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David never thought he would be transmigrated after a tired day of work. Waking up to the feeling of nausea. But there he was... Now on his feet up in the middle of a dark room with his other siblings there.
"I'm Forrest?" Looking around David was shaken as he assessed his situation. David was in for a surprise as the son of Flint and the second eldest of the family as Brock's little brother.
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There will be no "Levels" or "Talents".
The Story will be more realistic with add-ons by myself of course. But I won't make the story "dark" as I enjoy Pokemon for the brighter side of the series and catching Pokemon.
Some cities, towns, or small pieces of information will be made up myself to fit the story.
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Écrire un avisIf y’all got questions on things about the fic then I’ll gladly reply if I think it’s fine to answer. This fic is just something I’m doing out of boredom and am doing in class as I procrastinate. That’s a lot of time to make chapters lol. But don’t get me wrong, this fic is “planned out” but I tend to change things a lot xD. So nothing is set in stone just yet.
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Awesome pokemon story. Very original in choosing a sibling of brock as the MC. I love the family dynamic, his choice of pokemon, and the overall trajectory of the story so far. Grammar and updating speed are on point as well. Nothing truly to disparage or criticize that wouldn't be nitpicking or personal preference. also Bea is wifey for lifey material. Just saying. Keep up the good work!
Have enjoyed it so far time seems like a factor unlike in a lot of other stories. Another thing is that the mcs choices seems resonable
Me gusta como va la trama como va con las capturas y como usa los recursos a su disposición como futuro líder de gimnasio por qué enserio si no los usas a su máxima capacidad y usas el conocimiento sobre dónde están los pokémon más raros y no los atrapas entonces no deberías tomar la ruta de un entrenado ni deberías estar en el mundo pokémon pero como única cosa la historia necesitaría más contexto porque eso es lo que hace que las historias pokémon como está sean grandes porque para mí los capítulos son algo muy cortos de lo que deberían pero por lo demás me gusta como va la trama su historia y como aprovecha su conocimiento para solo tener lo mejor su uso de movientos como va el entrenamiento sus planes para el futuro y como no hay potencial porque cualquier pokémon debería ser fuerte si lo entrenas con todo lo que tienes y con todo de lo que es capaz debido a tu guia y apoyo además de otorgarles a él o ella dietas y entrenamiento personalizado podrían ser superiores a cualquiera que no lo haga mejor o no tenga mejores resultados de otro modo serían máquinas que puedes cambiar cuando un modelo se vuelta "oxoleto" pero estoy divagando solo agregaría más palabras a los capítulos más conversaciones con los Pokémon porque es fundamental para este tipo de historia y un poco más contexto en las luchas y paisajes en los que valla en su viaje los aspectos de la vida cotidiana ya serían un bono pero por lo demás no cambiará nada es muy buena historia
Spoiler de révélationIt's a gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood story... now go read it ya jelly filled donut.
ok so writing quality is awesome and the author updates regularly what i think is a bit lackluster is the story development because of the fast pace events. it isn't bad persay but still can be improved on by adding some events here and there. another thing i want to add is character development the character of MC is good but other characters are not well fleshed out such as Flint and Bea. one tip is that you can make Bea's character more serious as anime in the beginning and slowly mellow the character to show the willingness to interact ( the cafe interaction was good but you could have added it bit further in the story ) overall the story is fantastic you can improve on the story as you progress I am looking forward to see the story progress
Interesting I haven’t read a fanfic about Forrest I like the direction this is going. And a bug plus is he actually takes advantage of knowing Information from the show
The story is progress very well, up until now. Just hope you won't drop it.👍👍. w8 for more chapters😁
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So far I’ve enjoyed the story. I Cant wait for it to get even better!