haven't updated a single chapter of erotic rpg for 6 month straight. Now you are treating it like middle child .
320 chapters in, time for a review: First of all I love this book, I am really happy that I decided to endure on and read through this book. But before I start glazing, I have to give criticism. This is probably just me being soft but the first 30 chapters are difficult to read because they are just too realistic. What the mc goes through is just pure trauma and sadness. Its like Murphy law where everything that could go wrong happens. The mc feels pathetic. It just feel grating to read how the poor boy has to suffer. The fact that mc is transmigrated into the book but at the same time has no memories/ sealed memories is a bit new and confusing for me especially with "Extra" setting. I wont lie I was on the edge of giving up multiple times during there chapters but I do understand there are important for building the story. However I would have appreciated a disclaimer in the synopsis explaining or warning about this. Now to the good part: I always appreciate a smart anti-hero mc. The bipolar nature and resourcefulness are a nice blend. The interactions mc has with "Valeria" specially are very refreshing and helps the readers understand how the mc will interact with the rest of the world. The smile that hides 1000 secrets. I have to say the character developments of the side characters is well done. A lot of books just dump 5 sides characters at once and give some specific personality traits regarding them and that's it Which leads to some of the most boring characters which you hope to just die. But thankfully the author puts efforts to actually build these characters and makes them feel like real people. Currently the author is using multiple chapters of solo-interactions with the other characters to build familiarity which I am enjoying quite well. If there characters were just dumped into the academy arc the characters would have been much more boring.There is also a lot of forshadowing regarding future characters and this builds anticipation for future events. All in all I have to say the book is in a very good place at the moment and I hope this continues in the future.
Read the whole thing, the pacing is good if you don’t have a TikTok brain like half the reviewers. The Mc slowly adapts like a human and once he overcomes his mental block it gets 1000x better. The emotions the Mc feels in the story aren’t too forced and the supporting characters are fleshed out enough as well. The main drawback is the fact that most of the females are super cliche, Fe: Crazy yandere Tsun tsun knight Childhood best friend who has always loved him And prob the Flmc of the original story after she finds the truth They aren’t very real feeling. I’d rather no romance than the stereotypical harem that will not progress and will just be used as filler in between plot points. Overall not bad ig. Has pontential to be amazing and could be someone’s favorite story.
Too much rubbish info. So wastage of time is one issue. But secondly, the story was good at start but the mc progression just went from extremely low to extremely high so fast that the rhythm of whole story was ruined. I feel very disappointed because of it. Thirdly after all this the mc is kind even though he says he is not but he sure acts like a saint (I dont know if I should be happy or sad for it) . Truely a miracle there. Lastly he is becoming a idiot as the story is progressing. I liked the story far better before that cat came into his life(unnecessary extra) . I am at 160 ch now. And I hope it will get better ahead.
In general, I liked the character development and the story. I hope you continue like this[img=update] The tournament section was extended and some battles were too long 4-6 sections are too much for 1v1s, it starts to get repetitive.
He leído hasta el cap 278,puedo decir que el autor a ganado experiencia y su escritura es pulida es entendible,puedes sentir las emociones y experiencias escritas,para los nuevos diría que lean los hasta cuando el protagonista es obligado a ir a la guerra y pueden paras directo al segundo volumen,claro se perderán muchas cosas que se darán cuenta hasta después,pero no afecta mucho,y digo que pueden saltar esa parte porque el protagonista está en su peak,tiene los recuerdos de su vida pasada y la experiencia de la guerra,pongo esta reseña con mi experiencia leyéndola ya que mire que dejaron la historia porque al inició es difícil de leer,igual fui uno de los que casi se va por eso hasta que vi un comentario que ne saltar el volumen 1 y mira asta donde llegue,gracias autor y espero que sigas con esta hermosa obra ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥
This is a story worth reading. Give it a shot. It has a familiar setting and setup for web novel veterans, but it is well written, has interesting characters, and picks up steam as you go along. It could use less internal monologues and philosophical musing, but that's not too big a deal. The one gripe I have is multiple POVs around the same events. If they add to the story or reveal some aspect that is not covered in Lucavions POV, fine. However, there are multiple instances where the pov changes and the same event is described, eye witness like, with little added commentary or content that advances the plot. Aside from this, so far, I've had a blast reading, and strongly recommend readers try out this new spin on novel transmigration.
Starting off with the Mc. For reference, I have read up to chapter 254 as of this review. ——— Writing quality: In terms of grammar and the like, I have seen no major issues. Although a silly spelling error or two have occured, they have not ruined my immersion. So grammar wise, it is quite alright. One compliment for the style is when it enters a combat. The author is not as ‘blunt’ with his writing style and combats. Many times during combats and what not, he gives good detail, which truly help one ‘imagine’ the scenery. Other times, it’s to the point. This is a balance in which I personally believe the author has done well in maintaining. ——— Story Development: This story has not progressed super fast IMO. However it hasn’t been slow either. The author has done quite well in pushing forward the story and the world as a whole. One thing in which I believe was done quite well was the transmigration. -This paragraph will now go into minor spoilers.- One thing in which I typically dislike is how single focused some of the works that delve into this become on this topic. They make it the entire story. Which don’t get me wrong, is fine. But can sometimes feel repetitive. Here the author has done quite well in not fully focusing on it. Though like all, there is some cheat like aspects. An entire point of being someone with prior knowledge. But minus the one mage inheritance, all of the things he knows are character based. Such as the convictions of the pink knight. A welcome change to the usual extort resources from everywhere because prior knowledge. -SPOILERS END HERE- ——— Character Design: Overall the characters have had enough depth to think about. They have goals. They have reasons, and not just ones that exist but actually hold weight. And perhaps most importantly, they don’t exist to just prop up the mc’s design. There is unreasonable people, like real life, and there is reasonable ones as well. The author has done quite well in making important characters intricate and still having some depth to those in which are not important. I personally have quite enjoyed the characters as a whole. ——— World Background: Perhaps my most conflicted part here. The world background exists. And when it is shown, it does not disappoint. However, I have yet to see foreshadowing of events to come. Of things happening to show the world is just that, a world. Although it still feels like one, I personally feel this aspect needs more attention. Of course it could be I am dense, and have missed points of not so obvious foreshadowing… ——— Overall Review: CONTAINS LOTS OF SPOILERS! I personally have enjoyed this novel thus far and now will go in depth of for my review of the story as a whole. Starting off this novel is a transmigration one. This can sometimes be forgotten by the reader. But this is the case: We join our mc in a world where he is immediately framed, and cast off by his family for the ‘betrayal’ he did. The ones in which should have loved him the most refused to hear him out. Yet there seemed to be no reason… were the bonds forged a lie? We soon arrived at the war arc. (My favorite arc story building wise). Our mc, truly just a boy without the benefit we were seemingly promised. His identity as an otherworlder didn’t continue it seemed. At least for now. As time passed, our mc grew strong bonds through war. But war is not kind. Those he built bonds with would fall, for he was still weak. Names in which could’ve been so important to be remembered, forgotten. Perhaps only a select few readers and the mc will remember. Naturally, no mc is an mc without some opportunity. Hence Gerald came into the picture. Originally just an old man, he was a bit more than that. Though grasping his strength even now can be difficult, he seemed to be an old man with knowledge and a way forward. He knew why the Mc was stuck. His innate body had stopped him from progressing. Furthermore, something came to light, this body is passed on, and limits one life to a mere two decades. And perhaps even more concerning, it is hereditary. Which brings the question: which one of his parents had it? Sadly the Mc was not informed of this horrible information, yet we were. Left to wonder; and perhaps soon forget. The path for our Mc would be opened by this man, and the typical ‘who am I?’ Seemingly resolved, giving us back the man with knowledge of the future. The path for the mc to grow was set. One would reach for the stars, and use them. Then came the Duke. A man who could be understood, if one tried to at least. Born with such a position, and falling in love. Then through series of misconceptions, killing his best friend who he believed had done taken the wrong path, and only then, realizing what he had done as the man he held the strongest bond with perished before him. But this is not the Duke’s story. As we transition back to the Mc, he knows the fate before him if he stays in this war. Death. The war was lost before it was waged. Using this knowledge, he planned his escape. Alone once again. He had grown, two-stars if one could believe it! But now, he was on the run; and the only place that was ‘safe’ was a deadly forest. As we transition into the arc where he meets the cat. Although I disliked it at first, opportunity must sprout from somewhere. This cat, a mythical beast, in which was connected to his master. Was it fate or coincidence? One cannot know, but it offered another unique power. One of life and death. An answer to the clock he is on? Or perhaps a justification of why he is so close to this unique death energy. One which would not be answered. At least yet. He would be forced to grow in this forest, and a monster would be born; and do not be mistaken, a monster he was. Hence the importance of the next location. The search for a sword. His estoc had failed him. Or so it seemed. For instead he had failed it. He came to a small town plagued by bandits, and found the man who he believed could make him a sword. However, this was not without a challenge, he was tasked to kill bandits, and to make it harder, he must use the blade he has now. For it was not the blades fault, but his. Hence begun a journey of finding a balance between the beast, and finesse. This would found, and we would see his strength truly for the first time. He had once again grown. This would earn him his sword. And let him meet the pink knight. The pink knight was someone understandable. She had convicitons and she had goals. She had come for glory, not for herself, but her family. Our mc offered another perspective. Is that all this knight wished for? The two would funnily enough find themselves on the same path as one another, and meet at a tourney. Here, the mc would use his knowledge once more. For himself, and for others. Whether it be underminding what seems to be an evil sect, or helping someone he knows so much about. Now before you is a summary, and I believe it paints how I saw this novel quite well. It has been a journey: one filled with excitment, curiousity, and wonder. And one I would highly recommend you at least try.
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great characters, they are almost tangible. The world building is efficient and effective, almost all of the details were necessary for the story except for some details about cultivation being unclear. Great dialogue for all characters. character interactions are interesting and portray the traits of the characters effectively.
Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.